LOVE

He said "I love u" she said "u lie "

He said

 "I love you"

She said

 "you lie"

Your health is good

so is your smile....

Love

 makes you ill

In love!

When they call you !

they get no reply.

love

leaves nothing !

but eyes to cry

Reviews

[Elizabeth Boughner]

I really enjoyed this. It is very true, and I especially loved how you started the poem. It gave it a great beginning. And I also like how you set it up as getting smaller towards the end. Makes it interesting to read.

[~Lizzy♬]

This poem speaks the truth so much. I can't say that I didn't like it, but I loved it truly. The bad thing is that I'm already in love with my best friend... oops... Wonderful write!

~Lizzard~

[EyesClosed]

aw, i love it!

[Lily Mae]

Very true poem... xxx

[?]

Very nice, I like the last 2 lines

[Althelia Marie Caine]

I get what you mean.

[GrownUpTime]

i defidently agree. perfectly written.

[Friend of a Friend]

I really liked it and I think that your use of line break and punctuation are very powerful, however the effect can be diminished if it is over used. If you removed one of the exclamation points, maybe "When they call you !" I think it would definitely bring it to another level.

[highthought]

when you are in love. you just dont hear their calls, you are busy thinking of ur love.
yeah cant hear even their advice