Can You See Me?

You never know what you've lost until it is too late

Can you see me?

I’m that guy who blends right in.

No one ever noticed me

No one ever praised me

I’m happier this way

 

I raise my hand occasionally in class

But today the teacher does not see

What’s wrong with everyone?

Why are they so sad?

Some of the girls break down in tears

My teacher fights to hide her own

What’s wrong? Why can’t you see me?

 

The day ends; I head home

Greet my parents when I get in

But my greeting falls on deaf ears

I find my mother in my room; her eyes red and tear-streaked

What’s wrong, mom? Why are you crying?

I’ll clean my room, I promise!

Just please don’t cry!

 

I found my father at the cemetery

On his knees, praying, crying.

Crying, “Lord, why did you take my son from me?”

Hearing that I looked down at the tombstone at his feet

And saw my name engraved there

No, this can’t be right!

I cried out to my dad.

Please, dad, I’m right here!

Please, dad, don’t be sad!

Author's Note

When you feel like you've lost everything, just remember there are those who will always love you and care about you; a lesson I needed to learn a few years back.

Reviews

[Nimbus Thread]

Well told in pace and concept. A classic ending too!

[deeps]

This is amazing! I really enjoyed this.
Su much emotion in this write.
Very well written and expressed.

[Michael X]

Wow, just a really awsome poem in thought, i really felt the adventure of the idea play through and its always great when the reader gets hooked on a plot.
the tone and is talented work, keep it up

[Annie29]

Very moving.
I had a different idea about this poem untill
I got to the second stanza.
I knew then (: