~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

Etched your name

    in the dust of my heart's ache,

wildflower's soul strewn 

       haphazardly askew

love note tucked neatly

          written in braille tidings,

of ghostly passage's rhyme

obliging a long forgotten prayer

of yesteryear and far away,

          in your eye's pious obligations

a blue moon's 

dispirited bloom,

awakened in the shadows

             of diminished  capacity's vapors,

surrendered under the pressure

                 of afterthought's tragic loss

weeping roses

             can't breathe life's blood, 

too late for encore's last call

                      in the final curtain act

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

[Frieda P]

You're just cranky when it comes to my fonts Glen, get new glasses dear. haha I meant thanks muchly. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...

[Nusquam Esse]

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly larger so that the spaces between characters are more noticeable.

[MomzillaNC]

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual impact of red type to evoke the red rose. However, as an artist and former graphic designer who worked in print media, I can tell you that red is one of the most difficult colors to follow on white background for a body of type. I recommend you just use an illuminated letter (like you see in some large, ornate Bibles or Medieval texts) at the beginning of the prose, then continue in a black or charcoal type.

I always choose at a larger font size. Basic rules of thumb in layout, limit your fonts to only two faces (a serif font -- like Times or Palatino, and a san-serif font -- like Arial or Helvetica), and only use italics in the main body of the copy (unless your entire text is in italics; in which case, you can use italics in the title to). Save script fonts and "fun" or decorative fonts for titles in almost every instance. Smaller size type is easier to read in san-serif fonts. As for illuminated letters, I'll bet you can find some freebies online.

Something from these sites might work if that's the way you'd like to go:
http://www.magic-of-color.com/?p=2294
http://www.theenglishgroup.co.uk/blog/2014/03/03/12th-century-alphabet/
http://www.paraisoscrap.com/WebRoot/StoreES3/Shops/eb8853/4FDF/98CF/0E95/78DE/AA81/AC10/1417/C1D2/ha_581_B.jpg
http://www.yourecards.net/ecard_thumbnail/id129404/sarah-j-colemen-gives-us-a-sneek-peak-at-a-new-bernstein-_-andriulli.jpg
http://www.councell.net/illuminations/icons/letters-small/Blue%20Floral%20E%20Icon.jpg
http://lh3.ggpht.com/_hVOW2U7K4-M/SUwfVYFNvDI/AAAAAAAAviU/delK5dhknUw/s640/dhjgfnjmfhgbngfxbnfghdfg.jpg
http://media-cache-ec0.pinimg.com/236x/ab/57/67/ab5767fdf48ff8af74e92065506a87b5.jpg

[beautiful dreamer]

how melancholy. how beautiful. how perfectly penned. you portray life and death so wonderfully through your words frieda.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Sadly morose my lady...last curtain call of life. something I 'd rather not contemplate...yikes!

[therisa]

This is, one of your sadder poems, Frieda. From the first line, to the last one, am carried on the river of tears, which you so elegantly. One can only hope, to ease this suffering, knowing it can never be, totally heal, over time.

[Baby Ricochet]

This one made me think of that Vampire show on HBO. True blood. I've never actually watched that show all the way through but it seems like it's been on in the background the last two years. No doubt the weeping bleeding roses line did it.

[NoelHC]

An interesting and moving poem, but I have to agree with the other reviews regarding the font and size, I can barely read it on my laptop and expect people trying to read it on their phone are not able to at all. Otherwise, well done.

[00000000000000000000000..]

Very enriched Frieda:) I love all to do with a rose but this was very profound:)

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

I enjoyed this poem but the tiny weird font bothered my old eyes. Had increase my screen size to 125%.
That said I liked the content and the idea.

[anne]

your structure of poem always impresses me instead inspire to try something new.....its wonderful as always... :))

[MAC]

wondering written and presented....another deeply emotional piece

okay did my best to return the reviews, need to go get back to work though...please do not review me, I so owe you many many more

[just Penny]

"obliging a long forgotten prayer
of yesteryear and far away,
in your eye's pious obligations"
When those who profess "faith" and "trust" in a higher being blatantly defy the true meaning of scripture by interpreting it to fit their own agenda, being some of the most evil, malevolent people on the planet, or when divine intervention never comes, I choose never to walk their paths for all the damage they do. Will they be blessed for turning others from their God? I dont think so. Your poem was heartbreaking, full of loss, and the image of a bleeding rose so very powerful. Those lines "weeping roses cant breathe life's blood" is stunningly brilliant. As is this poem.