Swallow (10 W)

Author's Note

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Well I think I started this somewhere in the middle but the humour behind this, is energising to say the least and as I see the impulse spreading to others writers it makes me wonder if the development of this theme will lead to episoded entitled Spit and of course Gargle.

Or did I again get a completely different meaning.....

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

The meaning is left in your hands once it leaves my pen...Spit & Gargle haha ;)

[Daniel Eckert]

Short and sweet very good indeed.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Daniel, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Frieda, what is this form called, "sibilant"? I really like what you've done!!

[Frieda P]

If it has a specific name I'm not aware of it, they do a lot of these 10 word poems on Hello Poetry and I like the challenge of it, the silibance alliteration happened purely by accident in trying to convey the thought. I just got lucky :) Thanks Kelly.

[Avinash]

It fires the imagination of all kinds. All equally beautiful. Loved the song too :)

[Frieda P]

I won't even ask. ;) Thanks Avinash....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

peppered with beautiful visuals, this short, sharp piece...

love it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much jacob.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hmmm... so many directions these 10 words could take the reader... all of them thought provoking. I like these brief glimpses, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I was so hoping for that effect, grazie mille Rita.

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting and poetic line.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[TL Boehm]

I want more. I wonder what that means. Wait. Don't translate that. Its beautiful from the no pink bar bent - and I want more of that.
From the spit and gargle perspective (laughed so hard when I read that) its brilliant writing - things that sound naughty but aren't - that kind of thing - its right on the money.
Good stuff, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Ha ha make up my mind Tam. Thanks...Rene is just a wee piggie. :)

[Scott Metro]

Oh goodness...this conjures up many thoughts....hah...all of which I dare not articulate..!!!!!
LOL
You're a strange one...he he.

Scotty
xo

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly for that Scotty! Nice to see you around wolfie. :) xo

[Cryingkate]

Sometimes those short writes can be swallowed as just plain great !
Good One Freida !

[Frieda P]

Thanks Kate.

[Lyn Anderson]

Okay, darling, I think you need to do a coffee table book of these or a set of post cards or something. They are that good. I have yet to read one of these from you that doesn't leave me with a sense of satisfaction and a smile.

[Frieda P]

Whoa, thanks sista dragon, means a lot coming from you....

[Lyn Anderson]

Hey, man, you know I don't stroke people with superfluous praise. Not my deal.

[Frieda P]

I know, exactly why I'm so jazz'd. :)