I wrote you something

I wrote you something
Today in class
A love note if you may

With the swiftness of my pen

I wrote about
The simplicity of our perfect day.

I composed you something
While sitting at my desk
A love song if you please

The notes so sweet
And the beat so sure
I can sing it for you with such ease

I've created you something
I hope you enjoy it
It's only words you see

But put to the sound of your voice...
It's real, it's mindblowing, it's perfection.

Reviews

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Very nice flow and rhythm...Great job!

[Tania Leigh]

Lillian, the flow here is exceptional....this is a very happy, uplifting poem :-)

[T. R. Writer]

I like how innocent this sounds. Reminds me of love when it is new and passionate and full of life, hope and optimism. Only if it could say that way, but perhaps I am being cynical :) Great job!

[Lorna Lee]

Being a hopeless romantic myself, I was drawn into this piece and was able to picture myself back in school...daydreaming and feeling the draw of attraction to that boy that had stolen my heart. This is the first poem of yours that I have read and I am anxious to read the others as you have a very light and easy flow to your words that I welcome in my chaotic world. Thank you for sharing.

[Vatsayayana]

Wow!
This was so sweet and so smooth, all the way through... but the last bit.
Bam! It came out of nowhere and just blew me away!

"It's real, it's mindblowing, it's perfection."

This gave what you wrote so much strength. Power. It completely awed me.
I love it!

[Shadows of Sight]

ahhh. spring must be nears as romance begins to grip our minds and our pens!
Wonderful write!

[Amy]

Beautiful. I love it. It's so sweet and flows so well, and has a simple elegance to it. You don't have to read into it too far and it leaves you with a warm feeling. Bravo.