THE FALLING

SHE WAS TOLD THAT HE DOESNT CARE

 

She was told

" Your husband cares no more "

They were answered

 "that's an easy thing to solve!

It takes nothing but a smile, and a look

His legs will shake!

 his body will fall "

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Simplicity is a very special thing to grasp. To say much in so few words - succinct in other words...Mozart once said 'To speak well and eloquently is a very great art but an even greater one is to know the moment to stop!' You have done that here...nicely spun...reminds me of my poem 'A Cry for Purity' - your review would be much admired on my part. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Catonia06]

very nice

[Sunni Davis]

Short but strong. I like this one.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I like this one a lot great imagery

[Magdelena]

Straight to the point.. Great imagery in so few a lines.

Mags xx

[JulieNorell]

I like it! It's strong and well said! Good job! :)

[Libby]

Really good.