Life without an escapism clause ~

Poetess interruptus 

bitter clarity bit the dust

rust'd flow like the Nile's sin 

inky retreat into oblivion

indulged the mourner's chant

grasped last breath's chicanery 

in a moment of silent prayer

put to rest a stillborn notion

borne of braille's misconceptions

machination's devices stagnate the plot

song and a dance, one last ruse 

in design'd conspiracy theories' ploy

scheming to underwrite cheeky monkey's business

collateral damage gone to hell in a corroborative role

subterfuge's closing arguments authenticated

sentenced to life without parole's escapism clause

dodging the bullet of reception's passive resistance 

 10x12 cell of self imposed restraint's own sake 

captur'd in elusions of tainted open air windows 

exhale into a brown paper bag of realism's twixter

breathe to die in last act's curtain call ovation

took one final bow on meaningful repartee's knees   

Author's Note

captcha~unhinged

Reviews

[Shirlena]

I like your knew avatar...it looks like a painting of you, lovely. It seems we have to find a way to create escapism for ourselves so we won't fall into despair and find escape through drugs, alcohol are worse. Poetry is one of the most healing forms of a brief hiatus from life...we can always return then. Bittersweet and poignant.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Shirlena, my son is a graphic artist, he likes to cartoon me as he puts it, he says I look better. Nice kid. ;) Yes I concur, without poetry, only therapy is left, and that costs too much and doesn't work as well....

[Tom]

Like a classic olde world Shakespearian tale of wow and forlorn prophecy, what will become of us all if the ink wells run dry ?

Superbly crafted Frieda, the foreboding atmosphere throughout is splendidly surreal, though you are the very last poetic writer on earth such a tragedy would befall !

[Tai Ryens]

This seems a rather suffocating piece just leaking with the despair your speaker feels as they struggle with their innermost thoughts, struggling, sometimes feeling that they were painted across the skies yet confined to a single room as the cloudy air your speaker has no choice but to breathe. Yet they find escape through the tainted windows; captured, in either isolation or escape, never believing that the two could possibly fuse into a form of solitude or calming atmosphere.

Poignant piece, and you've captured both the suffocating despair and the non-renewable, temporary blissful phases that your speaker goes through in an attempt to stifle out the despair. Well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

"Poetess interruptus.." certainly you are not talking about yourself here... when such amazing words and concepts flow from your pen. Ovation, yes, but definitely not the final curtain call, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Awh you put a smile on my poetic heart Rita, thanks muchly, I think we all have that fear that our ink will dry up. :)

[Nusquam Esse]

I really enjoyed the subtle word-play throughout this, such as stillborn notion borne
on the fifth line, you are missing an apostrophe on mourner's. On the eleventh line, the repetition in "last final" seems problematic, unless you add some punctuation to divide them.
I found the idea of a 'Corroborative role' in conjunction to 'collateral damage gone to hell' to be very fascinating; as if an active catalyst for disaster.
And your final line is particularly fascinating. I found it odd, and stimulating, how the whole nature of the poem shifted halfway through.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Esse, that's funny...I'm famous for apostrophizing too much, will fix that, grazie, glad you enjoyed.

[Nusquam Esse]

I obsess too much with punctuation! But knock that off to 'attempting' literary fiction. Alas, poetry is difficult to punctuate, since it isn't handled at all like normal prose.

[Frieda P]

I'm not so big with punctuation in poetry, it drives me nutters when people use periods ~ to each his own, as long as you enjoyed it, I'm jazz'd! :)

[Nusquam Esse]

Then prepare to be jazzed... ;) Punctuation is more about how it effects flow; there are times where a comma or a period can completely change the way a sentence feels in poetry. But ending every line with a period is absurd!

[Frieda P]

I concur, my problem is a write it as I hear it in my head, it's like music to me....

[Jack Cassidy]

You know this is great writing don't you... "10x12 cell of self imposed restraint's own sake," I really connected with that line... I've felt that way so many times, sort of embarrassing but at least honest. Loving your latest works.

[Frieda P]

Glad you 'felt' this one, thanks Kusa...

[Jack Cassidy]

Yep yep...

[AprilRN1210]

If it wasn't a colorful and "interrupted" mind, it would hardly write such amazing works.. Your pen is not rusted and your ink flows like a dream --forever teasing the hearts and minds of your adoring fans, my friend.. I don't think I have ever witness a "stillborn notion" of yours.. Everything you write has such depth, emotion, truth, and meaning to it... If this is oblivion ma'am count me in... I also know this curtain hasn't made its last call, there will be plenty of more song and dance from this beautiful heart.... As always, I love your work:)

[Frieda P]

You know April, some days it just feels that way, thanks so much for your sweet words! :) x

[Einstein Noodle]

in the words of Neytiri "I see you." .. i love it when your poems allow a peek at you without so much conflict .. my mind says "Ahhhhhhhhhhhhh!" .. and my body takes a cleansing breath ... i can't imagine your last poem girl! we are all pretenders to a point ... our imaginations do run with the bull sometimes :) .. err i mean bulls!
enjoyed this a lot and today is Freiday! yahooooooooooooooooooooooo!
E.

[Frieda P]

Whatchu talkin bout willis, conflict? You must have me mistaken for someone else. :) Enjoy your weekend sweet stuff. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

of course! :} great weekend to you too!
E.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Frieda, this is an amazing write. :-)

Kaze~

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Kazie. :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Ur very welcome Frieda. :-)

[Lyn Anderson]

Escapism clause. Isn't that what writing is? Anyway, I especially loved the cheeky monkey line.

[Frieda P]

Ha had to add that one...thanks and yes of course, that's what I meant....