~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

A Poem by Frieda P
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_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

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Etched your name
    in the dust of my heart's ache,
wildflower's soul strewn 
       haphazardly askew
love note tucked neatly
          written in braille tidings,
of ghostly passage's rhyme
obliging a long forgotten prayer
of yesteryear and far away,
          in your eye's pious obligations
a blue moon's 
dispirited bloom,
awakened in the shadows
             of diminished  capacity's vapors,
surrendered under the pressure
                 of afterthought's tragic loss
weeping roses
             can't breathe life's blood, 
too late for encore's last call
                      in the final curtain act
 

© 2014 Frieda P


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I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...
Nusquam Esse

10 Years Ago

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly l.. read more
MomzillaNC

10 Years Ago

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual imp.. read more



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Frieda, with every ready of one of your writes i become more in tune with the style that is yours. Each and everyone expose another scar, and other message in braille, another... well another door.

Posted 10 Years Ago


For some reason, these words draw me back. I keep reading them. Jon.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I am going to have to check Rene's poem out, if it inspired such a lovely piece.

surrendered under the pressure
of afterthought's tragic loss

These lines were fascinating to me. Too often so we say that hindsight is 20/20 and we rethink our actions, wishing that we could have had things play out differently. But if we were to surrender to afterthought would that mean trying to go back and do things differently? I feel that would take away our humanity a bit. But perhaps I just opened up a completely separate can of worms.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is definitely a poem where you shine brightly .. I know you must of enjoyed writing it. I can feel it through every phrase..

Posted 10 Years Ago


weeping roses

can't breathe life's blood"

love that line ...a lovely penned piece ...filled with deep emotions ...beautifully expressed..

Posted 10 Years Ago


brilliant write and love the touch of Jill Tracy...pure magic my friend!

Posted 10 Years Ago


After reading his . . . it got the mind turning. I'm glad I came through and took a look at your as well. A very eloquent piece strapped with keen word choices and well placed metaphors, 'weeping roses can't breath life's blood'. Beautiful. The only complaint I would have is the small text, a bit hard on the eyes.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I'm thrilled you did too Jack, thanks so much. So, I've been told, but it hardly looks small to me, .. read more
another amazing poem from your pen dripping in the blood of love running red in rose petals, etch my name in the dust of your words anytime

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Love your review Richard, thanks muchly my friend....
R Smith

10 Years Ago

always welcome
A bittersweet beauty of a write, Frieda. An elegant lament...straight from that gorgeous heart of yours! Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Awh thanks for your sweet words Lydikey, means a lot! x
Weeping roses, how beautiful but sad this poem is, for all that might have been but will never be.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Ana Sophia.

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