Sun's dim betrayal...

Rushing towards 

         placating shadows,

resolved in empty

               hushes' recessed corners

strangling in translation,

light shatters

                        prism's safety

   blindly perplexed

             in shade's hazy view,

frozen memories

          thawed to embers

  digging in the ash

                to remember,

how the gleam led

                to such dark detours

   when windows of reason

       abruptly closed

moments of sanity seem to

             trickle down,

dancing faster

               to catch up with dawn,

closed my eyes in shallow

        depth's recall, 

  asylum harbors

           taunting deceptions

   setting fire to denial's 

                   flared up insides,

                blistering under a sun's

                              dim betrayal

Author's Note

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

first let me say, what an awesome damn song.. I haven't ever heard it before.. oh wow... I love it... get lost in the beat, then she starts singing and holy hell.. ooooh yes...

ok, on to your writing... girl... you took me on a downward spiral, that seduced me lower and lower... shadows seducing me from the darkness.. cooling contrasts from the sweltering heat... beckoning me to quench what my soul desires... too bad once I give in, I see the betrayal... but what a ride...

[Frieda P]

I adore Jill Tracy, she is beyond talented...jazz'd you enjoyed the music April.

Seductive shadows, I quite like that description...and yes OH what a ride....thanks so much, I know you get the dark side too....

[AprilRN1210]

oh yea... caught the anger in here well.... betrayal will do that to ya... this one doesn't punch, it scratches deep a wound that oozes on the page... and yes... I like her...

[Frieda P]

Ha I should file down my claws before someone gets maimed. :)

[AprilRN1210]

sharp precision is deadly... but necessary sometimes... I wouldn't... :)

[Frieda P]

You know I was just kidding ;)

[AprilRN1210]

no really?.... couldn't tell AT ALL... :P

[Frieda P]

They need a sarcasm button at the cafe.... ;P

[AprilRN1210]

ha, when dealing with smartasses like you and me, definitely... I get it easily, but that is because that is where my brain was to begin with... lol
gotten me in plenty of trouble but oh well.. just me... can't help it.. button would help... big blaring red one that says, DUUUH.... lol

[Frieda P]

HA exactly, I just consider anything that comes with that southern drawl as sass. ;)

[AprilRN1210]

haha... yuuup.... just cute enough to get away with it... but like you... those claws are needed sometimes... keep em sharp:)

[redzone]

Sharp claws.. er.. nails. Frieda, April!!?? HA!! I never would have guessed... nope, never. :-p. How could I resist these comments.. lol. But I always love to intrude..
~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Only when absolutely necessary, or for fun!! haha ;)

[AprilRN1210]

well hey there! yea... watch out for her claws... apparently i don't though. haha.. not going there again... else she makes me blush again... :P

[NoelHC]

What a web of words you can weave, pulling the reader in deeper and deeper. Sometimes I have to read a few times to get some semblance of sense as the short lines break up my thinking. Well woven again, spider woman.

[Frieda P]

Ha 'spider woman' made me laugh, thanks so much, I just like to keep you on your poetic toes Noel. .....

[redflutterby]

Amazing singer and your words...well they resonate with me. Without light there would be no shadows...but sometimes its that very light that hurts us the most. Shadows can comfort..we can hide our innermost pain in then. We may even feel our safest there. Under the sun we are fully exposed and vulnerable. x

[Frieda P]

Exactly Andrea, you got it in one....thanks my sweet friend. xo

[redflutterby]

Even in my insanity I have my moments of clarity....x

[Frieda P]

Lucky you.....xo

[redflutterby]

Pffftttt....ain't no luck here hun...x

[Moonie]

I love it! You have presented it so well. My favourite lines would be:
"digging in the ash
                to remember,
how the gleam led
                to such dark detours"
In my library!

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Moon, muchly appreciated!

[Einstein Noodle]

you are the Mistress of "run on" and contradiction .. each and every word you choose deliberately .. at least thats the feel i get .. i have never been able to read your poetry just once .. it demands my attention .. and open mind ... this one is no exception ... you just get better at it ;)
we want .. no we need the healing .. only to be denied .. and the sifting .. the endless sifting past fires for answers ... only finding the same pain and anguish .. what a beautiful, beautiful sadness :(
E.

[Moonie]

Sorry to barge in here. But that is exactly how I feel E.
Frieda, your writing is truly exquisite!

[Frieda P]

Wow you two, I'm speechless, thanks muchly, you've humbled me....!

'run on'...you saying I have a big mouth E? :) x

[Einstein Noodle]

well .. maaaaaaaaaaybe!!! if only the more to kiss Freiday ... which .. i certainly need not point out .. is coming ... in only ... a timeless blink ... be well dahlink .. love you always :))
E.

[Frieda P]

You're a brave man E....be afraid, be very afraid haha MWAH! xo

[Einstein Noodle]

i am a Harley Davidson man .. i take risks.. i jump out of planes .. i smirk at danger ... bring it!! and i send you my arms ... send them back please .. i need them to eat in the morning :)))))))))))
m.E.

[Frieda P]

Ha a Harley can't hold a candle to a pissed off Italiano woman sweetie!! haha ;P

[Einstein Noodle]

oh baby .. you have not saddled up behind mine! ... you better hold on tight ;)

[Frieda P]

Frisky for a Thursday, aren't ya E? ;) haha

[Einstein Noodle]

friskier still on Freiday ... ;)

[Matching Socks]

Only you can make dark and angry sound so beautiful.
Sometimes, I think we should just swear off men.
But then, we do kind of need them and they're not ALL bad.

[Frieda P]

What a luverly thing to say on both counts Ana Sophia. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This has such a dark feel to it my Lady. Disappointment, sadness and angst flows in shallow, folorn bitterness across this page.

[Frieda P]

Bitter, not so much, more like pissed off as bloody hell....thanks John. :)