~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

Sullen butterfly angel,

            in darkly chained wings

  her thirst for freedom

 never quenched,

 her cravings unqualified for flight

   desiring to soar high above the constellations

 planted in a world of woes & dread instead

  black raven, 

        her only ally in silence's gloomy prayer

             paying for the sins of the father,

 mystic moonlight’s melody

          aims to soothe her soul

  yet somber shadows obscure

   spirit’s faint flicker of hope

           dying from destiny’s betrayal,

 made a wish upon an imploding star

   in hopes of redemption's surrender,

   earth stood its ground

 in her kaleidoscopic reflection,

  stillness within the gravitational pull 

 of anguished atonement

abandoning resignations of despair

 on murky ideations of lifetimes past,

 contemplating celestial circumnavigation

  delegating fate’s intervention

as the symbiotic crow flies in retrospect,

cawing feverishly

                   in sympathetic adulation 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

[Frieda P]

''Destined for poetic harmony'...Oh my what an utterly luverly first review. It's come to boycotting has it, sorry Steve, and I know it took a lot for you to leave your own work, started to read this last night, and bam my computer went crazy, needless to say I was in no mood for the bsod last night. Enough of my whinging... Thrilled you loved our collaboration, not sure how we did it, perhaps it's best on a Frieday night, just go with it and have fun, which we definitely did. April found three graphics to choose from and we went with this one, I think we did alright, considering we were both having computer problems, and a wee bit tipsy too, or she was anyway haha. ;) We'll definitely share a group hug with you after your glowing review and I'm sure April would agree...thanks so much my sweet friend. xo

[AprilRN1210]

I agree group hug!!!! What an awesome awesome review!!!!
I was, like Frieda looking at pictures and thought how fun would it be to see what Frieda could come up with these cause they piqued my curiosity... She mentioned collab and of course I was like heck yea!!!! I was intimated at first I admit... I mean come on... But so glad I didn't listen to fears in my head.... So glad you enjoyed it....((hugs)))

[Frieda P]

You're such a silly goose my friend, you're brilliant in your own write, never forget that! Now you're starting to sound like our pal here. ;) MWAH to both of you....!!

[AprilRN1210]

Just speaking my heart ma'am:P
Thank you! So sweet!
Sloppy wet kisses back*

[Frieda P]

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)

[AprilRN1210]

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I don't think it'll stay there...after you get so many reviews it changes...but yes you are both extremely talented...I always call Freida and I the dream team, but I think it suits you too better, for many reasons ;)

[Cory Barrett]

"made wish on an imploding star"

That line is a poem all unto itself. This is far more dark than i expected from you too. I guess i really don't know anything at all. Maddeningly rich and black on black

[Frieda P]

We're all feathers and light on the outside, and dark on the inside Cory, thanks so much... :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you Charlie Brown..

[Bright Ocean Star]

Oh, Frieda and April, you know how to touch my heart. Chained winged angels aching to fly in the stars and ravens company to bestill her woes....this one was beautiful, artful, and the chains pulled me down through every skillfully crafted line. I read it without music, but yet now the music washes over me and it intensifies the beauty beyond words. Sadness can be beautiful, a combination that is difficult to pull off, yet you both mastered this one in spades. Thank you for this gift on a lonely Sunday morning. Be blessed you two! 100 points and a new favorite in my library vault. :)

[Frieda P]

Thrilled you enjoyed our collaboration Star, thanks so much for your glowing review, nice to see you back at the cafe. :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much for this lovely review.. I am glad you enjoyed it.. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Wow this is just so great you two.Of course I knew you both with make magic together because you are such great writers.I loved every line and they are penned so seamlessly .Marvellous job chica and April ma'am :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie pazzo...we had great fun doing this even though the two of us were having computer glitches, we persevered through, jazz'd you enjoyed! :)

[AprilRN1210]

hey girl!! so glad that you enjoyed it ma'am... was so much fun writing with Frieda... nice to "see" you again... :)

[s y e]

Now who would have thought that two of my utmost favourite poetess' would come together and make a massive bang, I mean, I heard it all the way over here in Scotland. You two really are my fabourite and this is out of this world. I could even begin to guess who wrote what because your eons just seem to merge so perfectly - you both just compliment each other. It's really perfect.

The message behind the lines is so damn powerful and the imagery is so bloody vivid I'm like, holy cheese balls. Oooft!!!

I've tried to review this piece 5 times and each time my computer decided it wanted to dance so I dunno what it's doing now, anyway, I got it working now on my iPad. Lol.

Flip flops, oooooft & all that jazz!!xoxo

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, 'holy cheese balls' that's a new one! What a great review, thanks muchly noodlebumble, those computer glitches seem to be going around, both myself and April were dealing with them whilst trying to put this together, luckily it turned out alright....jazz'd you enjoyed our first collaboration! xo

[AprilRN1210]

awwwww, you are so dang sweet girl!!! I am so tickled that you liked it...I am still having trouble with my dang computer over here laughing at me. but Frieda made it work, thank gooodness... was so much fun writing with her and am over the moon with this awesome review that had me giggling... ((hugs)) ma'am.. you rock!

[Lyn Anderson]

Very seamless collaboration. I like the dark imagery and love the end.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you ma'am... It was a lot of fun! so glad you enjoyed!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much KL...our next one won't be so dark. :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Cool picture, great words, sad music. It's the total package. Excellent work kids.

[Frieda P]

Total package, nice Baby, thanks...

[AprilRN1210]

thank ya:)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well well well, the Thelma and Louise of poetry finally joined forces and created a beautiful dark poem… very Poe of you two.

[AprilRN1210]

Thelma and Louise?.... haha... that made me giggle.. Thank you Dale... I am tickled you enjoyed... was fun working with this partner in crime... although she SWEARS I am always the guilty one... pfffft....

[Frieda P]

Too funny, not the first time I've heard that, I usually end up being Thelma, although I don't see April as the voice of reason. haha....thanks so much Dale....!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome Moonbeam… I don't see either being the voice of reason… thats okay I often referred to as the devil on someone's shoulder, something I am oddly proud of.

[AprilRN1210]

hey!! I am sure I could be "reasonable"-ish... lol
if i tried.... maybe..... possibly.... ok.. maybe not..

[Frieda P]

Believe it or not, I"m pretty level headed, when I wanna be ;) haha

[AprilRN1210]

at work I am... everywhere else, enjoy the quirky side too much... :)
and I believe you can in small doses as well:P

[MsJewel]

Bravo! Two talented poets with unique styles weaving their words together and the result, a dark and delicious masterpiece. It is impossible to pick my favorite line, I would be quoting the entire poem. Instead going into my favs to read again and again.
Bravo lovely ladies!
:) Julie

[AprilRN1210]

Hey girl!!! thank you so much! I am so glad you liked this one.. wow.. we made it to fav's... wahooo!!! ((hugs))

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, our first collaboration in your favorites, coming from the mistress of sexy collabs that's aces Julie. :)

[Jack Wolfe]

The two of you managed to weave a tapestry of darkness, woe, and despair, woven with the beautiful language of two pure hearts and minds. Oh, how I love a journey in the dark. Thank you, you two, a very enjoyable read

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Jack, glad we could persuade you to the dark side.

[AprilRN1210]

Hey Doc!! speaking your language are we?... glad you liked this one.. thank you!

[Jack Wolfe]

Darkness and I have become brethren, lobbyist for its chilled embrace, good to see two members of the light are seeping into our terrain.

[AprilRN1210]

ha, I will play there for a while, but like the light too much to stay:)

[Jack Wolfe]

You'll be back, they 'always' come back . . .

[AprilRN1210]

so many places I can take that comment, but shall behave.... for once :P

[Avinash]

Doom never looked so beautiful. Darkness never appeared so fascinating and two pens came together like conjoined twins. Its phenomenal.

[Frieda P]

Woo 'phenomenal'...that made me smile, thanks muchly Avinash. :)

[AprilRN1210]

wow... Thank you:)