LOVE
A Poem by
highthought
He said "I love u" she said "u lie "
He said
"I love you"
She said
"you lie"
Your health is good
so is your smile....
Love
makes you ill
In love!
When they call you !
they get no reply.
love
leaves nothing !
but eyes to cry
© 2011 highthought
Reviews
The short and simple get to the point subject of "Love is bad!" was portrayed well in this poem. It was clever with the hint of truth as well. Well done.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
he surrounded to his love and that was his end .. i wouldn't say love is bad...i would say let it co.. read more he surrounded to his love and that was his end .. i wouldn't say love is bad...i would say let it comes in but do not swim to the max
I love your work
Very witty and smart
Not to mention playful
Just as is the nature of love
Thank you for sharing :)
Posted 9 Years Ago
I love your work
Very witty and smart
Not to mention playful
Just as is the nature of love
Thank you for sharing :)
I liked how you took such a common point of he said she said and something that is true, trust is hard to obtain... good write
Posted 12 Years Ago
I liked how you took such a common point of he said she said and something that is true, trust is hard to obtain... good write
Sweet, short, and I like how you started it off with dialogue in the poem. Adds a sense of communication to the love. I like it :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
Sweet, short, and I like how you started it off with dialogue in the poem. Adds a sense of communication to the love. I like it :)
short sweet poetic sad
Posted 13 Years Ago
short sweet poetic sad
Simple and Sweet. Such a nice poem.
Writing keeps the dream alive
~Roxi/V~
Posted 13 Years Ago
Simple and Sweet. Such a nice poem.
Writing keeps the dream alive
~Roxi/V~
Very true, I like the short verses, straight forward yet eloquent.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Very true, I like the short verses, straight forward yet eloquent.
You are right, the answer to te poem Do I Love Him? is in this poem!
A very well done piece. Thank you for writing.
Posted 13 Years Ago
You are right, the answer to te poem Do I Love Him? is in this poem!
A very well done piece. Thank you for writing.
Very poetic. And so simple and sweet. Nice!
Posted 13 Years Ago
Very poetic. And so simple and sweet. Nice!
Nicely written, I like the ending.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Nicely written, I like the ending.
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Added on March 7, 2011
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highthought
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Ok i am a male , English is my second language, so it's hard for me to give a fair review sometimes, so dont expect a lot..
i am a sales manager and, had this attraction to writing
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