~ celestial circumnavigation COLLABORATION~April & Frieda

Sullen butterfly angel,

            in darkly chained wings

  her thirst for freedom

 never quenched,

 her cravings unqualified for flight

   desiring to soar high above the constellations

 planted in a world of woes & dread instead

  black raven, 

        her only ally in silence's gloomy prayer

             paying for the sins of the father,

 mystic moonlight’s melody

          aims to soothe her soul

  yet somber shadows obscure

   spirit’s faint flicker of hope

           dying from destiny’s betrayal,

 made a wish upon an imploding star

   in hopes of redemption's surrender,

   earth stood its ground

 in her kaleidoscopic reflection,

  stillness within the gravitational pull 

 of anguished atonement

abandoning resignations of despair

 on murky ideations of lifetimes past,

 contemplating celestial circumnavigation

  delegating fate’s intervention

as the symbiotic crow flies in retrospect,

cawing feverishly

                   in sympathetic adulation 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I've interrupted my own writing, not to mention my boycotting of this site, to be one of the first (for there will be many) to congratulate you two on an absolute masterpiece...tipsiness and two insanely-talented poets are apparently the recipe for a perfect collaboration ;P I'm not surprised in the least...I knew it was only a matter of time before you two misfits put your heads together for just such an occasion ;)

But as soon as I turn my attention to the poem itself, it ceases to be a collab in my mind...your voices were destined for poetic harmony...I knew that they would compliment each other sublimely when I first found out that this was happening...I see, hear, and feel both of you in this piece, but I think it would spoil the fun to point out exactly which elements of each of you I detect haha I'll just say that your combined personalities have meshed in a poignant and powerful piece of poetic bliss...I'm not going to cite certain lines or get into the business of dissecting it...everyone will have their favourite bits for sure...I will simply sit back and marvel at the beauty of my two best friends coming together to compose a piece that just commands the respect of every reader that approaches it...I can't tell you how proud I am of you two for accomplishing this...I was gonna suggest a group hug, but then I thought, no, this is your moment...enjoy it...I know that everyone who reads it will do the same :)

[Frieda P]

''Destined for poetic harmony'...Oh my what an utterly luverly first review. It's come to boycotting has it, sorry Steve, and I know it took a lot for you to leave your own work, started to read this last night, and bam my computer went crazy, needless to say I was in no mood for the bsod last night. Enough of my whinging... Thrilled you loved our collaboration, not sure how we did it, perhaps it's best on a Frieday night, just go with it and have fun, which we definitely did. April found three graphics to choose from and we went with this one, I think we did alright, considering we were both having computer problems, and a wee bit tipsy too, or she was anyway haha. ;) We'll definitely share a group hug with you after your glowing review and I'm sure April would agree...thanks so much my sweet friend. xo

[AprilRN1210]

I agree group hug!!!! What an awesome awesome review!!!!
I was, like Frieda looking at pictures and thought how fun would it be to see what Frieda could come up with these cause they piqued my curiosity... She mentioned collab and of course I was like heck yea!!!! I was intimated at first I admit... I mean come on... But so glad I didn't listen to fears in my head.... So glad you enjoyed it....((hugs)))

[Frieda P]

You're such a silly goose my friend, you're brilliant in your own write, never forget that! Now you're starting to sound like our pal here. ;) MWAH to both of you....!!

[AprilRN1210]

Just speaking my heart ma'am:P
Thank you! So sweet!
Sloppy wet kisses back*

[Frieda P]

Yay, Benji got featured review. :)

[AprilRN1210]

I see that... awesome!! he deserves it... so sweet... loved every word:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad you enjoyed the review girls, and thank you for the group hug ;) It's featured now but I don't think it'll stay there...after you get so many reviews it changes...but yes you are both extremely talented...I always call Freida and I the dream team, but I think it suits you too better, for many reasons ;)

[ANM]

A a seamless coupling! Bravo for a dark angel!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much sir... I am tickled that you enjoyed this collab with my dear friend and favorite poetess.. :)

[Ashira Macy]

You ladies did an amazing job, and not surprisingly. What was incredible to me was how your two very different styles melded together into one superstyle. I couldn't tell who contributed what, nor did I want to as it seemed as though one entity wrote this. It has aspects of both of your personalities for sure. I saw Frieda as the butterfly, and April as the angel part of this being. Beautifully done ladies, this was truly amazing.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much girl.. I am glad that you enjoyed our first collab of many to come hopefully.. she is a dream to work with and I am honored to call her friend... she always manages to touch my heart with her writes and I was tickled to be able to work with her.. you are always so sweet and I am tickled that you enjoyed this one... ((hugs)) to you!

[NoelHC]

A very good collaboration, I detected little touches of each of you in here that I have come to respect and enjoy, and which gave me little hints at who contributed what. Well done, mes dames!

[AprilRN1210]

yes, Noel... you pay too much attention sometimes.. gotta watch you.. lol
thank you sir.. glad you enjoyed.. ((hugs)) this morning...

[NoelHC]

I tried my last word only scan, it would appear Freida isn't in on your "dirty little secret" ; )

[AprilRN1210]

nope, shhhh my secret...lol

[Cassie]

Firstly, kudos to you both...you nailed it so right here and then how do you come up with such a good title, I mean where do those words come from, guess you are walking dictionaries coz I swear there is no way in my hundred years I would think of such a heading, the poem...you blew it, blew me away and noodles review below is the best of all reviews.....

[Frieda P]

The title is actually part of April's words in the poem, I thought it brilliant too, thanks so much Cassie!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much! glad you enjoyed.. I am a sucker for alliteration and that's why I chose that word... love it.. not used often enough.. lol

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Where to begin..............You have merged like melted chocolate together in this rather reflective, sombre and sad piece. Given you both have similarities this is little surprise. I can sense you both so strongly in this and as a pair to have balance. It has Frieda's ethereality and April's directness and brought together it has a warmth despite the 'black' coating of dark and bitter chocolate. I just ate every last piece!

[Frieda P]

Woo what a poetic review, thanks so much John, you have some dark chocolate left on your lip there. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

And................

[AprilRN1210]

haha.. ummmm. yea.. at a loss for words, so will just say "thank you"...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

I really enjoyed the flow of this piece - your voices meld beautifully here.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Rita...

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much.. I am glad you enjoyed.

[Tai Ryens]

I have to say, both of your styles blend well to create a piece with a unique style in itself, and both the concept and presentation of the poem is awestriking. Dark as well. A butterfly fluttering across the open air with the illusion of freedom, feeling its hunger for freedom never quenched as it soared across endless skies, yet,facing destiny as an adversity when trying to strive for more freedom. Using the crow as a subtle nod to destiny was also a clever idea as well.
Well done to the both of you!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tai, glad you enjoyed our first collaboration together!

[AprilRN1210]

I am with my partner in crime.. Thank you.. we are tickled that you enjoyed... :)

[Kayleigh]

Well you guys certainly knocked this one out the ballpark didn't you? Like, damn you two make a damn fine poetic couple, haha. You guys just knocked my brain out I think... Well done.

[Frieda P]

Ha, hope it didn't hurt muchly, thanks Kayleigh! :)

[AprilRN1210]

Thanks girl.. glad you enjoyed... Frieda is a dream to work with:)

[Troy Henson]

Hahaha my two faves and this wonderful display of writing...how excellent this was to read.

Imagery, structure, tone, feel this one has it all ladies.

Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Troy, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration. :)

[AprilRN1210]

hey Troy.. thank you... you are so sweet.. I am glad you enjoyed.

[Mayank]

I had to read twice, then I read again and again, then I decided this is masterpiece!

[Frieda P]

Wow thanks so much Mayank, muchly appreciated!

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you, am glad you enjoyed it..