Black magic extraordinaire...

COLLABORATION KUBLAKHAN & FRIEDA

we converse helter skelter
in your soft killer approach,
teetering on wooden innuendo's third wheel
white satin nights turned black magic dust
fever is distracting and unchained
like rainfall on the frying pan sand
foundations of celluloid Shangri-la
superseded over hills and far away
where your romance ransacks education
in a heist of Merlin's stash of love potion
old man shooed from monotone incantations
shipped to a jenga tower of tobacco song
something in my moves attracted nothing
in the smoke ring of your seduction vacuum
now the trouble with nothing is something
convoluted metaphors of destiny
paralyzed in your concocted rhyme
enchanted in sorcerer's scented sage 
nestled in your judgement's serenade
rushing through heady spirited senses
quintessentially rendered of illusory inflection
modulating at time warp speed's redemption
difference apparent in reflection's fiction
processing a paradigm of connoisseur's legends
slipped from sleight of hand's stacked holy book
interpretations beat the clock at half past tock
while the ticker-tape parade ceases and concedes
pecking order to Rhiannon's sentencing caravan
brittle femurs burst into balloons of blisters
on the sizzle of the paved grave site
of paradise lost and lamented too late
felicity's hymn flutters in a warped reel
left to sweat rhythms in the red-eyed sun machine
take off your sinful scared skin exposing the scar
abandon mystery's magic tour of your throne
shadows take on a brilliant hue when liberated

Author's Note

Reviews

[J. K. Beach]

Well, I can't always tell where one metaphor leaves off and another begins, but it is brilliant! I am in awe of such exquisite lines as:

'where your romance ransacks education
in a heist of Merlin's stash of love potion
old man shooed from monotone incantations
shipped to a Jenga tower of tobacco song.'

I see altogether in a single room of my mind, scattered blocks, broken beakers, and the Marlboro Man strumming a ditty in the corner. Amazing! Did you collaborate one line at a time? It flows seamlessly, however you managed it. Superlative worthy effort. Excellent work, both of you!

[Frieda P]

Ha you want me to explain the method to our madness. ;) Those are the genius's lines....I love them too, thanks so much J.K.!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Maybe not one line at a time but pretty close...thank you JK :)

[Frieda P]

There are whips involved, I will tell you that much, ask Dali. ;) ha

[kublakhan27]

Haha So that's not a sunburn I feel on my back after all ;)

[kublakhan27]

Well I guess this was one of our best after all Mrs.R...writing with you is a blast ;) xo

100 ticker-tape parades :)

[Frieda P]

Half past tock Benji! :) xo

[AprilRN1210]

well didn't this one take me on different twists and turns and conflicting imagery and emotions.. jeez I felt I was in a labyrinth with something new and exciting jumping from every corner and hidden passage... It felt so mysterious, dark, delicious in the beginning, then quickly turned into more evil, twisted, maliciousness towards the end.. It definitely had my heart fluttering "helter skelter" and my mind racing to keep up...

there are a few lines in here that I absolutely loved..
"convoluted metaphors of destiny
paralyzed in your concocted rhyme"...... you knew I would love those lines though...

and the last line... love it.. "shadows take on a brilliant hue when liberated".... how true is that..

my favorite collab yet of ya'lls ... awesome!!!

[kublakhan27]

Haha That seems to be our niche...delicious beginnings that evolve ever so gradually into darkness ;) Those lines are all courtesy of Frieda, as are most of the great lines...she hates when I say this but I just follow her lead, she's the only person who can inspire me when I'm struggling for inspiration...we're both quite fond of this one though, we think it's one of the best, if not the best, one we've done to date...so glad you enjoyed it April :)

[AprilRN1210]

well, I don't see any struggling here.. awesome.. but ya'll know I love both of your works.. and together can't be anything but extraordinary.. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Nonetheless I have Frieda to thank for that...I'm not sure if she's here right now but I know she'll be jazzed with your review ;)

[AprilRN1210]

well.. I am glad on both accounts.. ((hugs)) to both of ya'll..

[Frieda P]

Wooooooo doing the happy dance! :) Thanks April, you just made my night....

[kublakhan27]

((hugs)) :)

[Frieda P]

Extraordinary... :) x

[AprilRN1210]

yep, extraordinary.. you're welcome ma'am...

[Frieda P]

I was talking about your review and Benji's hugs, but okay. ;)

[AprilRN1210]

hey hey hey!!! my hugs are extraordinary too :(
I'm crushed...

[kublakhan27]

How bout a group hug? haha

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, are we gonna sing Kumbaya too? haha

[kublakhan27]

Haha Why not? We may as well have an all-out love-in ;P

[Frieda P]

If not a beatnik, you should have been a hippie in the least Benji. :) haha

[kublakhan27]

I think I'm still a hippie Mrs.R, and I actually have been referred to as a beatnik in the past ;)

[Frieda P]

I definitely believe that, we must be driving April crazy.... :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm sure we're entertaining to anyone who's privy to our conversations ;)

[AprilRN1210]

can't drive someone somewhere they already are... group hug eh?.. pffft can't compete with extraordinary hugs that you give apparently:(

[kublakhan27]

Haha Mrs.R is a great hugger...I still have to stay on her good side though ;)

[Ashira Macy]

You showcase an amazing array of vocabulary in your writing which is great, it helps bring the work to life. Nice work!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed our collaboration!

[Tai Ryens]

Brilliantly intertwined series of metaphors that leave my thoughts in flusters while I attempt to decipher its meaning; so very many references indeed! My personal favorites have to be the mention of Shangri-La and Rhiannon, with the addition of connoisseurs to further describe what I presume to be a relationship. Shangri-La and its majestic wonders, possibly only in fantasy, so I had immediately been sent on my toes with the feeling that the relationship would either akin to a trap utilizing something pleasurable as a lure, possibly even with an adventure purely based on fantasy. Fantasy or not, it truly is an adventure set aside only for those willing to take extraordinary risks. The mentioning of Rhiannon had thrown me off into a separate direction, however.

Drawing parallels between the tale of Rhiannon I see that your speaker seems to have gotten involved along with a third-party that had seemed to ruin everything. Likewise, the "balloons of blisters'' are your speaker's romanticized fantasies, looking forward to the reward and willing to bear through the pain of watching as the parades turned on them due to the belief that better is approaching, one day or the other, much like Rhiannon had been framed by her maids with a slaughtered puppy's blood, doomed to live through her punishments until her son's return (the reward).

Brilliant and well-written!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your in-depth and insightful review Tai.!..Rhiannon was all Kublakhan....

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Tai, it's been cool seeing different people cite lines by both of us as their favourites...so glad you enjoyed it.

[Scott Metro]

This is utterly mad...!!



Scott

[kublakhan27]

Haha probably because the composers are utterly mad...thank you Scott.

[Scott Metro]

:)
just saying...LOL

[kublakhan27]

LOL It's okay, I get you :) Frieda will weigh in soon too I'm sure.

[Frieda P]

This coming from the hungover rabid wolf. ;) Ha-ha

[Scott Metro]

I know...I know.....hah
S..................

[Rob Santana]

Intelligently written. I had to put on my metaphorical beanie for this one. The black magick title grabbed my attention.

[kublakhan27]

Metaphors tend to be the cornerstone of our collabs...they just seem to come naturally when we pool our ideas together...so glad you enjoyed it Rob.

[Frieda P]

I can just picture you in a beanie Rob. ;) Thanks muchly....

[A. Amos]

This was magical guys, love the start with helter skelter...all the way to the end. Respect!

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille A, we had great fun doing this one, jazz'd you enjoyed!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much A :)

[NoelHC]

Powerful words and pictures. Song choice title says it all, "Extraordinary" And I saw what you did there with that "half past tock while the ticker-tape" thing!
A great collaboration.

[Frieda P]

Oh woo, we each did one of those lines!! Grazie Noel, so glad you enjoyed this one.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Noel, thank you :)

[Matching Socks]

Now this is fine seductive magic at work.
I just read Rene's review and I can't help laughing. :-)
Hmmm....

[Frieda P]

Oh now it's a party, Ance's here! Grazie mille :)

[kublakhan27]

Well Rene didn't mention me but it was a good assessment...thanks Ance :)

[Frieda P]

Oh put yer big boy pants on Benji, not everyone can be love with Dali! ;)

[Matching Socks]

So... You're photobombing all of Frieda's reviews I see. :-)

[Matching Socks]

Btw, nice COLLABORATION. :-)

[Frieda P]

Can't take him anywhere Ance. :)

[Matching Socks]

Aww, but he's cute. :-)
Do you think he'd look good on a leash?

[kublakhan27]

Haha They don't HAVE to be in love with me, all they need to do is notice that I'm actually there, but whatever, life goes on....how can I be photobombing them when I'm in the poem too? ;P I think I've been on a leash for a while now Ance, or should I say, my moods have been on a leash hahaha ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha now you're gonna get all technical on us Steve ;) Keep smiling, it's only your blood on the page. haha

[Matching Socks]

Oh damn, emotions on a leash.....
Who is going to write that one?

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'm smiling because I'm all whinged out love, and I'm too hot to vent anyway, and not in a sexy way ;P

[Rene Salinas]

This convo + a beer here is all I need so based on the comment am I been reduced to a chigugua or something more or less threatening? And as fair is fair let me congratulate you too Kubla I got carried away and unintentionally forgot to add you in great offering and one can only hope that you would forgive me

[kublakhan27]

Haha I don't know, that sounds more Freidian (like that word? LOL) than me though Ance ;)

[Matching Socks]

Ok, thanks clarifying that it's not in a sexy way. ;)
Cuz YOU KNOW I was thinking of you that way until this moment...

[Frieda P]

Freidian? haha...pass the beer Rene...............

[Matching Socks]

Awwwwwww, Rene, you are all around sweetness.

[Rene Salinas]

Arff arff!! grrrr

[kublakhan27]

Haha No hard feelings Rene...when you're working with Frieda, you're working with the best ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Of course not Ance, and you know I wasn't testing the waters for what kind of response that would get...

I'm gonna remember that term Mrs.R...don't be surprised if you start seeing it more often ;)