sipping coffee with a rock star from Mars....‏

random rumbling's ramble

Flammable dandelions in my iced lullaby

nostalgia for one in a cage's gilded alibi

wild horses on fire, rocking a bloody sun

castles crumble in the needle of an eye

layover collision in the hiccups of whimsy's madness

ecstasy's debacle'd brambles were twice forsaken

dancing in dove stew's handicapped heart lounge

raven and the butterfly had a pity party at the peanut gallery

audacious pomposity came to call, veer'd a left to stage right

tripping over images in rear hue mirror's kaleidoscopic view

bodacious Beethoven rumbles a thousand poetic kisses deep

whilst Walt slayed fractured Krakens cawing on his way to green,

once upon a dream and pomegranate wine's zephyr'd promises

canopied under wild thyme blowing in poppy's scarlet rhymes

still I sat quietly, sipping coffee with a rock star from Mars.... 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Wow, just wow...there is no review I can offer that can do justice to this undisputed epic...you continue to outdo yourself and blow me away in the process...I have no lines to single out, for every one is absolute perfection...of course the title hooked me on impact, but the poem that followed is one of the best things I've read in a long time...even the clip is perfect...you know I love elemental imagery, and the clash of fire and ice right out of the gate was enough to leave me awestruck...it will be a criminal act if this does not appear on the top of every meaningful list on the site...this felt like a visit to a coffee shop on Mars, but I could go to Mars myself, and not in my wildest dreams would I come back with something like this...'raven and the butterfly had a pity party at the peanut gallery'...I suppose this line is the unofficial cornerstone of the poem, but how can one truly pick out a cornerstone in this feast of poetic brilliance? I can say nothing more, I am out of superlatives...this is phenomenal poetry from the most phenomenal poet I know...you're a pretty phenomenal person too ;) This should be in an Oxford anthology, and would not be out of place amongst the grandmasters of any era, and I have lots of anthologies...again, I can only offer an unequivocal wow...xo

[Frieda P]

Wow, just wow yourself Benji, you just blew me away sweetie! I'm speechless reading your review, and you know Mrs R is hardly at a loss for words most time....since this was written even before you knew where this one came from, I'm double wow'd. Thanks so much my dear friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

You're so welcome Mrs.R...I've read it another few times since leaving the review and it still sends chills up my spine...whatever you do Mrs.R, never lose this poem, cuz if you ever did decide to try publishing, this is a prime candidate ;) xo

[Frieda P]

I'm never going to come down off the ceiling if you keep this up BEnji! :) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'll keep you company up there Mrs.R...I might get vertigo but I'll take it ;) x

[Baby Ricochet]

Ziggy Stardust was a Spider from Mars

[Frieda P]

Who you think I was drinking coffee with Baby?

[Baby Ricochet]

You know he was forced into retirement by a massive heart attack. He lives in Woodstock New York now.

[Frieda P]

No I didn't know that, I don't think it was the coffee though.

[Shirlena]

It is stifling to me the way they are taking these fairy tales and making them dark and macabre...this doesn't sound like the theme to the snow white we all knew and loved does it? :) This poem is hand in hand with the mood of this poem so dead on. Blows a cold breeze through the bones...excellent write mommee.

[Frieda P]

I haven't seen the movie, I think it's based on Sleeping Beauty, I just loved the music, thanks Shirlena. As if fairy tales aren't already darkly fractured dahlin'!

[Shirlena]

The song sounds so haunting in this version. I wonder if Angelina Jolie is singing this?

[Frieda P]

She sings too, this is Lana Del Rey.....

[Shirlena]

Oh okay, she does sing it so sweet voiced yet depressed :)

[Frieda P]

She has an unusual style, just like you. :)

[A. Amos]

Great work my friend...btw if you move to mars, take me with you as Rock is already vanished on earth!
I'm done with miley or bieber:)

[Frieda P]

Oh geez...gawd forbid those two take over! You'll be the first to know A. :)

[willweb]

What a magical collection of thoughts this poem is. Now this was one heck of a ride Frieda P. Spellbinding is how I see it. I really enjoyed this today.

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you came along Will, thanks so much....

[NoelHC]

A very interesting poem, for a "random rumbling's ramble" this is very readable, and the images, while whimsical, ironic, or just plain bodacious, are vivid, and stirred visions of what you were saying. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Perhaps because you're a poet too Noel, we get each other's drifts. :)

[NoelHC]

Thank you for the honor, I have only recently tried my hand at poems, so coming from you, it means a lot.

[Einstein Noodle]

no one will ever know what goes on behind those eyes ;) such a dreamy mystery .. i see dandelions bursting into flame all over my yard .. i like that a lot .. and this "once upon a dream and pomegranate wine's zephyr'd promises" really stands out for me. also recognize some recurring themes in this one
E.

[Frieda P]

Just don't be mowing them down with that big tractor of yours :) ha...AH, you got it in one my sweet E!!

[Einstein Noodle]

it is a big tractor .. and i'm a mowing maniac :) .. but i will watch out for any dandys unexploded .. mwuahahahahaha

[Frieda P]

Yeah I heard that about you through the grapevine, how much longer will you be mine? ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

forever .. of course :))))))))) (what grapevine?) ... they only grow in Italia you know!

[Beccy]

Fascinating how each line stands perfectly on it's own, yet the whole blends quite magnificently.

Whatever is in that coffee, how about sharing. :)

Beccy.

[Frieda P]

Coffee is always brewing, c'mon over! :)

[Lydia Shutter]

I recognize lines from a lot of classic rock songs in this one...Raven and Butterfly, Wild Horses, and a few others.....very cleverly interwoven with your thoughts to spark my memories. When audacious pomposity comes to call it is best not to answer the doorbell if you ask me! :) Well, if it is a rock star from Mars at the door, though, brew a pot of coffee and have a seat. What a great journey this one is. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

You know there's always music in there somewhere Lydikey, thanks so much for your kind words, jazz'd it took you there... :) Coffee is on!

[anne]

raven and butterfly having a pity party at the peanut gallery....beautiful.....It looks a wonderful imagination has find words on paper......obvio.....superv writing......

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much anne, glad you enjoyed the trip....

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Hmmmm ow should I put this? This poem is out of this world… it is all kinds of psychedelic with a pinch of crazy cool… haha in other words right up my alley, well it would be up my alley if I had one, LOL

[Frieda P]

Cause you're crazy just like me! haha thanks Dale. :)