WAVES & SEA

Something about life

Out of emptiness,
for a true smile i search
filled with hope
looking for some one who cares
faces changed ,life is passing...
but no one is there........


How long shall i stay like that?
is it not  enough what has passed?


Something wrong with me???
Something wrong with  People i see?
If not...
why am i not getting peace?

I have choose my role from what i was taught
life is passing and i am getting the same result,

Why am i not getting peace around!!!
Its either the atmosphere ,or what' s in the cup
Or both of them
otherwise peace would have been found

Author's Note

you have been kind with me so far, thanks for the good words that i have received

Reviews

[Elisa]

My favorite stanza is probably the first one. It is so full of longing and sadness, but there's a soothing feel to the syntax that's really interesting. I would try to harness that feel a little bit further into the poem, so when you begin to cry out for peace, the dichotomy is even stronger. Thank you for suggesting this to me!

[EMW]

This has great emotion to it. Great detail and flows perfectly. This is one of my favorite poems that you've written. As all the other comments say this is wonderful.

[Magdelena]

My dear friend.. Why peace is all around you. You just have to reach out, it is there. Sometimes we see with blinders on, and the thing in front of you is lost to sightless eyes, mind. Instead look inside, for there lies true peace, the goodness that stays within is the sound you hear, the peace that shall free you to be where you want with who you want. Dreams are to be shared, such is peace, to live to the fullest we must move toward that light that is before us bringing us out of the darkness that invades our thoughts into the light that will make us whole..

Well done on this.. I raise my hand in peace and wonder

Mags xx

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[A]

This life for me is a journey to find peace... But sadly sometimes the journey ends before peace is found... Good job.

[Gypsie]

Cutting to the point when self doubt rises within us. Excellent subject, very nicely done.

[Stef Outsiders]

this is really good, the flow is better and has more meaning... some can relate... good!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

beautiful and sad I love the title and how it contrasts with the poem like inside our souls are flowing sometimes raging and never fully at peace

this was touching I liked it a lot

100/100

[?]

I so agree with the others, our peace comes within ourselves, our own heart. Cannot find peace through others, (and when we stop searching then that is when we find it.)

Oh now your thinking too hard, lol
Loved this, very thought provoking piece.

[LA Lorena]

I think peace has to come from within ourselves, and happiness too. If we look to others to provide these things for us, we will always be disappointed. This was a thought provoking and inspired write. Nice!

[Lucy]

Interesting piece, and very thought provoking! Good work!