.... dead flowers in the final countdown

last breath's illusion

slipped into your shadow, 

      felt like darkly molten lava

    run amuck with an edge in authority 

choked on dense, upheaval's last breath

    shooting sparks within your superiority

we favored you the name death

            yet, knowing nothing more

                        then yesterday's calling,

         still  impoverished in your vitality of expression

                               an overly creative humor's

                                                  quest for productivity, 

  

comfortably numb in your belief's reality

     as deprived of knowledge 'til after the fact,

       could possibly trip the next detached illusion

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

I wish I had your finesse some days. I feel like a cave man with my club of anger, lacking in subtleties and social graces next to your metaphorical treatments of life's trials and tribulations. I can only echo the sentiments of the many other reviews here.

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, only in poetry, we chat enough, you should know that....thanks KL. ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

"we favored you the name death
yet, knowing nothing more
then yesterday's calling,"
I enjoy this kind of poetry. Dancing with the death. I tell people. Death never lose. Nice flow of thoughts leading to a strong ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

No, death is never the loser....thanks for your thoughts John.

[Ruth]

Vicious cycle...and a favourite song of mine to accompany this piece hon...touching, tearfully so xo

[Frieda P]

It is a great song, thanks muchly Poppy. x

[Ruth]

Welcome darlin, anytime xo

[Sophy Freebirds]

O death where is your glory now!! Death is a very delicate subject matter but the manner in which you have handled it is really skillful. I liked the line "we favored you the name death" here you have very clearly mirrored that death is what we see it to be.Either it can be the end or the beginning.Its just an 'illusion' of which we are scared. Very well written Freida. Sorry i haven't been able to check out your works lately.But finally i am here. :)

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Oh you made up for it tenfold Sophy...glad to see you back and for such a glowing review, grazie mille. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

:) glad to visit you back and finding such a gem again..