Creeping Determinism ~ Einstein Noodle & Frieda COLLABORATION

this tragedy was so avoidable

all the dots were there

connected to a creeping feeling

clear like mosquitoes stuck in amber;

determinism held like muddied arrogance

trying desperately to dance

Reflecting back, 

like camera shutter winks

rippling within the eye's wisdom

twinkling blinks of  past reality's snapshots

everything looks better

swayed waves of sight

like heat rising over ocean sand

so simple to see when turning pages 

looking back

frozen memories 

thawing in currents demands

  digging in the ash to remember

how the road led to indecision's rhyme

   when windows of reason shut the mind

       moments in life seem to trickle down

as the clock ticks ticks quarter to hindsight

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is incredible feast of imagery...I was hooked at the connected dots, a fitting image in light of the poem's style...the major theme I take from this is media manipulation, and a search for the truth in visual propaganda...am I over-analyzing it with that interpretation? The clip suggests a less-serious piece than what I'm reading ;P But again, I can't stress enough how much I loved the imagery here...the windows of reason shutting the mind really got the wheels turning, possibly because I like window imagery, and a lot of my ideas come while looking out my window...congrats to both of you on a sterling work :)

[Frieda P]

Something along those lines, E read a book...we were trying to fill in a few chapters ;) I find windows enticing fodder for poetry too Dali, ain't that a coinkydink? Thanks for your glowing review sweet Benji, muchly appreciated! :) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha Okay good...I'm notorious for misinterpreting poems, except for yours ;) The list of coinkydinks is pretty long Mrs.R haha You're most welcome my sweet friend :) x

[Frieda P]

I love where you took it...it's mostly about hindsight, but that would fit too....in your brilliant Dali mind, it probably makes more sense ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Speechless now Mrs.R...I saw the hindsight element as well, among other things...I read it a few times so I collected a few ideas ;) xo

[Frieda P]

That's the best part about poetry, n'est-ce pas?

[kublakhan27]

No question ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

Kubla .. i love your take on this .. i wonder if this may help:
" creeping determinism, is the inclination, after an event has occurred, to see the event as having been predictable, despite there having been little or no objective basis for predicting it, prior to its occurrence.[1][2] It is a multifaceted phenomenon that can affect different stages of designs, processes, contexts, and situations." from the Wikipedia .. :) i was beginnign to think this was a flopper .. you give me hope Kubla .. so glad you read and left tracks :)
E.

[kublakhan27]

It does help indeed E, I learned something that I did not know before...many thanks :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

A wonderful piece, Frieda. Keep writing more. :)

[Bright Ocean Star]

This one is deep you two. In life, there are usually traces of things that give glimmers of insight into acts that have occurred, and decisions that have been made....if you know how to read the tea leaves.
But to have any kind of foreknowledge that something is likely to happen based on a trail of clues...that's stuff out of Sherlock Holmes. Too much for most methodical or distracted minds of most mortal humans to pick up. Brilliant writing, my friends.

[Don't just B, but B ama..]

Awesome piece love the analogies. Yes hind-sight is ALWAYS 20/20 vision. Thank you for sharing. Great work.

[ANTO]

Noodle & Frieda - this was truly symbiotic. I really couldn't tell where one of you began and the other started ,so to speak. I can usually tell from the differences in language/style/content who wrote what, (I know thats not the aim) but not here.
"as the clock ticks ticks quarter to hindsight" - With hindsight we are all capable of reading signs and spotting clues, there would be no need for self-recrimination if we were so endowed.

Of all the forms of wisdom, hindsight is by general consent the least merciful, the most unforgiving.
JOHN FLETCHER, intro, Jean-Claude Favez's Holocaust

[Zahra]

frozen memories
thawing in currents demands
digging in the ash to remember
how the road led to indecision's rhyme

wonderful

[John Anderson]

Beautifully expressed and very nicely written. Nice work!

[Annabelle Lee]

You guys should keep this up. You work well together

[Sophy Freebirds]

I like the theme of it... the stumbling determination as we gradually stoop towards the inevitable,knowing in the back of our minds that its too late to do anything.. the image of determinism in muddied arrogance spoke to me as we fight a losing battle,but still we fight,thats what i loved the most. ★smiles★. An excellent piece resulting from this amazing collab.

~Sophy

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is so great you two.Your images are so vivid.In hindsight we should have seen all the signs that something was doomed from the start but sometimes we close our eyes and wish for the best :)

[Troy Henson]

You two lovelies are incredible:) Very well done. Great imagery

Regards
Troy