IT'S FOR YOU ROSE ( part 2)

Rose's safety

And words went

into different depths

How deep it went.
How settled it was?
Time will tell...

Past is gone, but is full.……
Life is short, but in front...

Smile could be spread
In faces and depths,
We all have same father and mother
We all come from Eve and Adam.

Avoiding some things around
Help words to spread in parts
Until it, find a cave in your inside
Where it will stay for the rest of your life
Just to help you  to choose and  to verify.

For this safety,
You committed yourself to his garden

Whatever his garden is....
You have stayed committed,
Because of this safety....

If it takes that much to achieve your aim,
Start freely by filling proper words in your cave
And enjoy the winning of this safety...

so whatever he picks
He will surely come back to your place.
He will be like a bird
Who only finds happiness at his nest
Because of that safety...

You are the queen of the cave
You build it by working nights and days.

When the empire is large, enough
You will hear the sound of love when it comes

but when noise is around

hard it will be to hear that special sound

.

 

Author's Note

be fair

Reviews

[Helen Crutchett]

Wow, this is truly outstanding. Some really deep thoughts beautifully constructed. I really enjoyed this fantastic poem. Bravo!

[Joiedevivre]

in all fairness, very good write and the metaphors of the cave and the safety of a garden resonate with me.

[Tahna]

"When the empire is large, enough
You will hear the sound of love when it comes
but when noise is around
hard it will be to hear that special sound" I like this its pretty and ends the poem well, even though I know theres a part 3...
Ypur use of words really makes this poem, very nice, no complaints from me :)

[Jill Wallflower]

again I could be wrong. But we give up a part of ourself. We will always come back if then love is true

like this :)

[highthought]

Mag its hard to stay away from temptations, but it is worth it to reduce our running

[?]

You have us all thinking now,
This is actually very good, with a lot of meaning.
Loved the ending,
when nois is around
hard it will be to hear that special sound

Love speaks quietly

[Lily Mae]

What I take from this is that we sometimes sacrifice a part of ourselves for love. Lets say we see more in someone then they see in themselves. If I see value in worth in a person I will always wait.. even if it's a flicker not a flame..xx

[Magdelena]

Interesting... To me the woman needs that safety. The feel of love makes her stronger, with wings her scent is sent to her beloved, yet sometimes he may not hear, or understand.. The power is real, as is the nest, (Feelings) that she keeps close.. Ahh, Yes, noise can sometimes make us deaf, this is true, for inside the head it lays. It is up to us to quiet the sound and move forward. No?

You do have a unique way with your words. I so love how you bring them forth..
The ending, made this into a masterpiece..

Mags xx

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Yes, it is unique. I like the last verse.. it is hard to hear loves sound with noise all around... interesting poem- enjoyed reading this.

Chloe