Our glass...COLLABORATION~ Einstein Noodle & Frieda

"the our glass"

sand

trickles down through glass to those blessed 

soft places of our heart

(relentless as)

a silent presence of finely tuned rushes

our impassioned fire goes down 

in gingerly penned consciousness  

(fire and sand)

words lick salt and sweat;

tongues caress lime and lemon.

time sneaks up 

and bites!

(silk as glass)

poetic dust unfurls

 in mystical yearnings

hushed by staggering imperfections

ink recalls sweet psycho,

 intoxication 'tween the spaces

(your shape)

reason melts into the next encounter

sympathy & tea analogy in braille,

written in symbiotic madness

Author's Note

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

I like this, I think you did a good job on the collaboration -- it sounds very much like one voice. I very much like the first stanza, the final stanza, and the parentheticals. But, what feels out of place to me is the mention of "lime and lemon" -- they're the only images in this that stretch so far beyond the "our glass" metaphor and the rest of the wording that they really stuck out to me. Cheers!

[Frieda P]

I think that's the 'biting' part...thanks so much for your visit and thoughts on our collaboration, muchly appreciated!

[willweb]

This poem was wonderful! You two seem to fit together nice. Thank you Einstein Noodle for the read request. This was really different and I enjoyed reading this today. Great job Frieda P and Einstein Noodle.

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you willweb! glad you enjoyed the read ..
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

Great Freida! How do i love thee.. let me count the times! have to say i am "so jazzed" with your inspirations ... love the video you found!
E.

[Frieda P]

Oh you crazy man, you suggested the song, I just did the leg work, and your first line inspired this joint effort, so take a bow my sweet friend...the pleasure was all mine and then some! Mwah! xo

[ms. barrie]

holy hell Frieda! I think I just been through a poetic cyclone...
this is spectacular!! fire and sand, snake bites...I cannot
copy & paste now, and I haven't read Einstein Noodle' s. writes...
but I'll be back to copy paste my favorites verses that slapped me.
unfortunately, as of now I cannot view the video.

incredible write, vivid firestorm of imagery, flow, just wow!
I'll be sure to visit Einstein Noodle' s. writing but amazing collaboration!!

[Frieda P]

You must visit his page, you won't be disappointed Barrie, his writing is exceptional....thanks so much for your kind words!

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Frieda, I'm sure I won't be! You're very welcome...
was a joy to read...had to catch my breath tho cause of both of your
uses of imageries.

[Einstein Noodle]

ten characters + :)
E.

[redflutterby]

Oh my!! A fabulous poem by two of the most talented writers here with a fantastic song. Loved this...the feel of it and the amazing imagery. Had a nice little groove to it...thanks for putting some dance into my day!! Muah to both of you...xo

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks redflutter .. working with Freida and reading these comments gives me chills :) thank you read morethanks redflutter .. working with Freida and reading these comments gives me chills :) thank you
E.

[Frieda P]

Woo what a stellar review, wish I could save this, thanks muchly Red! x

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Wow you both created a Masterpiece here BRAVO.


I simply love it thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.






(silk as glass)




poetic dust unfurls

in mystical yearnings

hushed by staggering imperfections

ink recalls sweet psycho,

intoxication 'tween the spaces



Makes me think of the Who or Jimmie Hendrix
Pink Floyd Awesome I love the video.


My Parents were Hippies in their days.





Blessings. kindred poet

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much kindred poet, muchly appreciated. Hippie parents, eh? Must be why you're so calm and, joyous...

[Einstein Noodle]

ditto Kindred! and Freida ... i must take this moment in time to say my favorite line is yours .. "hushed by staggering imperfections" .. love love love and peace ..
with flowers of course!
E.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome. It's my Pleasure always. Blessings. kindred poet

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

LOL... Freida I am the calmer one in the family my voice is pretty mellow too :)

[Frieda P]

Haha you're definitely not Italiano then, there is NO mellow. ;-)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

no I am not Ha...Ha I am Spanish and Native American Cherokee bit more but I always say ask if you want to know mellow Yellow your the one HA...HA

[Lyn Anderson]

Seems your wave lengths match others as well -- full of such eclectic and intelligent imagery. After our little convo, I wonder with your apostrologic, would tune'd be tun'd or tuned?

[Frieda P]

Oh man, payback is a b***h...ha I do that automatically now it seems, wasn't meant to be in the collaboration, nice catch! Thanks KL....

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem, a habit is a habit, it beats smoking and bad judgement on men ...:)

[Frieda P]

Guilty on all counts.... ;-P

[Ken Simm.]

We are talking serious coming together here. We are talking excellent metaphor use here. We are talking more than very good. You should both read this to an audience. (Dressed in kaftans, no reason for that in the poem, I just like kaftans).

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, I have the perfect one from Egypt....not sure about E though, grazie mille Ken.

[Einstein Noodle]

have to look up kaftans ... can i wear a bow tie with it?? :)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"the psycho intoxication 'tween spaces" oh that sweet madness..


i like the voices blended in this so sweetly, and how this poem is two poems paralleling each other.
and one of the best songs to represent our time...."time has come today"

back in '68 someone who lived in the dorm across from us, used to aim his speakers out the window and
blast that song...and time really did come those days....
but alas, they left us as the sand ran through the hourglass...and society became bottom heavy..
i feel the symbiotic madness here.

great job you two.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much jacob, E left that first line as a review on one of my poems, and I loved it so much we decided to do a collaboration, so jazz'd you enjoyed, it was a great pleasure working with Einstein, muchly appreciated!

[Einstein Noodle]

the pleasure all mine says i ... thank you jacob! ...
E.