Consumption's dispersion...

Consumption's dispersion...

A Poem by Frieda P
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~ swallow ~

"
Swallowed my flesh whole 
         sans a lace place-mat
     sucked the marrow from my bones
     feasted on heart's blood entanglements
       picked through soul's disembodiment
 dispersion in dessert's consumption
drank it down with a side of hemlock's poison
     a tidbit neatly tucked in the creases
              of gray matter's smatterings
invoking smoking gun's ammunition 
   gloating over shoot out's hair trigger
      one last morsel to savor and devour

© 2014 Frieda P


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Frieda P

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This is one of my favourite songs of all time first off -- now, as to the poem, it sucks to be someone's dinner, says the cat, always better to be the one on the other end. Not a hundred percent sure, but you might need an apostrophe on triggers' (trigger's?) as it seems possessive in this context.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You mean it's not Closer? I think you're right, that's the one line I reworked...thanks for the hea.. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

Only and Head Like a Hole as well as Pig all rank ahead of Closer. Now Closer, it's good for some ve.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha....my imagination is on full tilt now....



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"Consumption's dispersion..." must be a victory in there somewhere .. but truth be told consumpton will get us every time .. transfat, sugar, empty calories and all too much ... its a wonder any of us are still kicking. .. no mercy in being cannibalized .. nothing goes to waste .. you must have had to many pickles or chile to form this one Freida .. of course i love it .. its a peek into a newly explored room of you ..
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is a raw and emotional piece Frieda. Thought provoking too I must say.

Regards
Troy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Troy.
Consumption's dispersion, the act of being consciously devoured and satiated by the knowledge that the one devouring you is being affected by indulging in you, actively suffering as you are as well. To the end, staying comforted by the fact that you're undoubtedly to bring down the one feeding off of you, even if it takes the most exhausting effort and giving up parts of yourself that you would never give back. Depending on the one being fed on, the act of revenge seems like quite a sweetly perfected one, devious in the way it brings your enemy down with you by sacrificing yourself, brings your enemy down in a way they never expected; yet, I cannot help but perceive the notion, just vaguely, as an act of love: a bittersweet punishment by bringing down your lover in a way that exonerates them. An act that allows them to pay for the damage they've caused while also keeping them around, content in knowing they had loved trekking down the path to their own demise.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Love seeing my poetry through your eyes Tai, thanks muchly.
Well I'll eat my hat! Maybe an endoscopy required?

As always my Lady you use words so sharp and so hot as to create such intense feeling.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Not exactly what I had in mind, but I'd love to see you eat you hat....
John Alexander McFadyen

10 Years Ago

Cruel, so cruel!
Yes indeed Frieda.... You were consumed whole but what a way to go!

A brilliant passionate all consuming write, I love the raw emotion which comes through in this inspirational piece!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Haha so I've told, thanks Tom, muchly appreciated!
Such gruesome, vivid images to portray a mangled heart - yet the worst affront is the lack of a lace place mat... Your mind is an interesting trip, Frieda!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

LOL you crack me up Rita!! ;) Hey what's right is right....
Frieda. You made the words come alive. Powerful places and thoughts you took me to. The strong language and statements made this a poem a good ride into your thoughts. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote, means a lot coming from you....wish I could tell a story in my poetry as you .. read more
Coyote Poetry

10 Years Ago

You are welcome. Always a pleasure to read your words.
This is a whole new ride for me !
The way you worded it, death sounds like fun lol
I love it !!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha ha....you're twisted too I see!! Thanks muchly....
What no liqueur with a meal ,just hand me a growler and be gone.


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Now you sound like my mother but she didn't like it muchly... haha
lee von cleef

10 Years Ago

ha ha ha , laughing tears, I wonder if they are the same as crying ones . And Your mom is great ! Kn.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Not really, but that's a whole other poem....
I've been meaning to get online for a while and read your stuff and yeah, I was missing out.

I love the imagery in this piece, it feels like a dark ritual, set in a cave lit by a burning fire. But it could be something else, it's so ambiguous I might just be firing blindly at this piece.

I love the way it flows and the way it makes me feel.
But I'm wondering, is this about something emotional? A horror scene? An act of violence?

"Swallowed my flesh whole" is this a metaphor for a personal attack or heartbreak? Does the writer feel used?

I actually feel a bit stupid, like I'll never get it but it makes such a good read x

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Never feel stupid, I always leave it up the reader once it's out there to create their own assumptio.. read more

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