Lost religion...

an old scar revisited, please stop spewing religion to me, I have my own beliefs...Amen

You kiss the gray, 

   without doubting fluidity 

in validity's lividity 

true colors discourage faith 

   flying without wings,

          in sing- song's 

       ambushed blindness

sad melody of flippant travesty 

   swallowed the pill of crazy  

    taught to be elusively blithe 

played in rote from beginning's rhyme

     vinyl scratches misses and hits 

empty tanks given notes of faction's repose 

      believe the temporary sleeping giants 

not to be awakened within osculation 

    torn from the loins of lion's dens 

   sweet mysteries of yesteryear, 

     bitterly twisted lusting embers,  

never snuffed out in a place of retention 

    lives within the confines of distance skies 

broken trusts swallowed and dispersed 

    my eyes roll back in my head for sight, 

fleeting recognition of stories unfolded

                           once upon a time 

     dream a dream if slumber should awake thee,

taken out of the equation of perception 

   no words that make sense but pierce the soul 

      lost my religion with the plot  

pricked by the thorny rose a thousand wishes deep

Author's Note

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

sad melody of flippant travesty
swallowed the pill of crazy
taught to be elusively blithe
played in rote from beginning's rhyme

UFF DA! Ok I'll bite. (but not hard) first this is a powerful write and I think those lines speak loudest to me. I am a Christian. I have a relationship with God. (its dysfunctional - we're working on that) and that's the key. When you take it by rote, when you swallow the pill and you never ever look God square in the eye and make it personal - when you dole out judgement for your laundry list of sin's based on someone else's hierarchy of almostbutnotquitegoodenough all you're going to get is scorn from those you're trying to help. If God can reach a human in the darkest place - who the hell are you to wait until that person is sanitized for your convenience. Only God can change a heart - and the heart has to be agreeable to the change. Period. I get this poem Miss Frieda. If it offends someone - that someone needs to do a heart check, you know? Bravo!

[Frieda P]

You covered what I left out, I don't impose my beliefs on anyone else, I expect the same courtesy, don't know why 'they' think it gives them carte blanche to judge, isn't that un-Jesus like? Thanks for your thoughts Tam....and my sentiments exactly!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Freida.... to thine own self be true and it shall follow as the day the night
thou ucannot be false to anyone. That we have the capacity for love and forgiveness
is a beautiful mystery . truly... Pat

[Ashira Macy]

My goodness Frieda, someone must have really pushed your buttons. I know how that is. I am a delivery driver and in lieu of a tip one night a customer gave me a paper saying that nothing was better than Jesus' love... Boy did that piss me off. I won't go into it too much, I don't want to offend people, but I hate when religion is thrown at me, or used in such a way. Really well spoken dear, I could feel your disquieted irritation.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Frieda, you rant beautifully, my friend. Everyone should respect everyone's own private place or perspective. We are not to judge others, because we haven't walked in that person's shoes. I could be the posterchild for imperfection and failure, so I'm not one to preach to anyone else. If I do invoke God's name, it is merely to offer a light to those in darkness and despair....not to judge. Not to in anyway suggest that you should be doing or saying something you are not, just to offer a gentle reminder that he's still out there waiting in your own time and space. Thanks for the heads up on this one, dearest poetess, Mistress of Alliteration and Conjugation. I hope you are well...

[David Scott]

:)
Now you know I must explore this thought...

A dream?
A fantasy?
A fairytale?

Maybe something darker?

A lie?
A delusion?
The hypnotic death of zombie brainwashing?

Maybe, just maybe, there is a grain of truth?
Maybe this grain as small as a mustard seed will be the seed a faith in intellectually sound evidence? Unproven and without definitive representation in our reality, but entirely possible, we can sip a breath of a blissful reality where a loving entity indeed reigns supreme.

Interesting poetry and stimulating philosophical rant.
I loved your pouting disrespect.
Show me! Defy my reality! Open your flower scented mind! Yes. I agree with the challenge. Anything claiming the Alpha and Omega should stand up to rigorous dissection.

[Rita L. Sev]

Faith is such a personal thing, I don't get why some people feel the need to push their beliefs and judge those whose views are different. You say it so eloquently here, Frieda - that last line is killer.

[Frieda P]

The mysteries of life Rita...grazie mille. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Well said, expressive without being offensive. I tend to avoid my views on religion being I'm a lost rebel to it myself. Yet again, you display the strength and courage of your pen.

[Frieda P]

I tend to avoid religion and politics, nobody ever wins, but I got riled up, can you tell? :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

well there is a collage of endearing and rightful stark statements that makes one think of those times gone by and times ahead - a delicate piece with a sharp tongue, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Thomas, nice to see you back.

[Mayank]

I don't understand religious and things associated with it, but one thing is that I don't want them to change my beliefs. There are many around me who don't like because I don't follow any religion neither god... because I have my own path and others fail to understand that I am quite happy and content with my life.

[Frieda P]

People don't care if you're happy, they just want you to do what they say, and follow what they follow, thanks for your thoughts Mayank.

[wordman]

I can certainly relate to this

[Frieda P]

Thanks Ron, too many of us can unfortunately....

[AprilRN1210]

My spirituality is something that I have been struggling quite profoundly over the last few weeks.. having said that, I would NEVER judge someone based on their beliefs, nor try to "preach" mine.. those who do such disrespectful, atrocious things in the name of something they believe is tragic and disheartening... The world has enough suffering without us adding to it... we are all humans who deserve understanding and respect... you are one of the deepest, emotional, caring, beautiful individuals I have had the pleasure of meeting and if someone wants to judge you based on something you have "said" or believe then that is their loss... there are always going to be hateful, ignorant jerks who love nothing more than to bring misery to others because they are so miserable themselves.. this is such a powerful poem and not with a "lashing out" tone, but one of simply stating how you "see"... how you FEEL... and what you understand... awesome writing as usual!!

[Frieda P]

You know, I'm familiar with where that comes from, yes loss will do that to a person. You might not be judgmental, but it's those very people that claim they talk to god that are the biggest offenders. I mean how does one justify war in his name? It all makes me dizzy. Thanks so much, your thoughts are always appreciated sweet April!

[AprilRN1210]

I can understand and relate my friend.. you are more than welcome girl :)