Bought out, not sold in transgressions wake Too poor for the penny arcade Too shy to advertise a soul to take grievances upon a spirit's hot perversity in heavy metal silver black viscosity Liquid independence sugar-free choked the taste sleeping on rehearsed tongues to take control in metaphorical justice Charlatan adrenaline rebelled, overthrowing blood with directional discretion wavering like water Bells toll in towers of recoiled love holy water sprayed on tenacity's burn genuflecting in the sins of the father sleeping with the enemies sins waking with a brain lapped by tomorrow's legs chasing worth in extinct penny thoughts Nails of falsetto on a swim clawed a scribble in eye's lapses penetrated in unvital organ's ties lyrically dallied on weeping violins shouting on the hills of hallowed Bombay epic criminality in restraints saints and sinners busted the parade Heritage incredulous to old ways slammed the door on parallels Ultimate destruction of direction Smithereens celebrate a raise Snow days on the valley of proximity Why have you not heard from me? The universe absolved my breath faithful death took my curse answers written in tragedy's braille skies opened my eyes to be blinded Hello silence my new friend Underneath a scribble are the almighty elements Circles only lock me in now Thoughts settle on my head like apples whims sparkle like bikini-clad wisdom So unlike the time when knowledge sunk in nothing made no sense until the next voice appeared Dissipate while you still have the choice Flowered queen of shelter self-destructed Adrenaline beat the pants off pride Sojourned peccability into oblivion tempestuous winds burnt my skin in turbulence of history's poetic cries
Charlatan adrenaline rebelled, overthrowing blood
with directional discretion wavering like water
Are you kidding me? that is a great line!!!!
The universe absolved my breath
faithful death took my curse
answers written in tragedy's braille
skies opened my eyes to be blinded
Awesome lines!!!!
Sojourned peccability into oblivion
tempestuous winds burnt my skin
in turbulence of history's poetic cries
Fantastic ending!!!! great collab!!!
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10 Years Ago
Doing the happy dance.....! You've picked a mixture of both our poetry's, Steve is going to be so j.. read moreDoing the happy dance.....! You've picked a mixture of both our poetry's, Steve is going to be so jazz'd too...grazie mille Pat!
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You are welcome....it is art that two made as one and really melded together perfectly, it gave a be.. read moreYou are welcome....it is art that two made as one and really melded together perfectly, it gave a beautiful balance and I hope to read more collabs with you two. :))
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That's so good to hear, you've made my night! Grazie again. :)
Thanks so much Patricia :) We practically wrote it one line at a time, and most of the lines have bo.. read moreThanks so much Patricia :) We practically wrote it one line at a time, and most of the lines have both of us in it :)
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You are very welcome, it is wonderful, it is difficult to tell which one is who because I have follo.. read moreYou are very welcome, it is wonderful, it is difficult to tell which one is who because I have followed Frieda for some time even before I joined here so I thought I would be able to tell which was her words and yours but I can't so that just shows how well you two blended your talents together. I am mystified by the whole collab. I really hope you two do more together. Bravo!
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So glad you enjoyed it :) We've written several of them actually, this being the most recent...some .. read moreSo glad you enjoyed it :) We've written several of them actually, this being the most recent...some are on her profile and some are on mine...we have an awesome time writing together, and we've always had a creative chemistry that neither of us seem to be able to define...I'm sure we will do more :)
Blame it on Benji, it was his idea!! ha.....thanks Simran. :)
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Haha! I don't really know who Benji is, so I might as well tell you so you can do me a favour by tel.. read moreHaha! I don't really know who Benji is, so I might as well tell you so you can do me a favour by telling him that it's really long. :p Whatever, It's a good poem, worth the time. :D
My nickname for Steve, the other poet who wrote this with me....he's a genius really, you should sto.. read moreMy nickname for Steve, the other poet who wrote this with me....he's a genius really, you should stop by his page and visit...Kublakhan27.
Well I guess you two know ya'll killed...honey ya'll bettah WRITE!!!! It continues to trips me out that the two of you literally become one entity when you write and you can't decipher head from booty but I ain't mad. This is the stuff good writer's are inspired by. I'm bowing down and going to write sumpin.
Hmmmm, what does one do when too poor for the penny arcade??? Just ask Frieda and Steve!! Just stay away from the fun house and those mirrors, those abstract images just may blow you away... so boys and girls either save your pennies for the arcade, or keeps your eyes closed til it's safe... won't even try to say more, just ditto AprilRN.... SO Benji, Mrs R, is this all you have to say?? lol... ~~redzone
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10 Years Ago
Haha We said a lot this week my friend, two poems worth, with this one being our longest to date, I'.. read moreHaha We said a lot this week my friend, two poems worth, with this one being our longest to date, I'm still not sure where it all came from...that's how a poor boy passes time I suppose...Mrs.R doesn't like it when I get complacent ;) Thank you Redzone :)
10 Years Ago
Ha I heard whinging coming from the peanut gallery! Thanks Curt, Benji just never shuts the fook up.. read moreHa I heard whinging coming from the peanut gallery! Thanks Curt, Benji just never shuts the fook up....that's what brilliance does. ;)
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HA, the peanut gallery is,as usual, throwing peanuts, clamoring for the next show to begin.. I have .. read moreHA, the peanut gallery is,as usual, throwing peanuts, clamoring for the next show to begin.. I have my pennies, see... so boys and girls, where's Howdy Doody and Buffalo Bob, hopefully not chasing Mr Froggy and his magic twanger.. er... have a nice day... :-p
Hahaha She even hears me from afar my friend...I'm not safe I tell you...well actually she IS the on.. read moreHahaha She even hears me from afar my friend...I'm not safe I tell you...well actually she IS the one that keeps me safe in these parts...she takes good care of me :)
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What are you smokin' Curt ahaha
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I'm sure she does Steve, she is a special woman and you are in good hands...
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..