~every time a leaf's tears fall...

Autumn's zephyrs 

          twirl within 

season's spaces

            rhyme without reason

    'tween memories'

 yearnings,              kissed by fate

        every time the trees cry

              a leaf's tears fall,

   whirls my mind

         in one last 

        faded embrace,

    color jaded

          by winter's 

               desired rush,

just as the chill

                    of your heart

                 crushed the warmth

          of cognac's blissful fire,

your smoky 

                 reminiscent

                wisp,

                          lingers

                                still

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

It's been a while since you've dabbled in the seasons Mrs.R, and I'm happy to see you return to them...my head is still aching and congested so reading anything remains a chore let alone reviewing it, but the first four lines are jut exquisite...the idea of seasons as rhyme without reason is something that had never crossed my mind before, but you already know how good you are at taking my senses to places I've never been...the image of the leaf really speaks to me in this one, not the one you smoke (haha) but the Canadian one...it's hard to explain but I'll just say it made it easier for me to relate to this one, as if I needed any help in relating to your work right? Astounding work as always love...xo

[Frieda P]

I hadn't even realized until I read your words, sorry you're still feeling under the weather, no pun intended. :) Thanks my sweet friend. xo

[Fate]

this is good:) i like it!

[Jon Roggie]

The last lines seem to foreshadow the winter, a relationship grown cold. Nice write.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Frieda, I love your autumnal leaf-shedding pieces of artistry. Beautiful.
kissed by fate
every time the trees cry
a leaf's tears fall,
whirls my mind
in one last
faded embrace,

I fell in love with the first line, but I did a little sommersault in the air when I came across those fantastic lines. So beautiful! Thank you again, dear friend.

[NoelHC]

Freida, could you pass a message on to Mother Nature for me. Sunday it was 77 F and sunny here. Monday we had 4-5 inches of wet snow. We skipped the lovely autumn you described so eloquently in these words.
Well written.

[Ashira Macy]

This was tremendously beautiful my dear, I love poetry about my favorite season. There is so much peace in seeing the leaves cry down from the trees in a multicolored dance. Brilliant choice making the format look like the trail a falling leaf would make in the air too.

[Traci]

So good to be reading your words again, and much to catch up on. The imagery in this piece was wonderful, words expressed in the seasons, a sense of sadness. As always, your words make me feel something, and that is truly a gift in itself. Wonderful job, dear friend.

[Neville]

What a pleasure to come across this truly delightful poem of your Frieda, there is some serious stuff here, much of which I would have liked to have penned myself.... AGT's N

[Frieda P]

What a sweet review, thanks so much Neville, muchly appreciated.

[Neville]

My pleasure entirely my literary friend x

[Patrick]

Very clear imagery and really nice flow. A super description. Good stuff

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Patrick, jazz'd you enjoyed.

[Boranus]

every time a tree cries, a leaf's tears falls. for me, this was a little unclear. I like where you were going and thought you captured something very beautiful and profound, but a leaf's tears fall, doesn't sound
right and didn't invoke the poignancy that I was looking for that you were intending, and not to nit pick but it's the leaf's, it's that part that spoiled it for me. a leaf's tears doesn't sound right. if you had left the apostrophe s out and just kept it 'leaf tear'... my mind would have been blown. other than that it is a tender touching poem.

[Frieda P]

I'm not sure why, leaf's is the possessive, it wouldn't have made much sense otherwise. Nonetheless, thanks for your kind words Boranus.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

this is your best piece yet my favorite.


Thank you for your review and
comments you left on my page
I truly feel I was meant to happen us
getting it out in the open and you're
a beautiful soul.


Thank you for sharing this breathtaking piece.


Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Benita, don't mention it, poets don't always have to agree to enjoy one another's work.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're welcome. thank you for sharing. I understand what you're saying :) I've been praying for you and some other friends I hope you're having a lovely night. Take care Benita/ kindred poet