Consumption's dispersion...

Swallowed my flesh whole 

         sans a lace place-mat

     sucked the marrow from my bones

     feasted on heart's blood entanglements

       picked through soul's disembodiment

 dispersion in dessert's consumption

drank it down with a side of hemlock's poison

     a tidbit neatly tucked in the creases

              of gray matter's smatterings

invoking smoking gun's ammunition 

   gloating over shoot out's hair trigger

      one last morsel to savor and devour

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

This is one of my favourite songs of all time first off -- now, as to the poem, it sucks to be someone's dinner, says the cat, always better to be the one on the other end. Not a hundred percent sure, but you might need an apostrophe on triggers' (trigger's?) as it seems possessive in this context.

[Frieda P]

You mean it's not Closer? I think you're right, that's the one line I reworked...thanks for the head's up my sweet editor ;)

[Lyn Anderson]

Only and Head Like a Hole as well as Pig all rank ahead of Closer. Now Closer, it's good for some very fun memories, Nuff said.

[Frieda P]

Ha....my imagination is on full tilt now....

[Baby Ricochet]

Now that's what I call a bad day

[Frieda P]

Thanks Baby, I would say so...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

russian roulette at love's table---and no place mats?

creates a messy heart.

[Frieda P]

The nerve eh? Thanks jacob....

[AprilRN1210]

oh wow, girl! This is dark, sensual, twisted... Intense, it drew me in, anxiously anticipating where you were going next. It definitely is different... the music adds to the seduction.. After this, I wouldn't mind being someone's dinner:)

[Frieda P]

You're the original twisted sister dahlin'...buon appetito ;)

[AprilRN1210]

hey, hey.... original? nah... I just like a little dark with my light... sometimes the FUN is in the TWIST...lol

[Frieda P]

Ain't that the fookin' truth? haha

[AprilRN1210]

yes ma'am :)

[sharonlee]

Vivid... sounds like a Tobe Hooper or Wes Craven horror flick!

[Frieda P]

That's quite the compliment, thanks so much sharonlee!

[sharonlee]

My pleasure... chilling imagery!

[A. Amos]

Simply one of your best work...bravo.

[Frieda P]

Wow, thanks so much A, you've left me speechless....

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Sophy Freebirds]

You play with words wonderfully Freida... you have got such a strong vocab.. you always aptly express the emotions...About the poem i guess i would like to devour if something so sensual as your poetry is served iin the platter ★winks★

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Haha just be sure to use a place mat ;) Thanks muchly Sophy.

[J. K. Beach]

Beautifully Intense, Frieda! Such lovely language for a macabre sensual feast. You've outdone yourself!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your kind words J.K., you humble me.

[kublakhan27]

To echo Ance's sentiment, if you come to Canada for a drink, stop by on the way ;) Intensity is the cornerstone of your writing Mrs.R...all intense, all the time...the marrow from my bones and heart's blood entanglement, picked through soul's disembodiment...I'm never too full to savor and devour every last morsel of your words :) xo

[Frieda P]

Woo that made my morning, smiling here Benji, thanks muchly my sweet friend. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Mrs.R :) xo

[Glen Yumang Manese]

As with the "Ing's" and "Ion's" in there...
the verse offers the reader...
I believe I said that to another writer about the "Ing's"...
I did like the "Ment's"...and the ending of this write with the "Or's & Our's"...
Other reviewers are going to think ----
I'm high on something with this statement...

[Frieda P]

Ha what??? I do think you're high on something....

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I meant the word endings...silly --- as a reviewer...things start to get monotony...

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

- Wow, Frieda.
- Love this poem.
- It just flows so good together.
- nicely penned my friend.

Kaze~ x

[Frieda P]

Thanks sweetie, you always say the nicest things. :) x

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome, Frieda. :-) hehehe. x

[Frieda P]

I keep waiting for you to write a new poem. :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

I will soon, just waiting to get a new idea in mind. :-) ;-)