Let's stalk about it

Well this is taking creepy to a whole new level

She stares at me with her blank motionless eyes. As if I was the only other person in the room. Dude her stares go straight through you and pierce your heart. How do i tell her i don't like her like that and i just want to stay friends. Dude Mark listen to me just tell her you are wierd and creepy an nobody likes you. Lucy walks up behind them as they are talking. She walks up at the wrong time just after Mark says, Jason im not going to tell lucy, she walks up now to hear him say, you are wierd and creepy nobdoy likes you and I will never ever ever love you. Lucy walks away wispering to herself (yeah she is one of those people) if I can't have him nobody can. Around 3 a.m Lucy arrives at Marks house where he is fast asleep she quickly grabs a ladder she knows everything about mark so she climbs in the window with her Mark boyfriend doll (yeah deal with it) Mark is a very heavy sleeper as Lucy knows from watching him sleep in class. Lucy switches him out for the doll and leaves. When she gets home around 5 she heads straight for the basement, where she finds a chair and sits Mark down and ties him to the chair. The next day nobody has seen Mark. Back in Lucys bacement Mark wakes up around 10 his phone is missing he has no clue where he is, he feels something brush up against his leg he starts freaking out his heart pounding against his chest. He struggles to get free his heart keeps pounding he hears the garage door open and he yells for help then someone starts coming down the basement stairs. He manages to get the bandana covering his mouth off so he can scream for help. All you hear is a faint IT'S YOU

Author's Note

First story sorry it sucks but it was the first thing I ever wrote

Reviews

[lady_idril]

Good read. I'd break it up into smaller paragraphs just for visual aesthetics so that it's easier to look at and it's not all one big lump. Otherwise, I liked the content.

[Gabby Gellerman]

thanks this is actually the first story i ever wrote. and I've been writing ever since it'll be 3 years in october

[lady_idril]

Cool. If that's the case, maybe you can critique my work on here? I've been writing since I could read, but this is the first bit to hit this site.

[Gabby Gellerman]

agh nice just message me what you want me to read

[lady_idril]

I only have one book up.

[Gabby Gellerman]

cool ill check it out in a bit

[Sami Khalil]

A worthy of reading story. Bravo... pen on...:)......

[Gabby Gellerman]

thank you I'm about to post one of my newest short stories inspired by a painting

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........

[Gabby Gellerman]

:) The strings of life

[M.E.Lyle]

I was a little confused at first, but then things started coming together. It is suspenseful. That Lucy is weird, and freaky.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good tale so far. I like the set-up of the story. You gave reason and purpose for the kidnapping. I like the conversation and the surprise ending. I will keep reading. A excellent opening chapter.
Coyote

[Mikayla_Stagg]

Short, but to the point. A little weird. Suspenseful though. Not bad