~ lost wildflowers

neath a shady bloom

lost wildflowers

        neath closed windows,

                       dither'd  bloom's shudder

               wilting in arrested fantasies

rhythm  of sun's betrayal

          faded in interruption's tune

   essence'd fragrance

              fallen beneath the cracks,

        no escaping rhymes's paradoxical roots

           sway'd under a moon's dark melody

maestro's scathing notes conduct'd

        keys of C major's dusky tunes

                 F sharp's inauthentic glow

    sans relief from brutal digging

      mortification's dirty little secret

  buried deep within soil'd cover 

              wither'd on the vine 

Author's Note

captcha~nonrayed

Reviews

[Sonus de Animus]

This poem captures the music in words, which is no easy feat. I am glad you included the music along with your poem, it was great to see your thought process in an otherwise thoroughly sensual poem. The visualization was great; the almost giddy babble of eloquent words and phrases such as "rhythm of sun's betrayal". This line flows so well and ties in with the feeling of a flower waving and bending under the hot sun in a field.
I won't try to over-interpret it, because to figure out the poem's meaning to a T would be to destroy it, but even without meaning it is a beautiful read. Great poem, every word was almost tangible.

[Frieda P]

Thank you so much for such an in-depth review, thrilled you enjoyed.

[Shirlena]

The angst in the song matches the mood of this piece. It reminds of how we all get lost in something, life, sorrow, love. We all have to find our way but until then we're all over the place, wild even. Wonderful writing Mz. lady.

[Parimal Pratyush]

Such beautiful imagery. Such beautiful soft words. Such amazing thought about nature. This has to be one of the best that I have read :) I am amazed. This is wonderful. Great great great work :D

[prachi prangya agasti]

rhythmic one.... loved the lines.... a nice theme.... 'LOST WILDFLOWERS'...

[Ayushi]

Such a thoughtful and fine poetry..
You have used so many elements here.
Liked the lines
"rhythm of sun's betrayal
faded in interruption's tune"

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the interaction of two themes here, that fit together very well

[Wórdsmíth]

Beautiful imagery... I liked the way you twisted the poem with some "PARADOXICAL ROOTS" & then you tuned that all into the "MELODIES" with emotions. Great job! ;)

[Mark]

Frieda, I've seen you’re comments throughout my travels, always meaning to stop by, this morning I did, I started to read, then… to my surprise a hunting melody so familiar began to play. I stopped; I quickly refreshed, I waited for that first note, then started from the begging… I've done that 3 times now… and all I can think to say is thank-you… as of today I am a subscriber :)

That was Genius…

[Justsimplyjulia]

oh swooooooooon! so beautiful I loved it

[icelandicblue]

Frieda

This spoke to me. I have always thought of myself as growing in between the cracks of concrete. Yet I still try. Good to read you.

[Frieda P]

Anne!! So good to see your face again, was just about to sign off, the site is giving me adgeda...thanks so much, and yes, I know that feeling well. Hope all is good with you....

[icelandicblue]

All is well. I have missed you. My muse has fled but I love your work.

[Frieda P]

Copacetic is good...I'm sure he'll/she'll be back, your talent is limitless....did you read the poem Kee wrote for you??

[icelandicblue]

No what is it? I've been so removed.

[Frieda P]

It's gorgeous, go to his page...I can't recall the title.

[Frieda P]

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/KeeD/1377104/

Don't ask me why I couldn't remember that title! Jeez........

[icelandicblue]

Missed you. thanks

[Frieda P]

I missed you too, but we all need that time away, you know I get it....

[Bright Ocean Star]

rhythm in sun's betrayal/ faded in interruption's tune/wilting in arresting fantasies...Frieda, you have the mind of a genius. Where do you get these lines? They are fabulously deep with great imagination and imagery. Love it!

[Frieda P]

Catching my breath now, you blew me away with this one Star, thanks so much!