Is this new? I love it! For me it conjures visions of cyclic emotions and images--dark/light, hello/goodbye,
, and, of course, rosebuds and thorns. I think I related in some of the review comments for my little poem, "Staccato," that I've a very close friend who suffers from ultra-rapid cycling bipolar disorder--an extreme high and low each and every week. His life is bittersweet, but beautiful in it's own way. This poem reminds me of his battles--always saying hello and goodbye to the precious dawn and dusk times where he is mostly free for a brief time. Well, that may not have anything to do with your intentions for this little gem, but it has moved me nonetheless. Great work!
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Glad you picked up the yinyang of this one J.K..... opposite forces can actually be complementary an.. read moreGlad you picked up the yinyang of this one J.K..... opposite forces can actually be complementary and we deal with them every day...bittersweet as they may be, life is forever filled with beginnings and endings it seems...I think LC was singing of religion but this was my interpretation, jazz'd you enjoyed!
The opening was perfect, classic, I seriously can't pick out just one line, they are so beautiful flowing and they glow! I think this is my new favorite by you. Absolute perfection.
Life is a coin, heads or tails, each day we flip the coin never knowing how it will land. This was more sad than not to me. There is a lot of sadness in your poetry it seems but it is very enjoyable.
I really liked the imagery Freida.. rose is muse for a writer but the entirely different way you have portrayed it is heart rendering,the rose and thorns,the night and the sun.. Everything is transient and cyclic. The only thing consistent is change itself
"wings shorn in early light's kingdom" .. gave a touh of divine glory.. :) Nice write.. AGAIN
Another Inspiration...
So lovely Frieda, turbulent, passionate, gentle, divine.
xx
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Thanks so much Ance...I almost missed this one, was sidetracked by that flirt J.K............ .. read moreThanks so much Ance...I almost missed this one, was sidetracked by that flirt J.K............
xo
"you say goodbye, and i say hello...hello goodbye hello goodbye"
one is born another dies....and life goes on with and without.
it's the reason and rhyme of the scheme of things...and some of us while we do live, we live for poetry...
it is both our rose and our thorn.
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I don't know why you say goodbye, I say hello
The cycle of life...life is poetry, poetr.. read moreI don't know why you say goodbye, I say hello
The cycle of life...life is poetry, poetry is life indeed, thanks jacob.
silent tears unwritten of battle's freedom
wings shorn in early light's kingdom...
Stretches mind and basks in your wisdom.
amazing piece,
'everyone lives and everyone dies'
reason and rhyme will endlessly survive
in each 'hello and goodbye'....
just these last three lines are so poetic, that I could say them over and over again and the amazement of the words they contain would never fade out.
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Oooh always a pleasure to see you on my page sweet Kee, thanks for your kind words, you humble me..... read moreOooh always a pleasure to see you on my page sweet Kee, thanks for your kind words, you humble me...x
FP --- the restrictiveness in the rhyme goes here --- does not hinder...as with rhyme that tends to happen...yet I was not in this read...the usage of words and placement puts a reader in touch with this verse...the music accompaniment adds a bit...too...its always a good thing to read twice and get the sense of what the writer is pursuing...
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I'm not sure what that means, 'you were not in this read'...
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Yet I was not in this read...sounds like I did not like it the way that goes...but I did...I read my.. read moreYet I was not in this read...sounds like I did not like it the way that goes...but I did...I read my comment over and makes sense...see if you see what I see again...
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I'm reading it the same, are you trying to make me crazy Glen?.........
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God is crazy...I'm going to Hell now...What's crazier? He'll probably forgive me...quoted by me...ju.. read moreGod is crazy...I'm going to Hell now...What's crazier? He'll probably forgive me...quoted by me...just keeping you on your toes...
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OMG....you're crazier than him!!
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That's what the Devil told me --- too...both are in favor to leave me be...out of sight out --- out.. read moreThat's what the Devil told me --- too...both are in favor to leave me be...out of sight out --- out of mind...
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Where does that leave you, poetic purgatory....
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I'm in cell 007 --- solitary confinement...they let me out once in a while...yet my imagination is a.. read moreI'm in cell 007 --- solitary confinement...they let me out once in a while...yet my imagination is a key that unlocks the door --- I can escape any time I want....
You have to stop smokin' that funny stuff hon..........
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Later...getting late there...just getting started here --- need to edit and edit --- just what the d.. read moreLater...getting late there...just getting started here --- need to edit and edit --- just what the doctor ordered...happy writing...FP...
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Late here, nearly 3 AM...enjoy your edit, I'm going to sleep...later, ciao ciao.
Is this new? I love it! For me it conjures visions of cyclic emotions and images--dark/light, hello/goodbye,
, and, of course, rosebuds and thorns. I think I related in some of the review comments for my little poem, "Staccato," that I've a very close friend who suffers from ultra-rapid cycling bipolar disorder--an extreme high and low each and every week. His life is bittersweet, but beautiful in it's own way. This poem reminds me of his battles--always saying hello and goodbye to the precious dawn and dusk times where he is mostly free for a brief time. Well, that may not have anything to do with your intentions for this little gem, but it has moved me nonetheless. Great work!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Glad you picked up the yinyang of this one J.K..... opposite forces can actually be complementary an.. read moreGlad you picked up the yinyang of this one J.K..... opposite forces can actually be complementary and we deal with them every day...bittersweet as they may be, life is forever filled with beginnings and endings it seems...I think LC was singing of religion but this was my interpretation, jazz'd you enjoyed!
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..