Poesy-flavored soda bashes on the rocks COLLABORATION kublakhan & Frieda

Poetry in motion, yes, we've finally lost the plot. ;)

algorithm's principle irony caught in time 
allegory's rhythm stuck in abstract rhyme, 
poetic injustices spiritual foreplay 
institutionalized escaped proverbs, 
dabbled in catawampus shortcuts 
obliquely rounded the kitty corner
ended up on the short end of the shtick, 
bunny hill's safety overruled by the rabbit hole
disproportionate dimensions wallow in a scalene lounge
sharing swallows from a spiked abstruse cocktail,
poesy-flavoured soda bashes hypothetical summations on the rocks
words and hieroglyphics copulate in the architect's wet dream
comedies of errors circulate logistic migraines
amongst the dehydrated scribes egging on
the masses' hunger for simplicity with Morse,
built upon sloping tintinnabulation's clauses
foretold breezes on a metered curve to silence
white noise smirks in the shadow of frenetic scribbles
philosophical bets hedged in nods of acknowledgement
of more required evolution on the part of history
before apocrypha is granted literary purgatory
on a five-star pedestal of parabolic respite,
constitutions warrant their own childhood
before a drafting into phalanxes of art and sociology
in the breathing calm before society's storm of mouth, 
winging it on a prayer book's sinful drought
Nile dried up in denial's ungodly gospel verses,
wrote a disillusioned dissertation full of dissemination's lure
to even up the untimely score on an alluding lore's reputation
ended up being worth a sixpence after inflation's aphorism

Author's Note

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

There are some here with ability. Not only to get together and to listen to one another that in my book is already a victory, maybe I am an underachiever. Then to have a discourse where it is innevitable to feel and to allow for giving and receiving. Then the arduous at times process of unifying so that the meaning or no meaning reaches or not. This is a colossal piece of writing. Allusions to meaning, to humour , abstractions, rhymes, idioms you name it even the kitchen sink. After saying that I will certainly need some time to digest becuase at first hand I can't quite capture.

I just feel gratitude for the collaboration so thankyou kindly to both

[Frieda P]

Your review made my poetic heart smile, if you got all that out of it, I'm grateful....you certainly picked up on the essence of this one, sans the kitchen sink. :) Thanks Rene!

[kublakhan27]

Frieda has said it all...thanks so much Rene :)

[Cory Barrett]

Every time the two of you get together i get beat in the face with the poetry conundrum stick, and I am laying on back in the outfield with a black eye, and you are there with an the park homer.

[Frieda P]

Ha did we leave that conundrum stick out again? Thanks Cory....

[KK]

I enjoyed your piece. Good job to the both of you

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much KK.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you KK.

[realmwriter]

I will admit that I have no idea what this means, I'm not very philosophical like that and this goes way beyond my understanding, but for whatever reason, perhaps it's complexity, I like it very much.

[Frieda P]

I'm jazz'd you enjoyed it either way, sometimes I don't understand it either. :) Thanks so much.

[realmwriter]

You're most welcome.

[AprilRN1210]

Holy Hell, you two!!! hot damn!!! first off, let me say... LOVE THIS SONG...lmao...

I admit, had to grab my dictionary with this one.. blew my mind for sure... but what a ride!!! I love the way you two make me think and I get lost in the flow of ideas shifting and the emotions sprinkled in there.. this one was a deep, brilliant one.I absolutely LOVE the alliteration dancing around in there too and the references to poetry.. this is seamless, cannot really tell who wrote what.. which is awesome, but of course with you two, we all knew it would be that way!!... ok.. I have to put my two favorite lines on here.. yes, I know... whatever!!! I am doing it... lol

"white noise smirks in the shadow of frenetic scribbles"...... what imagery pops into my head with this line and tickles my fancy... yes.. love this line.. oh my goodness...

"wrote a disillusioned dissertation full of dissemination's lure"..... this one is sheer brilliance... makes me wish I had thought of it.. wow....

and the ending.. don't get me started on this ending.. love it.. makes you not only think, but made me giggle.. you two ROCK... I am saving this one for SURE!!! wheeeew... did I mention that you blew my mind?.... damn... more coffeee please...




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[kublakhan27]

Haha The cool thing about your review April, is that you quoted lines from both of us...I love it when that happens ;) As you can see, our collabs tend to go in different directions from the one you to go in, though I love your collabs to death as well ;) We just seem to bring out the cerebral side of each other for whatever reason...the ending belongs to Frieda...I never like to give too much away but she usually opens and closes our works...most of my presence is in the middle...anyways I'm still reeling from the review you left me, and I'm sure Mrs.R will have more to say when she gets to this piece...so let me just tell you how happy I am that you enjoyed our collab...we work very hard on them, a lot of tinkering and debate goes into them (right down to the song choice haha), and I'm jut glad that it all comes together and produce such responses as the one you've provided...so glad you enjoyed it April :) ((big hugs))

[AprilRN1210]

Well, goody!!.. I loved the whole thing, but those two stood out as favorites... you do tend to blow my mind when you get together.. wheeeew... still reeling myself... you are more than welcome sir... and yes, your poem deserved that review.. I am glad you enjoyed both... ((hugs)) back at you...

[Frieda P]

Wow this really lifted my spirits, just what I needed after the day I've had, thanks so much April, my poetic heart is beaming! :) x

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome ma'am... I am here if ya need to vent:)
I've already had my rant today, which made me feel tons better..lol

[jacob erin-cilberto]

again you two sound as one voice...this poem would do well back in the 60's...how many would listen now...poetry has lost its luster these days...readers run...skim, ignore...

this is real poetry with depth and conclusion, even as we lose plot.

[Frieda P]

I've said it before, born in the wrong era...thanks for your kind words jacob.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Jacob, these words mean more than you know...I'm sure I was a beatnik in a past life, and if I wasn't, hopefully I am in a future life...I miss the times when poetry was a true exercise in a mental and creative developments...hopefully those days will return someday...

[R Smith]

Abstract heaven, my favourite style, if you love words they are all here dancing the light fantastic.

[Frieda P]

All the abstruse lines are Benjl's haha....thanks so much Richard...love 'abstract heaven'.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ok this one is full of Friedaisms and one of you swallowed the dictionary. Hard to see the seams in this nye on impossible in fact. A clever thought provoking piece that leaves a feeling of questioning on the lips.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you John, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Frieda P]

Friedaisms. what about Benji's Daliesque dalliances...thanks so much John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Surreal indeed my Lady.

[kublakhan27]

Oh, I thought that said Freudisms...it's okay, we always get one or two people that don't notice or acknowledge me in the collabs, even when my name is right there with hers...I just accept it now, and expect it, and I knew it would happen in this one too...Frieda's voice is the one that deserves to be heard anyways :)

[Lyn Anderson]

If the masses hunger for simplicity, why are they not banging down my door? Ha! Nice write, you guys. So filled with witty lines and spell binding trickery I can't point it all out.

[Frieda P]

Pfft damned if I know, you can't make everybody happy, that much I do know....thanks so much KL.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it KL, thank you :)

[Matching Socks]

You two are such kindred spirits, when you come together, i feel like I'm about to the educated with some higher wisdom. You guys are a couple of my faves but you already know this. Well done. xo

[Frieda P]

Ha kindred spirits in confusion you meant to say, I get it. ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yes, when we get to the point where we have each other scratching our heads, we know our work is done...thank so much Ana ;) xo

[Matching Socks]

Lol! :) anytime