Lost religion...

an old scar revisited, please stop spewing religion to me, I have my own beliefs...Amen

You kiss the gray, 

   without doubting fluidity 

in validity's lividity 

true colors discourage faith 

   flying without wings,

          in sing- song's 

       ambushed blindness

sad melody of flippant travesty 

   swallowed the pill of crazy  

    taught to be elusively blithe 

played in rote from beginning's rhyme

     vinyl scratches misses and hits 

empty tanks given notes of faction's repose 

      believe the temporary sleeping giants 

not to be awakened within osculation 

    torn from the loins of lion's dens 

   sweet mysteries of yesteryear, 

     bitterly twisted lusting embers,  

never snuffed out in a place of retention 

    lives within the confines of distance skies 

broken trusts swallowed and dispersed 

    my eyes roll back in my head for sight, 

fleeting recognition of stories unfolded

                           once upon a time 

     dream a dream if slumber should awake thee,

taken out of the equation of perception 

   no words that make sense but pierce the soul 

      lost my religion with the plot  

pricked by the thorny rose a thousand wishes deep

Author's Note

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

sad melody of flippant travesty
swallowed the pill of crazy
taught to be elusively blithe
played in rote from beginning's rhyme

UFF DA! Ok I'll bite. (but not hard) first this is a powerful write and I think those lines speak loudest to me. I am a Christian. I have a relationship with God. (its dysfunctional - we're working on that) and that's the key. When you take it by rote, when you swallow the pill and you never ever look God square in the eye and make it personal - when you dole out judgement for your laundry list of sin's based on someone else's hierarchy of almostbutnotquitegoodenough all you're going to get is scorn from those you're trying to help. If God can reach a human in the darkest place - who the hell are you to wait until that person is sanitized for your convenience. Only God can change a heart - and the heart has to be agreeable to the change. Period. I get this poem Miss Frieda. If it offends someone - that someone needs to do a heart check, you know? Bravo!

[Frieda P]

You covered what I left out, I don't impose my beliefs on anyone else, I expect the same courtesy, don't know why 'they' think it gives them carte blanche to judge, isn't that un-Jesus like? Thanks for your thoughts Tam....and my sentiments exactly!

[Einstein Noodle]

OK! what the hell is gray my love :)))

sorry! i do not miss the gist ...

God/Creator ... is not religion .. but
man is .... aeyiyiyiyiyiy .. no wonder we are in such a heap. :)

i did not tell you i love you today did i? ;)

well i love you Frieda poetess .. oh yes i do .. i hope that's ok ..
but God/God .. oh my!!!!!! now that is real LOVE baby! oy vey! who cares what people say anyway!

E.

[Frieda P]

That's up for interpretation love...but YOU know. haha

Yes, I'm with you there, but religious fanatics think they're spreading the word of God himself, I'd love to talk to him too, but I think he's laughing his a*s off at all us ridiculous humans, and the joke is on us! MWAH! Love ya heaps sweet E.

[Einstein Noodle]

well my beauty .. God laughs for sure .. but never mean .. i remember this world is one of saber toothed tigers and danger danger danger .. so what the hell .. i will never be kept indoors :)))
fff .... that means forget fanatics forever ..or maybe something more expressive ;)
E.

[Frieda P]

Yeah something more expressive like take a ff....ha, hey I'm sweet as pie till you step on my apron, then you're in deep dodo. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i am actually laughing out loud .. by myself .. in my little computer cage .. you have the best smile :)

[Tom]

I believe it is man who puts all the spin and self-denoting/accommodating interpretations on religion and the writings of holy books pertaining to that particular faith!

A wonderful piece of moral poetic philosophy penned in a non intrusive and imaginative style, splendid indeed Frieda P.

[Frieda P]

Without a doubt in my mind it's MAN...they are certainly the only species so judgmental. Thanks so much Tom.

[Tom]

So true indeed!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

When I learned what Hell was ,I was terrified by what I call "Bible beaters" and "pew jumpers". My spiritual relationship with my God/Gods is individual. Based upon my own humanistic DNA. None can be repeated. I totally agree with the view that one is welcome to share a belief, but never should man own another's. Excellent writing as always Frieda!

[Frieda P]

I think Hell is mostly on earth, living amongst the bigots, indifference and so much evil done in the name of someone's chosen god....thanks so much Queenie, and I concur.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I take the same stance...I feel like a castaway here. The island of Hell.

[Frieda P]

True, there's so much evil in the world at times, it's surprising we can get out of bed most days, especially with war and all those atrocities in the spotlight right now, makes me want to cry....

[kublakhan27]

Honestly this is such a good poem, with so many amazing lines and images, that I'm not sure I can address the subject matter directly...you know how I feel about it anyway...I'm a spiritual person but I'm not a preacher, and you'll never see a poem from me on spiritual matters, unless I could write something like this of course, which I can't, because there is so much more to this poem that deserves to be acknowledged and not overshadowed by the theme...

The only way I can read this one is from an introspective standpoint cuz there are so many parts that I relate to...the only time I really see anything anymore is when I roll my eyes back...the third line, even though it's one of the simpler images, just blew me away, and in many ways, I think it's the cornerstone of the piece...it's completely relative to the psychology of religious warfare, and the struggle to understand why religion is used to for such vile purposes...of course I loved the last line as well...I wish I wrote this one...as angry as you may have been when you wrote it, it's incredibly eloquent and vivid, and another for the already mile-long list of Mrs.R favourites...awesome work love, you just nailed it with this one...xo

[Frieda P]

It's an old rant revamped actually, old scars opened up and bled. Ha now you're rolling your eyes too, thanks for this stellar review sweet Steve, it nearly made me forget how pissed off I am! :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm glad I could help a bit Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

I said 'nearly' ;) MWAH! xo

[kublakhan27]

And that's why I said 'a bit' ;) MWAH! XO

[Matching Socks]

Oh boy, religion.
The root of so much evil...
I don't mind conversation about religion, I'm not religious in the least but I love the 'stories'.
But people should respect the boundaries and know when to back off when it comes to 'preaching'

[Frieda P]

Exactly, with all that's going on lately with war within religious rights, makes me crazy, thanks so much Ana Sophia.

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :) xx

[Vidya Bacchus]

I think no one has the right to try and force their beliefs down another person's throat.What you believe and have faith in and what I do may be two different things but its our choice and we can't tell ourself that our way is the only way.That is stupid .I get this chica.Great write ;-)

[Frieda P]

I didn't think you were blinded by the light, you might be pazzo but you're smarter than the average bear. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol well girl you're going to give me a swollen head .Be careful with those compliments pretending to be insults hahahaha.You rock chica.

[Frieda P]

Nope nope, never, if I were ever in a milion years to insult you, you'll know it and it'll probably be in a poem hahaha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha I know that .I am pulling your leg and letting you know I'm baaaaack!!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha I know that just pulling ur leg chica.I'm baaack lol

[Frieda P]

Thank gawd, put some life back into this place!! haha

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol you have that covered so I'm jumping on your bandwagon.

[Rene Salinas]

At least you have a religion that in itself is a discovery of sorts some of us are destined to exhile to the nevermore of ideologies straight up a possitive right there. What a great image the one with the vinyl missing and hitting. I feel quite passive with respect to this writing maybe I am missing something. I often do. On the one hand the acknowledgment that something or someone is spewing religion yet on the other hand the acceptance that you think you have a religion. I do however re- take the journey with perception that are not able to pierce the soul. It is great to get prickled especially if it reminds you that you hurt when doing so.


Some amazing images here I'll leave you with a quote from a book i have recently read "If god really wanted people to be free of [wicked thoughts], he should have taken more care to invent a different species."

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

Oh god, love the quote, all I'm saying is keep your beliefs to yourself, I have my own, and I don't need people preaching the gospel to me.....I thought Jesus was all about acceptance, but apparently not, he's sick to death of it all too...

[Rene Salinas]

In fact I think your there is someonee at your door is a Jehova Witness and they already have the 12000 to be saved I guess I am fucked then.... Ha! in more ways than one. Damn you make me go all rebel you do Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Oh that really annoys the fook out of me, who has to sell god door to door!

[R Smith]

Fantastic poem Frieda, I have no religion but I have devised my own beliefs over time and have now got things straight in my head, so what I am saying is I am glad if that is how you feel too, no need for preachers to teach us and it does make you write great work. Bravo!

[Frieda P]

I'm starting to think poetry is my religion, there's more truth to it and certainly acceptance! Thanks so much Richard....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow my Lady you can provoke emotion! Burns red red rose buried in your poetry 'pricked by the thorny rose a thousand wishes deep'. You amaze.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much John, I know your feelings on this subject already, glad you 'felt' this one....

[Lyn Anderson]

Each person finds their way in this f*cked up world and only you can decide what you believe or don't believe. My friend, who is Jewish, lost hers when she visited a concentration camp. Just like that, she walked away from faith. I found it sad, but yet, I understood. Standing in that place she couldn't believe there was a God who would allow that to happen. I have been devout, agnostic, and now have reached some weird in between where I can peer at it from all angles and be comfortable in the God of my own choosing. Blasphemy, perhaps, for some, but for me it works. I don't expect anyone but me to get it, and I don't push my thoughts or beliefs on anyone, except to defend my right to have them, just as you and everyone else have their rights.

[Frieda P]

That gave me chills to read, but I can totally understand, I have much the same feelings since I lost my sister, truthfully I have no clue what I believe in anymore, being brought up Catholic and going to Catholic school, old lessons die hard, and they teach guilt in a big way....but I know that I do believe each person has the right to their own beliefs...don't impose yours on me.