I like how this seems to be a stream of consciousness, as you search for that one moment of breakthrough. It would be awesome if you fleshed this out even more (maybe adding a few stanzas to it) to really show what these feelings are doing. I thought the last stanza is fantastic. Keep on writing!
I like how this seems to be a stream of consciousness, as you search for that one moment of breakthrough. It would be awesome if you fleshed this out even more (maybe adding a few stanzas to it) to really show what these feelings are doing. I thought the last stanza is fantastic. Keep on writing!