Half past deliverance ~

Half past deliverance ~

A Poem by Frieda P
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_wicked nightmares, perhaps_

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Where the moon sets
     and crimson darkly rises,
living color in helter-skelter
      dreaded dreamscapes 
deafening core truths are pitted,
  inflamed hideous creatures
show their true nature's twist, 
posh ghosts reintegrate from dust
  reenacting on frosty terrain's 
     biting master plan scenario, 
haunting reverberation's, escort 
  splintered runaway strangers
     to have their own way
       free falling from the skies,
startled shortwave shocks 
   half past deliverance's aberrations 
            never to be assuaged
    in smoke and mirrors evocation, 
wounded eyes blink circumstance
      whilst incriminating prisoners
      strike as chord's regrets
          locked under surveillance,
appeased at the gates 
    of bloody damnation's incrimination
 reality's dawning light wavers subdued,
burbles of denial's bubbles popping
    fractured in existing frailty
    breathes contentment 
       in wakes allayed suspicions,
             daybreak filters on chance sanity 

© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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" runaway strangers
to have their own way
free falling from the skies" - wonderful line! Love what it says and the flow.

You and Kubla have such similar styles, was this a coincidence or do you inspire each other haha.

Lots of good sinister imagery. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Frontier, I didn't think so but many people have said, that's quite the compliment si.. read more



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vivid writing. Daybreak filters on chance sanity - I think that's my favorite line in this one. Really related to the madness pain brings in the late hours and how it twists the mind .Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Grazie mille Tam....
Once again Frieda P. your words send my mind spinning and I like the feeling. This was great and if you ever need help carrying your dictionary, just let me know. It must weigh a ton. I really enjoyed this today.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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willweb

10 Years Ago

Numbers? Sorry, no help here. Math and I dont get along real well.
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Same, we have a hate/hate relationship....
willweb

10 Years Ago

That seems to add up nicely. :)
I think the most unsettling thing about this is that is sounds as much like real life as it does a nightmare, if not more...I'm not sure I can even distinguish dreamscapes from my waking surroundings anymore because it's all dreaded really...you continue to amaze me with your imagery Mrs.R, and paint pictures that I can compare to none other that I've ever seen...the closing line is absolutely perfect...every day is an exercise in chance sanity, a frail bubble just waiting to be burst...you've done it again love...I had a harder time than usual reviewing this one...I think I'm running out of superlatives to articulate just how amazing your writing is...it's as good as it gets...there is no other poet that inspires me as much as you do...if a person who's never read poetry wants to know what it's all about, you're the one they need to read...xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha No but if I can it's a bonus ;) Always a pleasure my dear Frieda..xo
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You better have the smelling salts ready, and the check is in the mail Benji. :)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

:) xo .....
A powerful, moving vision that drives one so deep into the soul... Dark and mystic, your words awaken the fear that hides within....

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks Craig, we should combine our efforts and come up with a mid-way point. :)
wicked nightmare! it scares me to death 'inflamed hideous creatures' where are they, not in my head I hope, posh ghosts presumably wearing suits and ties and carrying rolled umbrellas, now that's scary, let me out of here and thank God for that dawning light of sanity.....not that I know what that is :) a brilliant poem as always Red' do you ever have an off day poetically?

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R Smith

10 Years Ago

operation break the vault underway, going to expose your so far unheard writings to the world, here .. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I think somebody is sloshed, started drinking without me again eh?.............
R Smith

10 Years Ago

hapi knew yeeaarrrrrrrrrrrr :P
Complex combinations of words, leading me down the page, trying to get the flow, determining where thoughts continue, or begin anew, always thought provoking and challenging. Well done, ma'am.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha fit of giggles here, you slay me cowboy MWAH!
NoelHC

10 Years Ago

A 10 W for Frieda v 3.0
You write.
Me read.
Brain hurt.
Me figure.
.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

HA perfect!!! You're almost as quick as the alien...
I wonder, when we fall into another treachery after dealing with personal treachery, if it doesn't double back and pummel us, plunging us into darkness and nightmares from the past, the present dragging us backwards in time ... but maybe that's just me ... Wonderful write, btw.:)

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I think you're on to something KL. :) Grazie mille.
Nightmares indeed… you paint a very dark scene… one of corruption and lurking horror… from, maybe, the viewpoint of the "Tell-Tale Heart," as if the beating heart beneath the floorboards is the narrator.

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Hmmm I like the notion...interesting perspective Momzilla, thanks so much.
MomzillaNC

10 Years Ago

You're welcome.
Wow. That is a mouthful! Very entrancing, these words are. The darkness of each line spun a vivid, enthralling tale. Wiked bliss! Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Wow thanks PL, muchly appreciate your glowing words!

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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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