sipping coffee with a rock star from Mars....‏

random rumbling's ramble

Flammable dandelions in my iced lullaby

nostalgia for one in a cage's gilded alibi

wild horses on fire, rocking a bloody sun

castles crumble in the needle of an eye

layover collision in the hiccups of whimsy's madness

ecstasy's debacle'd brambles were twice forsaken

dancing in dove stew's handicapped heart lounge

raven and the butterfly had a pity party at the peanut gallery

audacious pomposity came to call, veer'd a left to stage right

tripping over images in rear hue mirror's kaleidoscopic view

bodacious Beethoven rumbles a thousand poetic kisses deep

whilst Walt slayed fractured Krakens cawing on his way to green,

once upon a dream and pomegranate wine's zephyr'd promises

canopied under wild thyme blowing in poppy's scarlet rhymes

still I sat quietly, sipping coffee with a rock star from Mars.... 

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Wow, just wow...there is no review I can offer that can do justice to this undisputed epic...you continue to outdo yourself and blow me away in the process...I have no lines to single out, for every one is absolute perfection...of course the title hooked me on impact, but the poem that followed is one of the best things I've read in a long time...even the clip is perfect...you know I love elemental imagery, and the clash of fire and ice right out of the gate was enough to leave me awestruck...it will be a criminal act if this does not appear on the top of every meaningful list on the site...this felt like a visit to a coffee shop on Mars, but I could go to Mars myself, and not in my wildest dreams would I come back with something like this...'raven and the butterfly had a pity party at the peanut gallery'...I suppose this line is the unofficial cornerstone of the poem, but how can one truly pick out a cornerstone in this feast of poetic brilliance? I can say nothing more, I am out of superlatives...this is phenomenal poetry from the most phenomenal poet I know...you're a pretty phenomenal person too ;) This should be in an Oxford anthology, and would not be out of place amongst the grandmasters of any era, and I have lots of anthologies...again, I can only offer an unequivocal wow...xo

[Frieda P]

Wow, just wow yourself Benji, you just blew me away sweetie! I'm speechless reading your review, and you know Mrs R is hardly at a loss for words most time....since this was written even before you knew where this one came from, I'm double wow'd. Thanks so much my dear friend. xo

[kublakhan27]

You're so welcome Mrs.R...I've read it another few times since leaving the review and it still sends chills up my spine...whatever you do Mrs.R, never lose this poem, cuz if you ever did decide to try publishing, this is a prime candidate ;) xo

[Frieda P]

I'm never going to come down off the ceiling if you keep this up BEnji! :) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'll keep you company up there Mrs.R...I might get vertigo but I'll take it ;) x

[just Penny]

wow...I love the surrealism in this, but the lines "nostalgia for one in a cage's gilded alibi" and "once upon a dream and pomegranate wine's zephyr'd promises" are simply amazing. Kinda sounds like love gone wrong. A good blend of myth and fantasy. Penny

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Penny, glad you enjoyed the trip....

[Ayushi]

You have got a brilliant and imaginative mind..You bring wonderful concept along with excellent words....
Great write :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ayushi, I usually like to use it for evil, poetry grounds me. ;)

[Avinash]

I have reasons to believe that you are a butterfly in many of your dreams and past lives. God goofed up this time ! :)

[Frieda P]

AWH you're a sweetheart Avinash! :)

[Lyn Anderson]

The title is rockin, and so is the poem. Very trippy, madmoiselle.

[Frieda P]

I like trippy, thanks KL.

[Pryde Foltz]

I saw David Bowie in concert … in Calgary … slept out in minus 25 to get the tickets. Me and a lot of middle-aged people smoking pot … I was in high school; I was not smoking pot; just shivering until my limbs froze in place. Great, great concert. Long live the Thin White Duke. Awesome write, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Weren't you brave Pryde, thanks muchly...

[Pryde Foltz]

He is definitely worth it:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Well this was certainly a wild ride! Love the images; having a maze-in-the-mind kind of day, and your words made me feel at home.
"raven and the butterfly had a pity party at the peanut gallery..." Love it!

[Frieda P]

Ha I'm in good company so!? Thanks Rita. :)

[Tai Ryens]

Watching heaven break apart at the seams and feeling like it is a "castle crumble (ing) in the needle of an eye". 'Twas truly a spectacle to read this, I enjoyed it muchly.

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed Tai, thanks muchly. :)

[Ally Monique]

For a ramble this is really lovely! Your works are always so "out of this world" and visionary :) Always enjoyable.
"Flammable dandelions in my iced lullaby"
I really loved the first line- im a big fan of contrast :P
The movie looks awesome! I almost saw it last weekend, but I saw Dawn of the planet of the Apes instead ^^

[AprilRN1210]

well, coming from the "peanut gallery" I'd say it makes for a great start to the day.. Yes, ma'am... pass the coffee cuz I am dancing along with the beauty of your magical mind... Those "hiccups of whimsy's madness" are so deliciously delightful when coming from you.... love this song.. I haven't ever heard it before, but jeez... gave me images alone with the melody, added to your words had me swaying sensually with a few of Mar's inhabitants... why should I have to stay on venus?... I wanna play to.. nice job ma'am.. as always.. so enchanting are your creations..

[Scott Metro]

A bit fractured to me...but I'm only running on 4 cylinders today.
Enjoyed the illustrative words and as always the sparkle of your metaphors..

Scotty
xo

[Frieda P]

I'll take fractured, I wasn't going for A Midsummer Night's Dream here. ;) Grazie wolfie, someone have a rough night? :) xo

[Scott Metro]

LOL....no.....just got up early and it's been a long day...

[Frieda P]

How can you tell if you just got up?...ha

[Scott Metro]

Let me rephrase this...so that you might understand in part or total...I got up early this morning...lol......smarty pants...hah