This poem captures the music in words, which is no easy feat. I am glad you included the music along with your poem, it was great to see your thought process in an otherwise thoroughly sensual poem. The visualization was great; the almost giddy babble of eloquent words and phrases such as "rhythm of sun's betrayal". This line flows so well and ties in with the feeling of a flower waving and bending under the hot sun in a field.
I won't try to over-interpret it, because to figure out the poem's meaning to a T would be to destroy it, but even without meaning it is a beautiful read. Great poem, every word was almost tangible.
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Thank you so much for such an in-depth review, thrilled you enjoyed.
Why are all these other poets praising this poem, oh that is right because it is bloody brilliant Moonbeam… you make the pen magical when you hold it in your hand, how else can the ink spill out and spellbind the reader.
Ah, the burning Sun and fertile ground that feeds a flower must in the end wilt its bloom, and rot its fallen blossoms. Every flower has a dirty little ephemeral secret that’s camouflaged by her momentary beauty. Our Universe is winding down to a state of maximum entropy, but beautifully so in the form of blooming galaxies that slowly fall to ruin.
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10 Years Ago
I always appreciate your in-depth thoughts, thanks so much Aethereal.
"Wilted in arrested fantasies", we are all lost if fantasies are stopped, especially if "sans relief from brutal digging
mortification's dirty little secret"..
Frieda your words make me want to curl up and wilt, they make me want to hide under the covers.... they also make me love the strength of you even more, amazed at the depth of the courage to show such... such "lost wildflowers"... xxoo
~~redzone
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10 Years Ago
Your words bring a smile to my heart Curt....thanks muchly my dear friend. xo
Holy wow, you just blow me away each time, Mama F. The emotion in this is over powering and so sad. You've touched my heart with this one... I'm speechless.
Sighs and flip flops & all that jazz xoxo
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10 Years Ago
Sighs and flip flops, I like that....thanks so much sweet noodlebumble. xo
This poem conveys much sadness and betrayal...the sun that ought to have warmed, nurtured, not betrayed, caused much mayhem and destruction and a sea of pain still thrives under cover. This is so touching and beautifully written Frieda.
I think this is one of the best you've done recently, which is saying something cuz they're all masterpieces...but the rhythm of sun's betrayal, the fragrance fallen beneath the cracks...time is a cruel entity, and flowers are really the ultimate emblem of that reality...the song (and band for that matter) is a perfect vehicle for the message...a work of amazing beauty my dear friend...xo
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10 Years Ago
Woo Benji, you should see my face right now....thanks so much for such an amazing review my sweet fr.. read moreWoo Benji, you should see my face right now....thanks so much for such an amazing review my sweet friend. :) xo
10 Years Ago
Always a pleasure Mrs.R...I'm glad you're smiling :) xo
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..