~ endless breath of silence

A moment in bittersweet crystal clarity

    memories of glory days gone by

         familiarity of scent and touch

indulgences of passionate nectar'd skies,

   wildflower meadows and body quiver sighs

      translucent reminisces of love's twists & tangles

    sacred promises torn awry in duplicity's grasp

under a darkly full moon's daunting disclosure

      rendered in sounds of hopeless tear soaked passages

  forgotten love notes written of inky illusions

              neatly wrapped in tissue paper delusions

stormy weather's threats upon spirit's token of mourning

   a final endless breath of silence as it's put to rest ~

     death's conclusion does not become the tender heart  

Author's Note

captcha~unfreed

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Death does not become the tender heart; a profound and heartfelt ending to the nostalgia that had built up previous to that line's deliverance that seems to reassure everyone that we do not become death when we die . . . Our actions, memories, experiences will always be shared amongst those who had shared them with us, and we become our moments instead of just death.

Lovely ending, it was truly thought-provoking.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tai, thrilled you read this one and enjoyed.

[SmittyJas]

Wonderfully written caught my eye memories of glory days gone by makes me cry to journey to a life's end Glory be So well written I have angelic eyes for this poem.

[Frieda P]

What a touching thing to say, thanks again...

[Rita L. Sev]

A touching and refined piece, each image guiding the reader into the inevitable... Especially love these lines:

forgotten love notes written of inky illusions
neatly wrapped in tissue paper delusions

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Rita....

[Patricia]

A very beautiful and moving piece. Love it!!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Pat!

[Patricia]

No, I thank you! Your work just jazzes me up to be a better writer!

[Frieda P]

I think that's what we do on this site, the best part about sharing our poetic words, thanks again, you're too good to me! :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

WOW!...I am not for sure but this may be your best, thus far...

This blew me away!! (definitely into my favorites)...
So full of emotion, it takes me on a journey of passion, love, and loss...a heartbreaking end...

"familiarity of scent and touch

indulgences of passionate nectar'd skies,

wildflower meadows and body quiver sighs"~What a delicious indulgence, Friedalicious!

Captivating write!~xoxo~:)

[Frieda P]

You took my breath away with this one Robbie, thanks for your kind words my sweet friend, you've truly humbled me...!! xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Honestly, you moved me with this piece...~xoxoxo~:)

[Michael (Letters and Li..]

All the emotion that runs through here is breathtaking. The flow and elegance of this is exceptional. You're a great writer! :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kind words Michael, you truly humble me. :)

[Tate Morgan]

Cant believe I missed that one .My self i want to go out under a falling star

[Frieda P]

Chances are slim of that happening Tate, I wanna go whilst having...oh forget it.

[Tate Morgan]

hahaha trouble is by then we will be too damn old to enjoy it

[Frieda P]

Hey if you're still doing it, there has to be a reason....

[Ayushi]

" forgotten love notes written of inky illusions

neatly wrapped in tissue paper delusions"
Your write is very imagery as well as realistic.
Death is an ultimate truth that we all have to accept.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ayushi.

[Parimal Pratyush]

We have got to accept death, but it is our choice to let go of the memories or not. A very powerful write, ma'am. :D

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille :)

[Lyn Anderson]

A sad and tender piece, with beautiful word usage and imagery -- not sure which line I like best, but tissue paper delusions is certainly up there.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much KL>

[Cory Barrett]

Not all memories are sweet. Yet there are still worth their place in our minds.

[Frieda P]

True, thanks Streamline.