Sun's dim betrayal...

Rushing towards 

         placating shadows,

resolved in empty

               hushes' recessed corners

strangling in translation,

light shatters

                        prism's safety

   blindly perplexed

             in shade's hazy view,

frozen memories

          thawed to embers

  digging in the ash

                to remember,

how the gleam led

                to such dark detours

   when windows of reason

       abruptly closed

moments of sanity seem to

             trickle down,

dancing faster

               to catch up with dawn,

closed my eyes in shallow

        depth's recall, 

  asylum harbors

           taunting deceptions

   setting fire to denial's 

                   flared up insides,

                blistering under a sun's

                              dim betrayal

Author's Note

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

first let me say, what an awesome damn song.. I haven't ever heard it before.. oh wow... I love it... get lost in the beat, then she starts singing and holy hell.. ooooh yes...

ok, on to your writing... girl... you took me on a downward spiral, that seduced me lower and lower... shadows seducing me from the darkness.. cooling contrasts from the sweltering heat... beckoning me to quench what my soul desires... too bad once I give in, I see the betrayal... but what a ride...

[Frieda P]

I adore Jill Tracy, she is beyond talented...jazz'd you enjoyed the music April.

Seductive shadows, I quite like that description...and yes OH what a ride....thanks so much, I know you get the dark side too....

[AprilRN1210]

oh yea... caught the anger in here well.... betrayal will do that to ya... this one doesn't punch, it scratches deep a wound that oozes on the page... and yes... I like her...

[Frieda P]

Ha I should file down my claws before someone gets maimed. :)

[AprilRN1210]

sharp precision is deadly... but necessary sometimes... I wouldn't... :)

[Frieda P]

You know I was just kidding ;)

[AprilRN1210]

no really?.... couldn't tell AT ALL... :P

[Frieda P]

They need a sarcasm button at the cafe.... ;P

[AprilRN1210]

ha, when dealing with smartasses like you and me, definitely... I get it easily, but that is because that is where my brain was to begin with... lol
gotten me in plenty of trouble but oh well.. just me... can't help it.. button would help... big blaring red one that says, DUUUH.... lol

[Frieda P]

HA exactly, I just consider anything that comes with that southern drawl as sass. ;)

[AprilRN1210]

haha... yuuup.... just cute enough to get away with it... but like you... those claws are needed sometimes... keep em sharp:)

[redzone]

Sharp claws.. er.. nails. Frieda, April!!?? HA!! I never would have guessed... nope, never. :-p. How could I resist these comments.. lol. But I always love to intrude..
~~redzone

[Frieda P]

Only when absolutely necessary, or for fun!! haha ;)

[AprilRN1210]

well hey there! yea... watch out for her claws... apparently i don't though. haha.. not going there again... else she makes me blush again... :P

[ANTO]

The light giveth and the light taketh away. It has to be ...
What are we without our shadows dear friend?
This poem aches as much as salves.

[Daydreamer]

frozen memories

thawed to embers

digging in the ash

to remember,

how the gleam led

to such dark detours

when windows of reason

abruptly closed
-favourite lines in this piece,for me! Incredible imagery,artist ;)
stay blessed xx💕💕💕💕💕

[kublakhan27]

As promised, I'm returning to cover some of the pieces I never made it to earlier...to be honest, I hate being late arriving at your poems, as there is really nothing left for me to say when I do arrive...

moments of sanity seem to
trickle down,
dancing faster
to catch up with dawn...this is just what my sleepless nights feel like...it doesn't just feel like I'm losing sleep, it feels like I'm losing sanity, especially when my mind gets caught up in the places you evoke here...you know I'm familiar with them...and when the morning comes, and the sunlight offers no consolation, one feels betrayed...in fact, the sun can only serve to rub salt in the wounds sometimes, and I wonder if I'd be more at peace in the rain...but like I said, there isn't much more I can say...I find it so easy to relate to your work...sometimes it feels like you're in my subconscious...it's no wonder you inspire so much of my own writing...brilliant work here love, but as I've said countless times, you are capable of producing nothing less...xo

[Tai Ryens]

Perceiving the outside forces to be the shadows of evil because they alter the backbone of your memories, morphing what had seemed to be at first the obvious (a sun shining in the horizon) into something else, not quite a sun, just something that resembles one (hence the betrayal). Your speaker's denial is apparent also while she flees away from the truth, trying to preserve the memories she's kept. Well done, as always!

[Ashira Macy]

frozen memories
thawed to embers
digging in the ash

Favorite lines in here for sure. I see those memories quickly turn from an icy blue to red hot, and then finally gray. Sometimes it is best just to forget. Betrayal hurts forever unless we do.

[Mayank]

"when windows of reason
abruptly closed
moments of sanity seem to
trickle down"
Its melting insanity here... the dark sub consciousness is unleashed and later burnt by sun rays. When you wake up and see around same old things, that you have hated for a long long time.

[willweb]

Once again Frieda P. I come here and I stare and think and collect thoughts. This poem hurt, as one who has been betrayed in the past I know how this feels. Knives hurt but when they are held by a friend or loved one the pain never seems to end. I have learned now I do not read your poems, I experience them. This was great.

[Rene Salinas]

The melody and drama in whis writing is enchanting to me. Inside Frieda's chamber and I could assume is cold so december and I guess might as well watch out for the raven as if he is no here he is coming. Windows of reason have called it a day and broke for recess. The session resumes at impending doom will manifest through the fire of denial burn baby burn through betrayal.

I really like this introspective moment.


Although rather you than me.

Thankyou

[Avinash]

Dark dark love and I love it. You offer the drinks of unknown kind to your readers.
Give us more ;)

[R Smith]

this one's so deep I felt like I was digging mines and dancing with stalagmites for a while, then just as i get a window to see through you snatch it away and I see a trap unfold where the yearned for light of truth burns in the heat of the gross sun, did I get carried away............easily done with your work Frieda, wonderful.