Holy Sarcasm

I overheard someone complacently spew, 

move on your way, walk in the light

 'death is for dead people'         holy sarcasm, 

    that might be profound if it were not so absurd

death lives amongst the living regularly

      people null and void of empathy, 

like the feeling deficient who think they're all that,

    loss, betrayal, obsessions, recessions, addictions

madness perpetuating the death prattle

    people breathing self righteous smog within stiff life

madness choking the life out of survival,

  lost the plot in your condescending lecture,

     redemption comes to those full of kindness & grace

        wake up and smell the coffee

you might walk in those dastardly shoes one day...

some people are just lucky, listen to the music

  other's are tone deaf to humanity's revealing cries

     may as well show some compassion whilst you still can, 

                                                  no one gets out alive anyway

Author's Note

Reviews

[just Penny]

The title grabbed my interest, Frieda, and I am so so glad I read this. I agree that death is the other half of life, just like good and evil, day and night, even peas and carrots aka forrest gump :) I think your final line says it all and we're all gonna face it one day, but it's like you say "other's are tone deaf to humanity's revealing cries" - damn this is good :)

[Frieda P]

Yep, peas and carrots, love that! Thanks so much Penny, SO good to see you back at the cafe. :)

[just Penny]

Thanks xo - heart not in it yet, just drop by sometimes. Cant let the bad guys (gals) win !

[Jennie Baron]

I must agree this is one of my favorites of yours. Of course I have to agree with the sentiment, but you've worded it so aptly here as usual.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Jennie, muchly appreciate the sentiment, I actually left out a stanza to protect the guilty...otherwise I'd have needed a disclaimer.

[Zahra]

Frieda this is one of your best poems I think. Like the others I also loved the title and

. wake up and smell the coffee
you might walk in those dastardly shoes one
day...
some people are just lucky, listen to the
music
other's are tone deaf to humanity's revealing
cries

just amazzzzing
Great topic you chose here

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind word Zahra, it's more of a rant in my madness, jazz'd you enjoyed my hissy fit. :)

[kublakhan27]

I pledge my allegiance to the Queen of pontification...I'm awake, and the coffee smells pretty damn good...this reminded me of a line from Steppenwolf (via songwriter Hoyt Axton): I see a lot of people walkin' round with tombstones in their eyes...with every passing day, life seems to imitate art a little more, which would be great, except that it's imitating the wrong art...I'm seeing it here with increasing regularity, and it's sad...I've seen it in the comments on your own writing, which is sadder...I'm not sure whether to smirk in bitter amusement or sigh in poignant sympathy...I started with the former when I first read through this, but I find myself leaning towards the latter as the words sink in...that's what you do Mrs.R...every word you write is a key to unlocking its own emotion...xo

[Frieda P]

Oh what a beautiful morning, oh, what a beautiful quote. :) I was hoping you'd do both Benji, it's kind of comical really when you think about it...gotta laugh at life, or you know.... xo

[kublakhan27]

Ha I hear you Mrs.R...for whatever reason, laughing comes more naturally to me when hung over...that's kind of backwards isn't it? Then again, this is Benji ;P xo

[Frieda P]

I'm shocked you're even awake! :)

[kublakhan27]

Ah you know the drill Mrs.R...I drink, I fall asleep at 1, wake up at 3, then I'm awake for three days hahaha ;)

[Frieda P]

Plenty of time for poetry, lucky you. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Indeed, and I get paid on Wednesday...I may not sleep for a week! ;)

[Frieda P]

Oh jeez, here we go.......................

[kublakhan27]

Ha That response worries me Mrs.R...you're not telling me to avoid you for a week are you?

[Frieda P]

Ha you still have your wits about you I see. ;) Just kidding Benji, don't get your knickers in a twist. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha My mind is too knotted up to worry about my knickers Mrs.R ;P x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow and you mention sour grapes to moi!!!!!!!!
This is a bitter hard hitting 'sledgehammer' of a poem
Ouch!

[Frieda P]

Did you feel the pain dear? !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes....................!

[Frieda P]

Mission accomplished! :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

and don't i know it but just done my 47.6km in an hour on the bike so feeling knackered and holier than thou lol!

[Frieda P]

HA knackered and holier than thou, now there's a poem in there somewhere!!

[Sophy Freebirds]

The title is just wow!!! I know sarcasm drips from your very tongue. You've very rightly pointed Freida " death lives among the living"- people who have become heartless. "They are walking copses. O yea!! Wake up-its about time you realise you will also be walking in the shoes of the others. While you have time - lend empathy to the others... sarcasm should only be used by the ones who are expert at it or else they may get hurt. And you Freida are an expert at this. You always have something new to give to the reader. Cheers :) lets have some coffee?? Lol

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Oh you know, I'm very sweet til you cross that fookin' line! :) Grazie mille Sophy. New pot coming right up!

[Sophy Freebirds]

;) yeppee.. would love to have a cuppa... De nada dudette ;)

[F. Barium Deus]

Enjoying your imagery and word choice, which has impact. Compassion is, indeed, the key to peace, and people are often dead to empathy. An important topic written well!

[Frieda P]

I concur, thanks so much for your visit and review FBD.

[Rene Salinas]

I can realate to this writing whole heartedly. The image of those "Dead man walking" is a refreshing one, see, some just don't want to ask questions and believe their own hype to live happily everafter. Is easy and convinient. So from there they start to place situations into boxes. Entertaining the image if death then is one of those concepts put into the box of oblivion. Honestly why will you make yourself aware of it's presense when is so much easier to live without it?. So smell the coffee and wake up is in this context full of determination.

Can I have that with a shot of whisky please?

(I hope no notes of this charming man remain )

Full of wisdom this.

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

Did you care for a cuppa coffee with that shot? Thanks, jazz'd you got where I was coming from Rene.