Our glass...COLLABORATION~ Einstein Noodle & Frieda

"the our glass"

sand

trickles down through glass to those blessed 

soft places of our heart

(relentless as)

a silent presence of finely tuned rushes

our impassioned fire goes down 

in gingerly penned consciousness  

(fire and sand)

words lick salt and sweat;

tongues caress lime and lemon.

time sneaks up 

and bites!

(silk as glass)

poetic dust unfurls

 in mystical yearnings

hushed by staggering imperfections

ink recalls sweet psycho,

 intoxication 'tween the spaces

(your shape)

reason melts into the next encounter

sympathy & tea analogy in braille,

written in symbiotic madness

Author's Note

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

I like this, I think you did a good job on the collaboration -- it sounds very much like one voice. I very much like the first stanza, the final stanza, and the parentheticals. But, what feels out of place to me is the mention of "lime and lemon" -- they're the only images in this that stretch so far beyond the "our glass" metaphor and the rest of the wording that they really stuck out to me. Cheers!

[Frieda P]

I think that's the 'biting' part...thanks so much for your visit and thoughts on our collaboration, muchly appreciated!

[Tom]

An intriguing metaphysical contrast and compare of our sense of being, beautifully executed in unifiyingly imaginative and timeless style !

[Frieda P]

SO nice to see you Tom, thanks so much !

[writing mojo]

I love your take on writing within the confines of madness, white walls to color with thought and provoking the dawning with an estranged point of view..it's that easy to spell with your word body suspended in the howl of the moon...

[Frieda P]

Don't we usually write within the confines of madness mojo, thanks for your thoughts!

[Pryde Foltz]

Time does have a way of getting away from us when we with the ones we love. Intoxicating love poem, you two.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Prdye...

[Sami Khalil]

A great collaboration to those who are blessed to read both. Bravo again...:)...............

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Sami, jazz'd you enjoyed :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................

[AprilRN1210]

Wow.... just wow... I love how this blends all the different emotions, thoughts, experiences of a "lifetime" within the glass of "the sands of time" I thoroughly enjoyed.. It is a delightful, moving, thought-proving, teasing piece cleverly written. Great collaboration:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for this glowing review April, muchly appreciated! :-)

[AprilRN1210]

You're very welcome, was my pleasure.

[Bright Ocean Star]

So many sweet lines. How can I choose which to love best? Symbiotic madness might be a good place to start, yet "words lick salt and sweat;
tongues caress lime and lemon.
time sneaks up
and bites!" are deliciously interesting. I have a weakness for licking salt and lemon and lime in the same sentence. It brings thoughts of delicious shots barside in college. Great write!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Star, it was great working with the esteemed E....jazz'd you enjoyed!

[Einstein Noodle]

BOS .. i thank you as well! particularly appreciate the lines you included in your comments are from us both ..
to my dear Freida .. your comments humble me to puddles .. big hugs!
E.

[Frieda P]

Oooh genius puddles, how special...I'll go fetch my Wellies! MWAH! x

[Quill~]

This is like a psychedelic intoxication!
I can't get enough...I love the throw back to the late 60's era...groovy Collab! :)

[Frieda P]

Ha I like that, 'psychedelic intoxication! Thanks Quill...you're pretty groovy yourself :-)

[John Anderson]

beautifully penned poem............

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much John....

[Cory Barrett]

I intended on staying away for the weekend, and then I saw that you two published something. I had to log on to the iPhone an read. I want to express how wonderful this is, but not on the thumb board. Brilliant write you two. Makes me want to so collaboration

[Frieda P]

I feel so honored that you decided to make a pit stop to read us, thanks so much Streamline, enjoy your weekend...and yes, you should try one, they're so much fun to write!

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! also honored you would interrupt your "stay away" .. we all need it now and then .. thank you for the read and comments Streamline .. definitely a positive experience to work with another writer .. we expand and stretch in unsought directions
E.

[A. Amos]

FP now you look like Maryln Monroe:) what water you're drinking...

Great write guys truly enjoyed!

[Frieda P]

It's a special brew, I'm not giving away my secrets. I'm incognito today as someone was going to draw a mustache & beard on my face so who better to be? Haha...thanks, jazz'd you enjoyed A!

[A. Amos]

Always and you're most welcome