Winter Cabin

A submission for the "TEN WORD CONTEST"

The wind blows a chilling breeze
As I REST within a blissful warmth
Born from the flames of burning fuel
I lay here TIRED, snug at last

Squint my eyes, awake from slumber
An apparent winter, the WINDOW shows
Uncover my blanket, wield my SWEATER
Outside the ROOM, away he goes

I brace myself, my clothes still WARM
Clasp my hands, my breath so FOGGY
I stand outside, my CHEEKS rose RED
This beautiful glace, I've lived to see

Behind me, my cabin clad in the woods
Built with effort, not BIG but thorough
Exist in the cold, this frigid life
I was born in winter, a child of snow

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

I agree with Christine's evaluation. you made a meaningful adaptation from the Ten Words.
Although it is exciting to Place in a contest, I stopped doing Word Prompts, in favor of choosing my words when writing. "Their Words" are empty until we fill them with meaning. Once the selected words are integrated into a writing we have no need to continue. I prefer to allow (the writing) to determine where it should end, and what words fit best with the other words.

[Lox]

I feel the same way! The only reason I joined said contest is that lately I've been lacking inspiration and kinda have a mental-block of sorts. I thought building around specified words would be challenging.

Its like someone giving you seeds and you handle how they grow. Although, the given words may grow similar given the almost-same theme. I feel like this is the only way to go with these words, I checked other entries and they all made similar poems to mine..

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Understandable. Blessings and good tidings.

[JE Falcon]

Well, now you've gone and done it! --- I was taken by your words into the same chill of morn. --- Burrr, isn't it great?!?

[Lox]

Thank you for feeling the winter breeze with me haha. Surprised this still pops up in people's newsfeeds.

[JE Falcon]

I'm a bit of a searcher, sometimes. LOL

[Betty Hermelee]

Lovely images created in this piece, there is something magical about a fresh snow, you show an elderly person, resting, tired, but the outside scene brings him joy. I also like the description of the cozy cabin, sound like it built with hard work and love.
Very nice!

[Lox]

Thanks Betty.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this reminds of Thoreau...he would have liked this...the simplicity of the cabin, the blanket, the sweater, the warmth among the cold...."a cabin clad in woods" is a great line.
a heart staying tepid within a cold woods...like a baby in a womb.
I agree with previous comments...I am not a fan of these kinds of contests...but somehow you made this work without it sounding like you forced the ten words into it.
j.

[Lox]

Wow that's exactly what I was going for. Coming from an experienced writer like you, your input made my day thanks!

it also sounds like you've been to places. Do you travel?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Not that many, but a few....Most states between here and Maine...having come from the East.

[Lox]

Do you inspire some of your works from these few travels?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that might be true, but everyday life gives me my inspiration the most...
relationships of the past, memories of growing up...things like that.

[NotUsinganymore]

Cabins certainly are comfortable in the winter and not in the summer because of bugs. Very nice decriptions.

[Lox]

Thanks for the review JungLee, may I also check out your works? Is there anything you'd recommend?

[Chris Shaw]

Did you get to choose the words or were they chosen for you? Whatever the answer Lox your Winter Cabin was a delight to read. I am a child of winter too. Born in February, just before spring awakenings.

Chris

[Lox]

Ah yes the ones capitalized are the words required for the contest. Thought it'd be challenging to build on them but kinda worried other contestants would create the same themed poem since the words do kinda feel they'd be used similarly to what I did

[Chris Shaw]

It doesn't matter. You have put your own unique stamp on your poem :)