Diabolical detonation

Diabolical has run amuck
   twisting maniacal wildflowers 

            in my brain stem,

uncompromising angst yanked out tresses

       purging stinging speech patterns,

poetic posies hung upside down to dry

        facing the other side of agony

in galleries of deranged snapshots

         and warped tapestry's poetry,

dancing to the tune of Led Zeppelin's 

   Sick Again on ceiling's concave tiles

my name written inside out

      twisted in Greek braille calligraphy 

calling out in compulsion's hysteria,

   no one heeded the sounds of synapses 

about a fated half moon's analytic rants,

    doomsday's synthetic clocks chimed 

        quarter to a cuckoo's nest,

   still awaiting on serendipity to surrender 

        in a curiouser rabbit hole's electric arc

relinquishing the language of 

              escaped rhyme's detonation

Author's Note

Reviews

[willweb]

Wow, now this was very cool. Your style Frieda P. is so very unique. Even something dark like this feels free....

"relinquishing the language of
escaped rhyme's detonation"

The way you say things, your phrasing is fantastic. Sorry to see your account is closed.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Without a break in the blackness of things you push the goodness off the cliff of abandonment. Tense, tight!

Regards,
Al

[redzone]

I must have been asleep on Jan 15th caused I missed a "diabolical" rich and haunting poem of yours.. and here it is almost a year later and it's as if I am reading all of your poems all over again... I think the line that struck me deepest was "my name written inside out" cause like all of your poems you let all your emotions, diabolical, sad, depressed, loverly, all of them that saturate you displayed on the page in inky tones and pull us into that dark dark rabbit hole... you bring us to such a beautiful soulful "detonation" Frieda and I for one welcome it, all of it!!

redzone

[Lydia Shutter]

A photograph in words....truly I could picture it all. Seeing your poetry again is just wonderful. "Poetic poesies hung upside down to dry"...what a surrealistic trip that paints for me! Your alliteration gives this poem a haunting rhythm that enchants....and that is no surprise. Welcome back, Ms. Pickle! Lydi**

[Lyn Anderson]

A dark yet crazily lucid journey, in your trademark style with a twist. Welcome back.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes i think my poems are just deranged snapshots of my reality. half-moon's analytical rants, because if the full moon came out it would show i was certifiably crazy...but maybe i am.
those rabbits better scoot---they will blow up with my poems...
this is so cool, you create a sort of "watership down" with this...look out for Fifer...

so good to read you again...

jacob

[Rene Salinas]

The attraction that is felt at times is not defined by the beauty of the object itself but how we feel about it. For example "Diabolique" running amok or its counterpart on the writing is a thing of beauty for me that is. I have always been attracted by the conceptual archetypes you create in words. It seems that it hasn't only manages to go wild but also determine several impressions and perceptions. Yet you still await maybe patiently maybe not, maybe in expectation of what may be brought to you.

Never a dull moment or so it seems.

Thank You.

[Frieda P]

I'm humbled by your kind words Rene, I so love reading your reviews, always gives me more insight into my own writing. Thanks so much. NO, never a dull moment...

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The thing about outer beauty is it can hide the ugly truth beneath the surface… quite a rhythmic tongue twister you have hear.

[Frieda P]

No doubt...you know I never like to make it too easy for ya Dale.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Good cause easy is boring :)

[Frieda P]

Glad to be of service. :)

[Matching Socks]

twisting maniacal wildflowers in my brain stem - I love the image this conjures

uncompromising angst yanked out tresses - has anyone ripped their hair out more poetically or beautifully than this!

Looks like you've still got that magic in you! :)

[Frieda P]

I should of used my own image. :) Thanks, you've certainly made my day Ana Sophia!

[Michael G.]

I read the poem - then I read the poem.
Then I looked at the picture you posted and suddenly - the poem fell into place. At least, for me.
Consistent in flow, as you always are.
(I never knew of a rabbit hole with an electric arc. Learning something new is always a good thing.)
I enjoyed the moments here - as always and usual. Mike

[Frieda P]

Ha rabbit hole comment made me laugh Mike...couldn't really find a suitable graphic, had to doctor one up, thanks for your thoughts.

[Michael G.]

Glad I brought a smile. Be excellent - as always!