~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

Sullen butterfly angel,

            in darkly chained wings

  her thirst for freedom

 never quenched,

 her cravings unqualified for flight

   desiring to soar high above the constellations

 planted in a world of woes & dread instead

  black raven, 

        her only ally in silence's gloomy prayer

             paying for the sins of the father,

 mystic moonlight’s melody

          aims to soothe her soul

  yet somber shadows obscure

   spirit’s faint flicker of hope

           dying from destiny’s betrayal,

 made a wish upon an imploding star

   in hopes of redemption's surrender,

   earth stood its ground

 in her kaleidoscopic reflection,

  stillness within the gravitational pull 

 of anguished atonement

abandoning resignations of despair

 on murky ideations of lifetimes past,

 contemplating celestial circumnavigation

  delegating fate’s intervention

as the symbiotic crow flies in retrospect,

cawing feverishly

                   in sympathetic adulation 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

[Frieda P]

''Destined for poetic harmony'...Oh my what an utterly luverly first review. It's come to boycotting has it, sorry Steve, and I know it took a lot for you to leave your own work, started to read this last night, and bam my computer went crazy, needless to say I was in no mood for the bsod last night. Enough of my whinging... Thrilled you loved our collaboration, not sure how we did it, perhaps it's best on a Frieday night, just go with it and have fun, which we definitely did. April found three graphics to choose from and we went with this one, I think we did alright, considering we were both having computer problems, and a wee bit tipsy too, or she was anyway haha. ;) We'll definitely share a group hug with you after your glowing review and I'm sure April would agree...thanks so much my sweet friend. xo

[AprilRN1210]

I agree group hug!!!! What an awesome awesome review!!!!
I was, like Frieda looking at pictures and thought how fun would it be to see what Frieda could come up with these cause they piqued my curiosity... She mentioned collab and of course I was like heck yea!!!! I was intimated at first I admit... I mean come on... But so glad I didn't listen to fears in my head.... So glad you enjoyed it....((hugs)))

[Frieda P]

You're such a silly goose my friend, you're brilliant in your own write, never forget that! Now you're starting to sound like our pal here. ;) MWAH to both of you....!!

[AprilRN1210]

Just speaking my heart ma'am:P
Thank you! So sweet!
Sloppy wet kisses back*

[Frieda P]

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)

[AprilRN1210]

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I don't think it'll stay there...after you get so many reviews it changes...but yes you are both extremely talented...I always call Freida and I the dream team, but I think it suits you too better, for many reasons ;)

[Matching Socks]

Two of my most favourite ladies have come together and created a beautiful poem that touches a very deep corner in my heart. This piece is so beautiful my friends.

[AprilRN1210]

Hey girl!! you are too sweet! Thank you... I am glad that we could touch you... ((hugs)) my friend!

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Ana Sophia, what a sweet review, thanks muchly my friend. x

[Matching Socks]

Hugs back :)
When I saw this I just knew it would deliver something special.

[redzone]

Not even noon on a brightly lit Saturday morning and I am reading a gloomy raven poem from April and Frieda. While I enjoyed a very intriguing poem of darkness, I must also now head back home, bury my head under the covers cause it's the only safe place to heal a broken heart.

The pain of hopelessness is palpable and like that raven I'm cawing and needing redemption... or perhaps see angels escape and fly...

Perhaps it would be better if I just left my heart broken, since I think reading your collaboration tastes alot like more will be coming. Did I say how much I love this poem, yep with every piece of this heart... bowing with respect to Frieda/April.. ;0)
~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Oh sweet man, you've made my morning smile. Enthralled that it was so affecting, that's the best a poet could hope for. Thanks so much, so jazz'd you enjoyed our first collaboration. :) xo

[AprilRN1210]

well, goooood mornin'! awwww what a lovely review... very sweet! I loved every word.. Thank you so much!! This woman is a DREAM to work with and am honored to call her a friend.. I am tickled that you enjoyed it... :)

[redzone]

and here it is almost 3 years later, the poems effect is even more melancholy to me and what is even worse/saddening is that both of you are no longer here to make me want redemption with your collabs and words.... *sigh*

[A. Amos]

Two of my friends and favorite writers, created a magical spell through their words...

I take a bow and pay both of you a standing ovation!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Amos, means a lot coming from you....!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear!

[AprilRN1210]

. standing ovation?... wow..... that does mean a lot coming from you... Thank you so much, A!!

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome my dear

[Sami Khalil]

A great collaboration between two of my favorite and talented writers. You both deserve the appreciation. Excellent...:)................

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Sami, thrilled you enjoyed our collaboration. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome muchly....:)........

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you Sami!!!! Tickled you enjoyed it:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly....

[anne]

What a beautiful poem.....a magical collaboration from two beautiful friends...no words...each line touch the heart.... Sullen butterfly angel,
in darkly chained wings
her thirst for freedom
never quenched,
her cravings unqualified for flight
desiring to soar high above the constellations
planted in a world of woes & dread instead
black raven,.......beautiful.....

[Frieda P]

Muchly appreciate your kind words anne, thanks so much, our first collaboration together and it was great fun....

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much girl... Was fun indeed ---my favorite poet, how could it not be?

[Einstein Noodle]

when i saw you two had collaborated i was instantly titillated and nerve endings began to tingle .. I'm like "It's about time!"
i get here and read and experience this exquisite somber magnificent tribute to one of the best .. how wonderfully you have captured her .. angel butterfly to raven .. i can hear her sultry voice woven in and out of your poem .. she lived her life with Bogey and my want is to believe they are together again .. what a wonderful poem .. such a good job you two..
E.

[Frieda P]

Oh woo, titillated and tingle, tasty tidbits for a review!! Oh Bogie and Bacall, that's sweet harmony there, thanks so much E...! x

[AprilRN1210]

Hey E!!!! Thanks so much! Steamy review;) glad you enjoyed...

[Tom]

Yes indeed, when a free spirit eventually negates those cumbersome, binding shackles and flys off into the joyous wild blue yonder the results are magnificently spellbinding !

An imaginative and wondrously creative collaboration, congratulations you two mighty fine poetesses !

[Frieda P]

Oh coach, you used one of my favorite words 'spellbinding'...how kind of you my friend, enthralled you enjoyed our first collaboration together!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much!!! It was an absolute pleasure:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such wonderful darkness in this...the butterfly longs to fly...but the emotions are so clipped...the flight so weighed down....there is no longer an innocent flutter...

the butterfly has turned into a dark, brooding raven...

"upon a midnight dreary"

excellent collaboration...sounds as one voice...you guys blend together so well...

if only we could circumnavigate the pain.

jacob

[Frieda P]

If only, yes, that would be nice if our words could only make it magically happen, then everyone would want to be a poet....thrilled you enjoyed, thanks so much jacob.

[AprilRN1210]

Agreed--if only... Thank you for this insightful review... Was intimated at first... I mean it IS Frieda... But she is awesome!!! I am glad you enjoyed;)

[Sophy Freebirds]

As soon as i came to your page i couldn't help the temptation to come here. ;) April + Freida= A divine combo.I love flight i love cosmos,you both have used that two favourite aspects of mine to give birth to this free raven.. ;) how i loved it. I can't point my favourite line,because i have many. Sincerely saying this was best collab of yours Freida.April and your voice just merges into a single tone which is lovingly harmonious to my deaf ears. Lol. The soothing of the soul,unquenched thirst all this in a single poem blowed my mind.I would have known two dynamites will produce something out of this world.. cheers to both of you girls.. xx :)

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

'Divine combo'...woo I'm liking that muchly, they should put it on the menu somewhere :) Glad we were able to blow your mind sweet Sophy, thanks so much for your humbling words! xo :)

[AprilRN1210]

Awwww what an awesome review!!! Glad you enjoyed... Thanks girl!!

[Sophy Freebirds]

Yea.. two angels.. :) i am glad i read it ... keep flying n****s. XX

[Rene Salinas]

Oh this is so refreshing to see and a treat to read as I also welcome the image of the Raven . Yes! I tried also to behold his presence if only for a moment, It proved arduous it became hopeless. See I lack in refinement plus as it needs to be said the Raven is a he and he will fail in the company of not one but two attractive women.This is a controlled and soft expression no sharp edges here. I unloaded some of my male pre - historic instinct onto him which his disliked and made him leave while you ladies caresses and fed him so he stayed in recess.

Unity of thoughts gave fruit to enchanting impressions here.

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

Oh you're a smooth talker Renee, indeed the Raven must be of the male persuasion. I'm glad we didn't leave any sharp edges, wouldn't want you to get hurt in our collaboration, thanks so much for your insightful words my friend.

[AprilRN1210]

Lol... Wheeeew now this is a review... Made me giggle you two;)
Thank you, Rene! Tickled we did it justice in our first collab! She is amazing to work with!