Malformed metaphors

Blinded by an obvious dark moonbeam

  taken hostage in indecipherable lies,

invoking anomaly's enigmatic composed cries

 deaf violins tinkering on black piano keys

   conducting an objectionable poetic sainted response 

            erratically screeching tears of words

knighted in bended knee's supplicated excuses 

   disparity in past monstrosity's delusions

hysteria broke out of its straitjacket & lost control,

obsession turned on a dime's rhyme

   escaped to a dimly authored hole

       conformity stoked the arcane fires

              ignited within lunatic desires

discontented infidels spoke in tongues

   sun worshiping in turbulence of recondite winds

     whispered hush of truth's  malformed metaphors

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dayran]

A collage ... that puts together a selected bunch of curiosities ... that first draws our attention as fun ... and then as a storm in a cup. Reads like notes on a piano ... played at random ... but the order and organization of thought that accompanies the poem ... speaks volumes as experience. A fascination that is equal to meeting someone we have not seen for a long time. Tentative but interesting ...

Thanks for the invite Tate.

[Frieda P]

'storm in a cup', I like that, thanks so much for your visit & review Dayran, I'll be sure to thank Tate too.

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮To say this is amazing would be an understatement.╰☆╮

[Frieda P]

Thanks Brittany, like your little star thingys....

[Brittany Zedalis]

Hahaha thank you xD And you're welcome

[A. Amos]

Love the subjects you choose to write and your expressions and execution are marvelous my friend...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Amos, means a lot, muchly appreciated.

[A. Amos]

My pleasure.....

[s y e]

// deaf violins tinkering on black piano keys
conducting an objectionable poetic sainted response
erratically screeching tears of words
knighted in bended knee's supplicated excuses //

Ooooft, dang Mama F, you come up with some powerful lines that make my little spaghetti brain beyond jealous. This was so bloody powerful! I loved the imagery and wording, you just blew the ball right out of the park! xoxo

[Frieda P]

Hardly spaghetti brains luv! Thanks so much for your enchanting review noodlebumble! :) xo

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Amazing! I'm not that good in determining crooked words from a beautiful statement spoken and/or written. I am just an admirer of great poets who are so good in metaphors like Sir Jacob and you, Ms. F.
Another fantastic piece from you!

[Frieda P]

That's quite the compliment being in the same status with jacob, thanks so much Dhaye!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Parimal Pratyush]

I think I am too young to understand this completely, because words struck me like war-fighters, each with a different weapon and meaning and purpose.

[Frieda P]

Lucky you, in due time! Thanks so much Parimal.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Darkly humorous and mysteriously enticing. i have lots of favourite lines here...
Hysteria broke out of its strait jacket and lost control- gave me dirty wild thoughts ;) ha.. ha.. loved the malformed line- disconted infidels spoke in tongues.. it made me giggle like a school girl.. overall Nice job again Freida.. ;)

~Sophy

[Frieda P]

Ha that seems to be everyone's...thanks so much Sophy :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

some metaphors need to be put in an asylum...where they all can just bounce off the walls and be whatever they hell they want to be...nobody will make fun of them there, because they are all malformed...like the hunchback simile of notre dame.

[Frieda P]

Some people too, thanks jacob....

[J. K. Beach]

I love these! I'm not so sure the metaphors are are actually malformed, but they do remind me of the examples in Karen Elizabeth Gordon's little book on grammar, "The Transitive Vampire." -- dark, mysterious, funny, and enlightening all at the same time. I'm sure If I read it again tomorrow that I will find an entirely different spark of interest, but that's half the fun of it, right. Nice work!

[Frieda P]

Never read that one, sounds interesting, thanks for your thoughts J.K.

[AprilRN1210]

I have to say I like this whispered hush of malformed metaphors.. My mind went to some dark, twisted, crazy places with this one... I have to say I hadn't ever heard this song either and it went really well with it. Makes me want to find a man with matching straight jackets and let hysteria turn us on to some lunatic desires:)

nice job ma'am I love this side of your imagination... different, dark, delicious!

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, you would April! ;) Thanks muchly, would you like a red straitjacket to go with your lunatic?

[AprilRN1210]

Lmao....hmmmmm.... Well, now that depends.... I am going to keep what I was going to say to myself this time... :)
(my turn to behave for once)