~ blade straight with eyes of dew

I stood in your arrogant shadow,

   vainglorious in its boastful touch

       depleted in your toxic grace,

  til the sun finally rose in my eyes

   felt free of the assigned tangled webs

       that fiercely strangled tidy illusions

    skies seemed a brighter tangerine

     mockingbirds sang in tune yet again

wasn't a figment of my delusions

    a bramble of bubbles suddenly burst,

wild blackberries were in bloom

    steely blue no longer reminded me of you

through the dusky sharp edge of night

     blade straight with eyes of dew

 I cut the chords that bound my bloody heart  

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Sounds like the edge hasn't dulled a bit from last night Mrs.R...it's funny cuz I told you recently that I know where you're coming from in every poem...for the first time, ever, I feel like I don't know the whole story behind something...now maybe this is purely a product of your imagination, I have a history of assuming that everything people write here is autobiographical, but you're such a confessional writer that I can't help but wonder...anyways on to the poem itself...like I said, it feels like there's still a lot of purging in your system that's needing to get out...I mean, it isn't just one bubble but a bramble of them...I liked that image...and the toxic grace, the mockingbird, the bloody heart...this is heady stuff my friend, very raw, very poetic, and very you...and when I say very you, I mean it's the product of someone whose talent is unparalleled :) x

[Frieda P]

You always blow me away with your responses Benji, and also your observations, this is actually a few issues conjoined, this is just how it turned out....convoluted I know, what were you expecting with bloody brambles ;) What can I say, thank you never seems enough....xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha It's more than enough Mrs.R...I'm just happy that you enjoy my observations :) xo

[Rachel Mason]

The line " I cut the chords that bound my bloody heart" is pure perfection. Not that I didn't relate to/deeply enjoy the whole poem, I just especially love poetry that goes out with a metaphorical "bang".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

cut the chords, a little blood is okay...when we are with an arrogant soul...the ego takes over, that person thinks of him or herself, and the loss on our end is not so great...more like a gain to gain the freedom...
nicely worded...
jacob

[AprilRN1210]

That's right.. get rid of that toxicity... good riddance!!! let it go girl.. Remove that black cloud out of your skies and let the sun shine.. cut those ties that bind and fly where you belong, in the heavens with the angels.. you are amazing person and it blazes through in your writing... burst those bubbles!! The music is so eerily perfect.. it accentuates the strong will, the determination, and the resilience of this piece.. awesome write as usual.. (love the b's, btw).... ((hugs))

[Patricia]

What a beautiful piece of poetry..sad with a colorful touch of anger but that could be me projecting LOL and the ending was outstanding!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

I hate break ups but sometimes they are nessacary, if one is not happy with the other in the relationship. Or if the relationship is not working, but everything happens for a reason. I know that it's hard, but maybe you are destined to be with someone else that can make you even happier. I hope everything' works out for you Frieda.

Kaze~ :-)

[Frieda P]

It's an old story, history, just still fresh in the mind sometimes....all good hon. :) Grazie Kazie!

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

It was my pleasure. :-)

[MsJewel]

Your title is as creative as your writing. I love the entire poem, but the last line gave me goosebumps.
Brilliant as ever lovely lady. You do breakups with style!

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Woo, thanks Julie, you just made my heart smile! :)

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

I really like this one, Frieda! I love the way it flowed into the ending. The imagery you put here really illuminated the saddened feelings of this poem! Great job as always :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Michael, appreciate your kind words. :)

[Claire in VA]

Yowsa.,..such graphic imagery!
I particularly like the last line.
Great job!
Claire

[Frieda P]

Yowsa backatcha, don't you look sweet in your new avatar!!

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮Break-ups are so hard and it is often just as hard to accept the person isn't what you'd hoped. I dated a guy 4 times over 2 years and it wasn't until that last time that I realized he was never going to change. This poem reminded me of that. Great work!╰☆╮

[Frieda P]

I guess we've all been there, too bad I'm a slow learner. :) Thanks Brittany...!