~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

A Poem by Frieda P
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_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

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Etched your name
    in the dust of my heart's ache,
wildflower's soul strewn 
       haphazardly askew
love note tucked neatly
          written in braille tidings,
of ghostly passage's rhyme
obliging a long forgotten prayer
of yesteryear and far away,
          in your eye's pious obligations
a blue moon's 
dispirited bloom,
awakened in the shadows
             of diminished  capacity's vapors,
surrendered under the pressure
                 of afterthought's tragic loss
weeping roses
             can't breathe life's blood, 
too late for encore's last call
                      in the final curtain act
 

© 2014 Frieda P


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I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly l.. read more
MomzillaNC

10 Years Ago

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual imp.. read more



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weeping roses can not breath life's blood for sure .. but their thorns can certainly draw it .. i am a sucker for a blue moon ;) ...
i feel so sad!:(

love and peace dear graceful eloquent Italian Frieda! love and peace!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Who isn't E, thanks so much, don't be sad, it's just a poem, do the happy dance with me. :) love ya!.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

i beg to disagree my love! no such thing as just a poem :))
but i will dance .. we can dance i.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

What I meant was I wasn't sad when I wrote it, would be honored. :) xo
More dying swan than Peacock this time my lady. This felt such a sad dirge with grace and eloquence.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Blame Rene, he started it, thanks so much John....
As always, you find new and unique way to pierce my heart love...yes, every rose has its thorn, and there were emotional thorns scattered through this piece that strung me...the specter of loss is omnipresent and always loom in your work as much as it pains me...'weeping roses can't breathe life's blood'...I think that was the line that did it for me here, though every single line you write is worthy of a quote...there is never a wasted word or a word out of place...you have an impeccable gift for flow, and how to unfurl a piece to achieve maximum emotional effect...you have this poetry thing down pat pretty good Mrs.R :) xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I knew you were going to say that. ;) Thanks so much Benji, your reviews always make my day. :) xo
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I don't know if that's a good or bad thing...I'm either becoming too predictable, or you just know m.. read more
Oh! What sadness… and the music is the perfect accompaniment. You could just about set the words of the poem to that music. It actually made me a little misty.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Momzilla.
MomzillaNC

10 Years Ago

You're welcome.
"a blue moon's dispirited bloom"

wish i had come up with that line...

such sadness in the ashes of the ache of the rose....
beautifully tragic poem...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much jacob, means a lot...
What can I say? Your ability to pen your emotions is luscious. We all feel the moment and it finds a place inside ourselves where we too once felt this... Bittersweet...xoxo

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Lily Mae, your words humble me. xo
I have to admit, I almost didn't click on it. Okay, I like it, but I don't, you know? Yes, you know.:)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Yes I know, payback's a b***h and all that jazz. :)
Heart ache lingers with us for a very long time as if it is literally etched upon our heart. Theres some amazing lines in here and you always amaze me with how concise and compact your verse can be. Unlike myself...there isn't one word wasted. Each one packs a powerful effect that leaves the reader feeling breathless. Lovely...x

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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Why thank you so much Red, that's quite the compliment. xo
I am glad I saw Glen's comment for all those that need the font to be bigger like me after years of looking at a screen. Ctrl + , maximises and Ctrl - the opposite. Lately I have come to understand the Frieda writes with words that have lived. I am unsure but I guess when she writes she re - lives the situations. It comes so full of meaning and intention that it evokes silence in me. Surrendering under pressure and of after thoughts tragic loss left me thinking. It is a very intimate array of feelings.

So elegantly put though.

Thankyou



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks, jazz'd you enjoyed Rene, since you were part of the inspiration in your cremation.....
Rene Salinas

10 Years Ago

Double the credit then ? Nahh Frieda honestly the weight of your words brings about a different kind.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Still the inspiration was there, where the muse takes us is another thing entirely....thanks again R.. read more
I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly l.. read more
MomzillaNC

10 Years Ago

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual imp.. read more

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