_Abstract Windowpain_

For my son ♥ “You don't drown by falling in the water; you drown by staying there.” Edwin Louis Cole

Abstract casements crack

   as electroscopic tendencies

      claw at open obi's dim glass,

blurred in kaleidoscopic scenery

   acid rains hit windowpain,

  profundity of hues out of skew

        seeping sunlight's gray views,

   onto the ledge of absurdity's escape

           fractured reflections of night,

  opulence of day slammed shut 

        on the avenue of broken security,

          apertures within the framework

   ten thousand tears of fear's sashes

         tune the refractory passages,

breathing in toxic airwaves 

     auspicious mornings took a dive

wafting throughout soul's austerity,

    rhyming outside a benign landscape

     overcast in panoramic technicolor,

    blinded in melody's  unlocked squeeze

            squinting through the eye of a needle

Author's Note

captcha-downwith ~Painting by Andrea Beech

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

It is intriguing to follow Frieda's poetry not only does it offer an intellectual challenge which is something I crave for but it is also challenging on the imaginative level as well. Double whammy. As I find myself taking it in hoping for a reflection of some sort I find a gesture that at times opens up but then i shuts quickly as ifnot let in all the negativity of the surroundings. At times also a feeling of eager anticipation followed by the acceptance of a challenging a situation that it is hard and it wishes to be resolved yet no obvious solution is on offer.

Painted experiences

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

That's my first 'double whammy' as a review, nice of you to say Rene, I'd like to quickly shut it down myself at times....

[beautiful dreamer]

once again you have woven words together to paint a picture for the world to see with your imagery and flow. its almost like paint on canvas. its art theres so many mays to interpret your writing. i just to choose to read and enjoy your technical wonderfulness.

[Bright Ocean Star]

FriedaP, I felt this one. I know why you directed this one to your son. I hope he sees it. It is powerful and endearing. You strike a delicate balance here. A balance only you can do with grace and beauty. Good luck, my friend.

[Briana O'Connor]

I really like the way you thought outside of the box on this piece. I started reading thinking it was about one thing and was led on a completely different adventure. I felt a very deep undertone that expressed great emotion. The flow was so flawless that it was fun to glide from line to line. I also like how you did not resort to simplistic wording, but added complexity and emphasis. This was a very good read. Thank you for sharing.

[Mayank]

Amazing imagery here, I sit at work and from window I see rain slashing on my window. The view of the ground is concrete jungle but I love watching the colors in the sky...

[Lauriegirl]

I love this writing. It flows beautifully and melodically.

[anne]

I don't have words....I am always blank after reading your work....words are too weak for such powerful poetry....felt splashes on strength, courage, emotions.........:))

[Cassie]

This too....my!!!!! assure me that you did not swallow a dictionary...this words, I had to literary read this poem going back to my dictionary...such a good poem this is. Loved it although you tortured me a lil bit, having to go back to my dictionary...not such a good thing, I need to up my game a lil bit..good job my friend

[hardeep sabharwal]

so well crafted, an interesting work to read here, you are superb

[Matching Socks]

Is that a pic of your son? :)
Showing off his muscles?
Window pain...
Sometimes the pain we feel, it's just on the surface, though it feels real enough... This too shall pass.

[Scott Metro]

Illuminating conceptual phrasing and woven well..
Nice.

Scotty