Our glass...COLLABORATION~ Einstein Noodle & Frieda

"the our glass"

sand

trickles down through glass to those blessed 

soft places of our heart

(relentless as)

a silent presence of finely tuned rushes

our impassioned fire goes down 

in gingerly penned consciousness  

(fire and sand)

words lick salt and sweat;

tongues caress lime and lemon.

time sneaks up 

and bites!

(silk as glass)

poetic dust unfurls

 in mystical yearnings

hushed by staggering imperfections

ink recalls sweet psycho,

 intoxication 'tween the spaces

(your shape)

reason melts into the next encounter

sympathy & tea analogy in braille,

written in symbiotic madness

Author's Note

Reviews

[DaughterNature]

I like this, I think you did a good job on the collaboration -- it sounds very much like one voice. I very much like the first stanza, the final stanza, and the parentheticals. But, what feels out of place to me is the mention of "lime and lemon" -- they're the only images in this that stretch so far beyond the "our glass" metaphor and the rest of the wording that they really stuck out to me. Cheers!

[Frieda P]

I think that's the 'biting' part...thanks so much for your visit and thoughts on our collaboration, muchly appreciated!

[Zahra]

Great collab with crazy metaphors as expected. Well blended, but let me guess,

words lick salt and sweat;
tongues caress lime and lemon.
time sneaks up
and bites!
(This is E, right?)

poetic dust unfurls
in mystical yearnings
hushed by staggering imperfections
ink recalls sweet psycho,
intoxication 'tween the spaces

Sounds like Frieda. :D
Anyway, amazing work.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

OMG, Frieda I'm speechless. :-)

Kaze~

[Rafia ~ Yellow Girl]

Such a melodious, tinkling piece! Keep sharing such poems. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rafia, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration. :)

[Patricia]

this is a wonderful collab...great style, great rhythm, great lines! WELL DONE DUO!!!!!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Pat!

[Patricia]

You are very welcome :)

[Chris Micha]

Very descriptive in it's metaphors and the video makes it even more beautiful. Truly another masterpiece. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Christian.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was so great you two and your collaboration seamless.Hola chica :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much pazzo, was hoping you'd enjoy this one ;-) E really is a genius too, he left the first line as a review, and we flew with it...

[Vidya Bacchus]

It turned out really great and of course I'd enjoy it .It was penned by two awesome writers .You are welcome chica :)

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks muchly, you're pazzo but a sweetheart! :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol.....compliments are always greatly appreciated :)

[Baby Ricochet]

That is on messed up Our Glass. Good Colab.

[Frieda P]

I'll take messed up as a compliment, thanks Baby!