Poetry in motion, yes, we've finally lost the plot. ;)
algorithm's principle irony caught in time allegory's rhythm stuck in abstract rhyme, poetic injustices spiritual foreplay institutionalized escaped proverbs, dabbled in catawampus shortcuts obliquely rounded the kitty corner ended up on the short end of the shtick, bunny hill's safety overruled by the rabbit hole disproportionate dimensions wallow in a scalene lounge sharing swallows from a spiked abstruse cocktail, poesy-flavoured soda bashes hypothetical summations on the rocks words and hieroglyphics copulate in the architect's wet dream comedies of errors circulate logistic migraines amongst the dehydrated scribes egging on the masses' hunger for simplicity with Morse, built upon sloping tintinnabulation's clauses foretold breezes on a metered curve to silence white noise smirks in the shadow of frenetic scribbles philosophical bets hedged in nods of acknowledgement of more required evolution on the part of history before apocrypha is granted literary purgatory on a five-star pedestal of parabolic respite, constitutions warrant their own childhood before a drafting into phalanxes of art and sociology in the breathing calm before society's storm of mouth, winging it on a prayer book's sinful drought Nile dried up in denial's ungodly gospel verses, wrote a disillusioned dissertation full of dissemination's lure to even up the untimely score on an alluding lore's reputation ended up being worth a sixpence after inflation's aphorism
There are some here with ability. Not only to get together and to listen to one another that in my book is already a victory, maybe I am an underachiever. Then to have a discourse where it is innevitable to feel and to allow for giving and receiving. Then the arduous at times process of unifying so that the meaning or no meaning reaches or not. This is a colossal piece of writing. Allusions to meaning, to humour , abstractions, rhymes, idioms you name it even the kitchen sink. After saying that I will certainly need some time to digest becuase at first hand I can't quite capture.
I just feel gratitude for the collaboration so thankyou kindly to both
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Your review made my poetic heart smile, if you got all that out of it, I'm grateful....you certainly.. read moreYour review made my poetic heart smile, if you got all that out of it, I'm grateful....you certainly picked up on the essence of this one, sans the kitchen sink. :) Thanks Rene!
constitutions warrant their own childhood
before a drafting into phalanxes of art and sociology
in the breathing calm before society's storm of mouth,
winging it on a prayer book's sinful drought......mater pieces are all yours... :))
winging it on a prayer book's sinful drought
Nile dried up in denial's ungodly gospel verses,
wrote a disillusioned dissertation full of dissemination's lure
These were some of my favorite lines in here, thought there were so many great ones that it made it difficult to choose. It is almost unfathomable to me how people are able to collaborate to create the master works. Your writing always meshes so well that I can't figure out who did what.
Science+ english+ sex= poesy collab by Steve and Freida.. :).. this was such a brilliant piece of work the nile in my mouth dried up reading this.."words and hieroglyphics copulate"- this line made me laugh out loud.. this piece is serious yet comic.. it was such a fun to read. You both have a thing for word - play.. because of which this has become a superhit.. you guys rock!!
~Sophy
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10 Years Ago
Made me laugh too, that brilliantly twisted wet dream was Steve's idea, he owns that line. :) Jazz'd.. read moreMade me laugh too, that brilliantly twisted wet dream was Steve's idea, he owns that line. :) Jazz'd you enjoyed Sophy!
10 Years Ago
Was a pleasure dearheart ;) Steve!! Ahh yea is has a smart brain
I. Love. This! The alliteration, the imagery, the vocabulary ... all of it. And to weave such a message with such delicacy ... wow. Very fine writing.
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Thanks so much for stopping by Jeremy and your glowing review, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration!.. read moreThanks so much for stopping by Jeremy and your glowing review, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration!
Friedapickle, you have such an amazing talent of wordplay and a wonderful range of topics to collaborate. Awesome job, you two. There are typically illusions of sex in your poems, dear friend. They bring a humorous bubble of laughter to my lips every time I read your work. But you collaborate well with kublakhan, seamless and fascinating. Great write!
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10 Years Ago
Ha I felt like when your mother calls you out by your full name. ;) We had a lot of fun with this o.. read moreHa I felt like when your mother calls you out by your full name. ;) We had a lot of fun with this one, glad we brought bubbles your way, that's always a good thing, thanks so much Star!
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So glad you enjoyed our collab...as Frieda said, we have a lot of fun doing them...many thank for th.. read moreSo glad you enjoyed our collab...as Frieda said, we have a lot of fun doing them...many thank for the kind words :)
All the Mumbo and twice the Jumbo at one low price. The Ala pulling the Cadabra all the way up the hill. "We knew she could, we knew she could , we knew..."
Hope it was worth the price of admission, not sure if this is good or bad, either way, thanks for re.. read moreHope it was worth the price of admission, not sure if this is good or bad, either way, thanks for reading Delmar. :)
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Sometimes you don't know exactly "which word" is the magic word. Solution: Use em' all. Yeah I lik.. read moreSometimes you don't know exactly "which word" is the magic word. Solution: Use em' all. Yeah I liked it a lot.
algorithm's principle irony caught in time
allegory's rhythm stuck in abstract rhyme
You two had me at hello with this one. This piece is a festival of wordplay, delicious with the most succulent vocabulary! Separate, you are each amazing poets; together, you both reach a whole new level of awesome!
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..