Malformed metaphors

Blinded by an obvious dark moonbeam

  taken hostage in indecipherable lies,

invoking anomaly's enigmatic composed cries

 deaf violins tinkering on black piano keys

   conducting an objectionable poetic sainted response 

            erratically screeching tears of words

knighted in bended knee's supplicated excuses 

   disparity in past monstrosity's delusions

hysteria broke out of its straitjacket & lost control,

obsession turned on a dime's rhyme

   escaped to a dimly authored hole

       conformity stoked the arcane fires

              ignited within lunatic desires

discontented infidels spoke in tongues

   sun worshiping in turbulence of recondite winds

     whispered hush of truth's  malformed metaphors

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dayran]

A collage ... that puts together a selected bunch of curiosities ... that first draws our attention as fun ... and then as a storm in a cup. Reads like notes on a piano ... played at random ... but the order and organization of thought that accompanies the poem ... speaks volumes as experience. A fascination that is equal to meeting someone we have not seen for a long time. Tentative but interesting ...

Thanks for the invite Tate.

[Frieda P]

'storm in a cup', I like that, thanks so much for your visit & review Dayran, I'll be sure to thank Tate too.

[-Scribe in Style-]

Now this is called writing! Very well composed with deep meaning to unravel! Twisties in the simplicities.
hysteria broke out of its straitjacket & lost control,
ignited within lunatic desires
Both these lines spoke volumes and actually evoke the danger and risk that we are all attracted to.
I loved reading it. Fantastic work.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Amazing, Frieda. I love reading every single one of your poems. They are fantastic.

Kaze~

[Mary C]

Lovely imagery in this write. Well done, very well done.

[Willow Radcliffe]

Beautiful vocabulary and imagery. Another great poem, well done

[Patricia]

Wonderful word play and metaphors. Very colorful imagery. Mostly I love the word play...it has multiple meanings and can be tailored to the reader. You never cease to amaze me with your vocab! Lovely. :)

[Frieda P]

It was more a poetic rant, one of those days :) Grazie....

[Lyn Anderson]

Your lovely quick and intelligent style shines through -- one thing, I wonder if hostage by would be better than in followed by indecipherable.

[Frieda P]

I thought of that, but the first line uses 'by'...my OCD wouldn't permit it. ;)

[Me]

This is a very deep and emotive write..Nice job

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly for your visit & review Michael...

[Lydia Shutter]

Who's to say what form a metaphor should have? Is there ever one that is malformed? I don't think so. There are days "hysteria broke out of its straitjacket & lost control" because it seems like the right thing to do at the time. I liked the scattered rhyme and the stream of poetic consciousness in this one. Jumpy around, but the rhythm is catchy! Lydi**

[Frieda P]

All depends on your perspective, I don't think two poets read the same poetry/metaphors in quite the same way...grazie Lydikey, that's me jumpy around! ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

Nothing malformed, just deliciously twisted at a curious angle. Images to wrap one's head around... great piece, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Curiouser and curiouser, grazie mille Rita!