~Exhaled whisper'd whirlwinds

I drank in your desire, 

glimps'd in adoration's gaze

exhaled the whisper'd whirlwinds 

       of untamed memories past

    release in your heartfelt sanctuary,

        retreated on the horizons 

                  of transparent clouds

      nestl'd upon lofty sanctum's skies

 ecstasy 's moon collided onto lucent stars,

                 diaphanous sentiments of soft caresses

           feather'd embraces of Ero's empyrean bliss

    spirit soared on exquisite 

                  vaults of heaven's rapture

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack Wolfe]

Ecstasy('s) moon collided onto lucent stars, (did you mean lucent, it fits the stars perspective but better as luminescent) and then 'onto' seems a bit jarred, perhaps into.

I found this to be quite enthralling, though short, and the rhythm and omissions seemed right it was just the one line, I am in no way a poetic expert, so this just my opinion . . .

[Frieda P]

Lucent is shining and translucent, I preferred it, Tomato Tomahto ;) Thanks for your thoughtful review Jack...

[Simran Kewlani]

This is amazing. It's beautiful, very beautiful. The way you have framed your words is amazing. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Simran, you put a huge smile on my heart. :) x

[Simran Kewlani]

I'm glad I do. I'd like to keep others happy if I cannot be happy.

[Frieda P]

Awh, that's sad hon....

[Simran Kewlani]

Happy happy! Those moments come, right? so let's just smile at them all and they will get scared and run away. :P

[Frieda P]

Indeed they do, you need to put on your warrior butterfly wings. :)

[AprilRN1210]

Bewitched body and soul with sensual whispers of heaven. Such graceful elegance weaving a sanctuary of blissful release. This is magical in the most delicious way. I adore this ma'am.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ms Sensuality, means a lot, so jazz'd you enjoyed my sanctuary...where's my stiletto eating poem? :)

[AprilRN1210]

have you read my full one to go with the story tease? its pretty steamy.. I need some inspiration..
:(

[AprilRN1210]

and of course it WAS my pleasure...

[Frieda P]

Hmm, I think so, have read mostly all of your stuff....I'll check. And don't look at me, ha... listen to Beethoven, or whatever blows your skirt up. ;)

[AprilRN1210]

Lmao.... whatever.. That last one took a lot out of me... gonna take a little bit to get me THAT worked up again.. wheeeew!

I will see what I can do ma'am... jeez--slave driver-I tell you what!

[Frieda P]

Ha you brought it up luv!! .....................gotta deliver what you promise!

[AprilRN1210]

It's in there don't you worry-just gotta channel that SEX GODDESS... lol

I always keep my promises:)

[Frieda P]

I have hot sauce all prepared just in case ;)

[AprilRN1210]

I will keep that in mind... I highly doubt I will need it though.. ok cue music--time to go to work... hey wait--who turned on WILD THING... lol