~ Bloom off the fanatical fire...‏

Beatifically blistered in your melancholic rose

darkly colored hue of thorn's ambush

verdigris trellis's trailing a sad window pane

bloom off the proverbial conformist flower

fanatical fiery force flipped a final formality,

sprinkled holy water upon the vine    

died a tragic death of subliminal exposure   

Author's Note

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

chills.... I am warning off these huge goosebumps all over my arms right now.. where to start... ok first off I love this song and haven't ever quite heard it like this.. I think that is what started the chills, but omg... those words... ma'am... you scare me with the ease and depth at which you affect me sometimes.. it is like your pen is a magic wand and japs me where and how you choose... quite unnerving... but also addictive as I keep coming back for more.. and more... You have such talent and not only for words, and flow, and imagery, but you are able to set this TONE, this ambiance, this MOOD, that whether or not we want to go there, by gosh WE ARE THERE... After you set your magical tone, then we are sucked in with such bewitching language, captivated, dying to see where you take us next, eagerly anticipating the ending.. and once we get there, we are in such states of awe... on a side note, you know I am a sucker for alliteration... can I just say O...M.....G.... I loved it!!! ok, I am rambling.. sorry.. see what you have done to me ma'am?... are you happy?... Ance turned me into a sappy, mushy mess, and then you just made me a goosebump covered, throbbing puddle of conflicted emotions with this one... I hope you two are happy with yourselves... I am going back to my corner, drink a pot of coffee, and TRY to compose myself... in all seriousness, this poem is dark and deliciously disturbing..

[Frieda P]

Whoa woman, you knocked my socks off with this review, and took my breath away...I'm framing it for posterity! Your words blew me away, I had to read them twice...holy April, you humble me, truly...thanks so much...! I'm deliriously happy right now, I can't speak for Ance. :)

[AprilRN1210]

well, I meant every word ma'am... I love the emotional journeys that you bless me with. True, like me, you never know what you are going to get when it comes to your writing, but I love that.. and you don't need socks to dance on the ceiling girl!

[Frieda P]

Ha, silly moi...seriously, I'm still elated from your words....woooooooooo!

[AprilRN1210]

I am glad... You deserve that and more ma'am... :)

[Sami Khalil]

"a sad window pane

bloom off the proverbial conformist flower"

This poem is blooming with melancholia, with the tragic death of formality and silent cries of the soul against those fanatical fires. The piano music added some sad trailing to it...Excellent...:)............................

[Frieda P]

Grazie Sami, jazz'd you enjoyed both, love this music. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)......................

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well twist my tongue and spin my mind out of control… a clever little poem Moonbeam.

Sometimes we can suffocate someone's heart by loving them too much.

[Frieda P]

Ha that made me laugh Dale...hope it didn't hurt muchly, thanks dear.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well my brain always hurts from too much thinking so I am use to it.

[Frieda P]

Ha I think Einstein said that too...

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yet another thing I have in common with him, LOL

[Frieda P]

Did you discover a theory of relativity too? :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Not exactly, more like the theory of relatives.

[Frieda P]

Oi.................haha

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Yep, my theory is most of them wiki either drive you to drink, land you in the nut house or cause you to go to jail :)

[Frieda P]

I think we're related....