Jedi mind tricks

toe curling,

 tendril sweeping,

    mind dipping

Jedi mind tricks,

  kaleidoscopic tilting 

   of your tiding's 

          persuasive sway

swept away

                by trickles ebb & flow, 

bated breath's

surrendering in

 caresses of

   flesh-tone weepings 

   as inky effusion's

               drip in offerings,

seeping onto

                  volcanic blank pages

   in deliverance's

                        safekeeping

Author's Note

Reviews

[writing mojo]

some defined forces here, not sure of the star wars connection, (said my childhood), but the mature nature in space does ignites more then my lightsaber. I like the shards of wordy jenga here..pieces to put together in towering writer dotting and connecting skit row rhythms to enthralling skin as inspiration..good piece

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, 'ignites more than your lightsaber'...oh the imagery. Thanks so much mojo. :)

[Zahra]

You always come up with something unique. Very cool, mind blowing :D

[Frieda P]

What a gracious review, thanks so much Zahra. :)

[Rene Salinas]

The linear sequence on this writing is super charged with defiance. As you are sharing with us how you emotional journey unfolds. I guess it was time to buckle up and don't let go. Toe curling that's how ravid this sensation is jedi min tricks , how convincingly enchanting. So it continues all the way to the end good job too becuase I run out of breath but the melody of the writing is one imbued by harmonious wisdom. As Jedi puns ar unavoidable if that one spoken is reprresented by Luke then that must make you.....


Yoda?


Thankyou

[Frieda P]

Like how you felt the need to buckle up, and I was waiting for that Yoda crack Rene, you never disappoint....!

[Ashira Macy]

When I saw the title I knew I was going to love it, and you never disappoint. The words are strong in this one. =P You mention Jedi and I bring the puns. This one was fabulous to read out loud, and with the alliterations would actually make a wonderful warm up for singers (we are always looking for ones that are more interesting than "red leather, yellow leather" and so on.) The extra challenge would be to do the whole thing in one breath.

[Frieda P]

If you can sing it, be my guest, if I did so, people who throw stuff at me! :) Thanks muchly Ashira.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

As always you take words and make them hang like the most exquisite lingerie when you write such pieces.

[Frieda P]

You saw lingerie? Figures John lol....thanks so much! :)

[R Smith]

Exciting! A vision most sexy, most sensual, almost a dream, always entertaining and definitely beyond compare. Brilliant Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Love that you saw a dream, thanks so much for your sweet words Richard....

[MsJewel]

You never cease to amaze me Frieda. A sensual little treat seeping onto volcanic pages...
toe curling, tendril sweeping...I would say so!

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

So good to see you Julie....thanks so much for your sweet words, you humble me my friend!

[Pryde Foltz]

drip in offerings,
seeping onto
volcanic blank pages
in deliverance's
safekeeping

I am not sure there is much safe keeping in this hot inferno of write … languishing passion:)

[Frieda P]

Safe is overrated, thanks muchly Pryde. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

First of all i am really sorry sweety for being out of here so long. The doctor had recommended me rest for some days due to Throat infection.But i Will go through each of your writing. :) have no doubt about that. Coming back to the poem. You really have a way to pour down the inky effusions into the blank pages. I really loved the start- withtoe curling thoughts. They are ready to be subdued by the volcanic pages. Your mind really works differently doing a flip flop :) Brilliant write

~Sophy

[Sophy Freebirds]

First of all i am really sorry sweety for being out of here so long. The doctor had recommended me rest for some days due to Throat infection.But i Will go through each of your writing. :) have no doubt about that. Coming back to the poem. You really have a way to pour down the inky effusions into the blank pages. I really loved the start- withtoe curling thoughts. They are ready to be subdued by the volcanic pages. Your mins really works differently doing a flip flop :) Brilliant write

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Sorry to hear that Sophy, will send out some healing vibes your way, thanks always for your kind words...ha flip flops, now you're talking girl. :) x

[Baby Ricochet]

I love Portishead.Gotta be in the mood for them though. Kinda like Mazzy Star. "Volcanic blank pages." Great line.

[Frieda P]

Good comparison Baby, thanks so much.